"Savior: I will remember"

[LarxII]

I fall into this idle cycle
Where just breathing is labor
My thoughts moving in circles
Never completing

I'm growing tired of living
Just wanting to sleep
My energy fades
Slowly depleting

In and out of this dream
I turn for the worst
My mind is going
Quickly fleeting

I reach out,
Hoping someone will grasp
I drop into despair
Blindly reaching

I feel a presence
Someone sees
Will they save me?
Or will I fall?

They reach for me
They grasp
They stumble
Falling with me

We realize we are doomed
Peace settles over
Descending together
Feeling bliss

"Why?" I whisper
"Why risk yourself?"
"Because" A soft voice whispers back
"I care"

We reach bottom
Dark and empty
We cannot move
Nor, can we see

No way out
This is the end
My mind is dead
My heart happy

We hold each other
It grows colder
We close our eyes
Forever sleeping

I reawake
They're no longer with me
It is now bright
In a bustling city

It wasn't a dream
It was too real
I only remember it
For them I feel pity

Left alone in the dark
I was forced away
In my heart
I am guilty

I cared too
I would risk it
Fate, cruel and twisted
Will not allow me

I wonder if they know.
That I would rather the abyss,
With them
And that bliss

Rather the dark
Than the lonely light
With them
In eternal night

I only heard a voice
Felt a touch
Held them close
Yet, I saw their soul

I didn't know them
Not a name or face
But a heart
And grace

They didn't know me
Yet, gave all
To true love,
No matter how blind it was

[TheFarseer]

A really deep and somewhat spiritual work. But if I may, the flow was off. When ever you finish things like this you gotta just read it too yourself. See how well it flows off the tongue.

[LarxII]

I honestly mean for it to be this way. To show that at one time the speaker's thoughts were very abstract yet romantic then later their heart is broken and they have trouble thinking the same way (romantic is usually associated with poetry so the rhyme starts to fall apart near the end intentionally.)

[LarxII]

(romantic is usually associated with poetry so the rhyme starts to fall apart near the end intentionally.)

Not "fall apart" but clutter near the end.

[LarxII]

I honestly wrote this (starting out) based on a dream one of my friends about.

[LarxII]

*Told me about

Sorry for all the mistakes in my posting been working, fraternity, and school. Starts to wear on you when you don't get much sleep.