Animation Suggestion

[SteakandKidneyPie]

I am in the process of making a collaborative animation with fifty-50. I will be doing the animation while he creates the backgrounds. Anyway, I have created one scene for the animation already, so please tell me if anything is in need of editing.

Also, I have not put in the background yet so there is no need to suggest that.

The end of the scene is when the clouds loop

http://www.newgrounds.com/dump/item/2564 2ec5e2a5e4825ccb0f52fabc8bb4

Here is something else I made a while back, just for extra entertainment

http://www.newgrounds.com/dump/item/e77b 5ba1adbcf49c34bd4ece8752438b

[InfinityAnonymous]

So you are working from the airplane piece as far as I can tell?

[SteakandKidneyPie]

Yes, though this is not the first scene. To start the first scene, I need the character design for when fifty-50 has finished.

[Blounty]

Jeez why did he choose to work with you.

[BlackClown]

At 12/18/10 12:31 PM, Blounty wrote: Jeez why did he choose to work with you.

Dude, you are a total dick. But in the fact that you have a point.

[mythicman95]

Here I've posted a few things that could help in certain scenarios:
Comedy - Have a bird grind through the engine
Drama - Either Lose some of the Color, or Make every outline a little bolder.
Horror - N/A
Suspense - Involve a fast paced sideground such as Mountaintops etc...

Hope that I helped!

[Fifty-50]

At 12/18/10 12:31 PM, Blounty wrote: Jeez why did he choose to work with you.

Nothing is wrong with a duo of of stupid kids is there now?

[CloudEater]

At 12/18/10 05:06 PM, Fifty-50 wrote:

At 12/18/10 12:31 PM, Blounty wrote: Jeez why did he choose to work with you.

Nothing is wrong with a duo of of stupid kids is there now?

The difference in stupidity and artistic knowledge is extremely large.

[BlackClown]

Never ride around on an intoxicated equine. Your horse is totally high. Get off it.

[Sam]

Am I just watching a loop of a plane move up and down?

I can see you've used some sort of texture on the colouring, which is quite nice. I'm not a fan of the blue, rough lines. Reminds me a lot of spy fox for some reason.

Clean up the line art unless you want to keep that style. I'd also suggest instead of blue to go for a darker grey or lineless. The spinning engine doesn't look neat at all, I don't get the sense of "fast moving", but rather "rushed and unfinished". Use some god damn ease on that plane.

[MickHarrison]

first thing, don't have the plane bobble up and down
a) planes don't do that
b) it makes the loop rather jarring, the clouds are
more subtly shaped and coloured therefore less noticably looped

[IxionAerospark]

I agree on the point that the bobbing up and down of the aeroplane ruins the whole realistic style of the plane as they dont do that and it would probably be more effective if you had feint wind blasts going past the plane to further show its actually moving becacause from what i can see its easy to mistake the plane being stationary ant the clouds rushing by it becuse of yet again the bobbing up n down

[00-BEN-00]

maybe the plane shouldn't be completely visible, scale it a bit, it'll give it more depth.
you could also maybe add some higher, more transparent clouds. The shot would look more interesting.

[Damien]

Here's a hint for ya.

Start all over again.