The Hollow Woman

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Note; I actually wrote this intro when I was high, but that doesnt excuse it since I checked over it and changed the obvious mistakes. Here is the first part of the story;

The basic premise is about the Fairy god mother, and the struggles she goes through.

Bedroom I

Eaten by an iceberg

Within the Teenage-Girl's dreams, she was the misunderstood Princess, clinging onto the star-board of the Titanic waiting for her Prince to rescue her. But there was no prince, only the Big-Bad-Wolf.

The fearsome Wolf was large, grey and soaked in red. It had already chewed to pieces all of the other passengers, and now it craved her flesh. The Teenager clung tighter to the ship which now began to drift through the air, and then it flew over the world, which caused the girl to tumble backwards, back onto the ship's deck.

The bloody wolf was coming. It's wet sticky tongue emerged, and lopped up all her tears, salty; now it hungered for the rest, her blood, her arteries and the blue liquorice in-between.
BANG!! Fired a pistol, its silver coils snapping away. The little Girl looked up from her tears to see the fairy god mother blasting the hound with ruby bullets. The bullets cut through the fiend, so it died.

Then the fairy god mother; so beautiful, so youthful, so flawless- was leaving as quickly and as abrupt as she arrived.
"But wait, who are you?" cried the Girl. "I really want to be like you".

[ZeeAk]

There's a terrible lack of context in this story. You refer to the Titanic, but then it gets lost completely when you bring up the Big Bad Wolf. I know it's supposed to be a dream, but even they have context.
This it far too short and far too confusing to be enjoyable.

[ZeeAk]

At 1/7/11 09:15 AM, ZeeAk wrote: This it far too short and far too confusing to be enjoyable.

This is*

[Scribblytriangle]

Well it was a free verse introduction along with Bedroom 2. It would be revealed too be the ending of a story which is 15 pages long. And that section was missing some ship imagery in the latter stages, you were right.
However a friend has just informed me the main plot is ripped off a goosebumps story, and I checked it up and he was right. So its gone forever.