Advice to a novice writer

[Tobymanic]

Before you read this this has to do with anthropomorphic creatures. If that is not your cup of tea, please refrain from posting scolding remarks. However, I'm fine with constructive criticism.

I'm new here and also new to posting stories or comics on Newgrounds. I haven't anything anywhere else for that matter. But I've been working on a story for a comic for a while now. I'm going to commission an artist to draw a comic using this story. I'm going to tell you a brief opening summary

The story is called "Fur Suit". It's about a persecuted guy in his 20's who wishes become an anthropomorphic being of his imagination living in a world that is more accepting of his affiliation with a community that is often frowned upon and treated with disdain. This young man only finds solace in the communication with others like him online and his love interest.

His life hits rock bottom as he becomes more isolated from those who care. One example is his love interest moving away. It begins to effect his mind to the point that he has these vivid nightmares which sum up how bad his life is. during one of these dreams an apparition familiar to him apears. It is his imaginary anthro counterpart come to mock his pathetic existance...

Sorry for going into way too much detail but he basically makes a "deal with the devil" with a questionable figment of his imagination. Afterwards he finds himself with in an anthropomorphic world as his counterpart. The catch is that he is not dreaming at this point.

In this story, he finds out his dream of being an anthro in an anthro world is actually a nightmare. His actions will bring chaos to his ideal and old world as he fights the natural order of things to keep his dream and himself alive.

[Tobymanic]

dang, sorry for the typos.

[ZeeAk]

Not sure what advice you're looking for us to give to you.
That said, the concept is quite original and if can write it convincingly, without dabbling in too much cliche at the beginning, you could have something fairly interesting and engaging on your hands.

[Tobymanic]

At 1/21/11 08:28 PM, ZeeAk wrote: Not sure what advice you're looking for us to give to you.
That said, the concept is quite original and if can write it convincingly, without dabbling in too much cliche at the beginning, you could have something fairly interesting and engaging on your hands.

Thank you, I might just tell you guys the concepts that lie with in the comic. I just need to know if that is a good idea or not. Also I need to know if some topics in the comic are good or bad to use since people might get sensitive about them.

I'm doing this because I'm paying an artist to draw the comic and i don't want to waste people's time and effort.

Can I post a brief script of the prologue? I want to post it to help you grasp what I'm writing here. Unless this is the wrong part of the forum to post things like this.

[ZeeAk]

At 1/21/11 09:04 PM, Tobymanic wrote: Can I post a brief script of the prologue? I want to post it to help you grasp what I'm writing here. Unless this is the wrong part of the forum to post things like this.

You're in the Writing forum, so go ahead.

[TheFarseer]

Sounds good and all. Though to be honest the whole "persecuted minority" thing doesn't really apply to furries. They are far from the worst sexual fetish on the interwebs. Though this could be a good psych thriller. Hmm, I'll have to read the prologue....

P.S. Most people don't hate furries for the actual fetish. They just get pissed off at the "victim's complex" displayed by some the members.

[rifledark1]

This sounds like a really good plot for that trailer for the sequel to Beauty is Humanity.

[rifledark1]

I have an idea for an ending to your story though:

Perhaps one day a bum goes up to him/her and tells him/her that Jesus Christ Forgives him.

[rifledark1]

Then... He tries to go back in time to find Jesus Christ and shake his hand.