A Fantasy Story

[Artessius]

I am presently getting a story together for a flash animation and would like some help on it if possible. It follows three adventurers, a warrior, a thief, and a mage, on their quest to stop the villian from tapping into the power of the mana well and (you guessed it) conquering the world. I've cut the story down to its' bare minimum in that discription, so its a bit more in depth then it seems, but if anyone could give some tips, or some constructive critisism it would be most appreciated.

[TheThing]

In order to get any help, you would need to post the script you're using, or a much more detailed overview of the plot. We can't help you if all post are the basics of your story.

[Artessius]

Okay then, a more detailed outline.

Once every millenia or so, a celestial alignment causes an abnormality in the flow of mana. This flow allows for someone of great power, with proper preparations, to tap into the great mana well* at the top of the world. A dark being has spent decades preparing for this event, lengthening its life and building up its mana immunity**. With the discovery of an ancient artifact meant to dispell such a force, it falls upon a young mage to make his way to the top of the world, and stop the events that are sure to pass if the dark being is left unchecked.

*Mana Well- A large mana vent***
**Mana Immunity- Amount of mana one person can absorb at once
***Mana Vent-Mana created in the center of the world that escapes up thru cracks in the planet's crust

[Optimisticperson]

this is the idea i have.

It starts out with the thief stealing a very valuable object and being chased by a very muscular young man (soon to be knight). The chase keeps going til they are hoping from roof to roof and the soon to be knight tackles the thief. They crash through a roof into the mage's house. The mage then trys to recruit them for the mission. Convinces the knight with a honorable reputation and the thief with money.

there is your intro.

[Artessius]

I should probably say now that i have the beginning and end, its the middle im working though, that and a script.

For the beginning, the mage is sent to retreive an artifact found in an archeological expedition that has been requisitioned for inspection to detect any magical properties. The thief is on a mission for the thieves guild to steal the same artifact, but is caught and sent to hang. The fighter is in a tavern and is approached by some thugs, he starts a barfight and slips out the back, but is followed by one of the thugs. In the ensuing chase, he runs into, and saves the thief. The two later run into the mage, who asks the them to escort him back to the spire (the main base of operation for all mages) , the fighter agrees because he is getting paid, and the thief now indebted to the fighter (and seeing the opertunity to steal some magical artifact) goes along as well.

I have the backrounds for the characters as well, but i wont get into that now to spare you from a lengthy post