Lifetime (poem)
- dere-kotsu
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dere-kotsu
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I don't want to see you cry,
Because I love you
If your tears start to fly
I will cry, too.
I want to see your smile
When I'm feeling down
Because it clears up the sky
And shows a rainbow
My heart keeps telling me
What I want to say to you...
I want to be with you
Always and forever
You''re a vision that brightens the night
I'll travel miles and miles
Just to see your face
Because being by myself isn't my true fate
A chance like that only happens once a lifetime.
- HDGhastly
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HDGhastly
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:3 That's pretty good. The only advice I can give you is try keeping the same rhythm when writing poems. It's an easier read when you have a nice steady flow.
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Nice nice... But yes, I agree with the dude above - work with the flow.
