so i wanted to share a song i wrote

[NapalmDTH]

Bludgeoning
Iv waited to see you suffer for so
long now Iv dreamed of you in agony every night
and have awoken every mourning unsatisfied knowing that your still out there unpunished
today my dream became a reality
I couldn't stand to see you smile anymore so I cut your lips
and watched you spew blood from your mouth
putting you through hell
has become my paradise
multiple skull fractures from all my hate
your brain is drowning in blood
with my tight grip on your blood stained hair
I'm dragging your face through the dirt a red trail leads to your grave site
I wont have the courtesy to bury you
ill simply leave you in the cold dirt bleeding breathing but barely conscious
I'm going to watch the life fade from your eyes
don't you wish we could take it back?
I hope as you slip into oblivion
you regret burning the bridge
while I was still on it
hopelessly lost in the flames
as it begins to rain I look at the corpse that was once you
and I reflect on your broken promises
I said I would stay by your side and here I am now
seeing this through to the end
I'm sorry for taking your life but ill never regret it
goodbye my dear and burn in hell

Yea i was pretty pissed off when i wrote this a while back, i pretty much still am some times. but anyways tell me what you guys think, i think its a good song, some parts i would like to change but i dont know what to replace them with