Paying the Piper
Kimlinh "Hnilmik" Tran
[[hello, super old, stupid-wordy screenplay...]]
EXT. NEIGHBORHOOD - STREET - AFTERNOON
It is autumn in this vacant suburban neighborhood and not a
sound could be heard, save for the occasional passing bird.
CARLOS VIDAN, late 20's, a tall black man with a large bulky
build stands idly on the sidewalk with his rounded face
fixed in a neutral expression, framed by the short curly
hair on his head across his cheeks and to his chin.
He doesn't stand out in his purple and yellow striped shirt,
save for his dirty jeans and sneaker. He adjusts his glasses
and the dogtags on his right wrist flashes the light of the descending sun.
In his left hand is a large briefcase.
Carlos's sights are fixed on Jacob's two-story house and he
opens the gate to let himself into Jacob's lawn to walk
briskly to the front door.
(sings "Suicide is Painless")
Through early morning fog I see,
visions of the things to be...
INT. JACOB'S HOUSE - BEDROOM - AFTERNOON
JACOB SWINT, 20's, a lanky-built Asian with black hair, save
for the the front fringes and bangs dyed blond, sorts
through DVD's in a black hoodie on top of his unmade bed. In
his pierced ears are headphones playing music. On the upper
lip of his gaunt face is some light facial hair.
His almond-shaped eyes scan through the DVD titles until he
notices one in particular.
Hello, what do we have here?
Jacob holds up the DVD case and examines it closely. He gets up
and sits on the revolving chair beside his desk.
He rummages through a drawer for a magnifying glass, a pen,
and a piece of paper.
He opens the case and examines the disk with the magnifying
glass before scribbling a note on the paper.
You thought you could fool me, huh?
He scribbles a note on the paper.
That's what you get for buying
cheap movies from some guy off the
street: Crappily pressed disks. I
should've known better when I saw
the cardboard box--He probably
lives in it.
The doorbell rings, but Jacob ignores it and checks the
If the region code is for China,
I'll be pissed...
It keeps ringing until he reluctantly stops writing and
pushes himself away from the desk. He gets up before the
chair crashes against the back wall, where movie posters are
He puts on his dark blue baseball cap, pulls up his loosely
fitting jeans, and leaves the room.
INT. JACOB'S HOUSE - FOYER - AFTERNOON
Jacob walks past an open doorway leading to a terrace and
heads down the stairs as the doorbell keeps ringing. He
unlocks a series of locks, then opens the door. Jacob
stares at the larger Carlos with a sour expression.
What do you want?
I heard you got some DVD's from a
friend of mine.
What's it to you?
Carlos undos one of the latches on his briefcase and a bunch
of DVD's tumble out. Jacob's features light up.
Niiiice! I'll get the DVD's to trade for--
The compartment behind the DVD's also falls out, revealing a
cattle prod. Jacob's face contorts into terror as Carlos
takes the cattle prod and drops the briefcase.
Jacob runs up the stairs and Carlos gives chase. Carlos
quickly keeps up and at the top of the stairs, he jabs the
cattle prod at Jacob, but misses and stabs it into a wall.
Cut off from his room, Jacob runs out onto the terrace.
EXT. JACOB'S HOUSE - TERRACE - AFTERNOON
Jacob scrambles to get away from Carlos and notices he has
nowhere else to run as a railing saves him from nearly
falling over the edge.
Jacob turns around to see Carlos getting rid of the cattle
prod and heading straight for him. The Asian knocks down a
nearby side table and picks up a chair to defend himself.
Screw off! I didn't know your friend was
selling me crappy DVD's!
Carlos rushes in and catches the chair just as Jacob swings
it. Jacob pushes him away and makes a break for the door.
Carlos swings the table and knocks Jacob into a wall.
Jacob is stunned, but recollects himself in time to see
Carlos raise the chair to hit him again. Jacob pushes
himself off the wall to throw himself into Carlos.
Carlos stumbles back and breaks the railing behind him. He
grabs Jacob and the two fall over the edge.