The Enchanted Cave 2
Delve into a strange cave with a seemingly endless supply of treasure, strategically choos
4.36 / 5.00 33,851 ViewsGhostbusters B.I.P.
COMPLETE edition of the interactive "choose next panel" comic
4.09 / 5.00 12,195 ViewsA rough first chapter
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Knocturne
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I'm not much for writing but I have quite a few ideas (pretty close to amalgamations of things I've seen/read).
Here's a rough first chapter I wrote
http://knocturne.deviantart.com/#/d33a1t b
It's pretty wordy so bear with me. Do you think it has potential? In what way can I improve?
Who is the hunter?
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Sorry I couldn't bare with you. It had great vivid descriptions and details but it took a long while to get much of anywhere, and I closed out of the page before it could. I figure I'm just impatient today, I'll probably read the WHOLE thing another time. I'm also too excited for my book I'm writing. I'll probably post the first chapter in a link.
"Life is like a dice game; one roll can land you in jail or cuttin' cake blowin kisses in the rice rain" - Jay Electronica
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Well thanks anyway, I guess part of the lesson is to strip away some detail
Who is the hunter?
