Intro Critique

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Hello, i just wanted some critique and opinions on my work. It's a new story i'm writing. I have a finished novel if anyone is interested.

Southern Cross

"No one listens, everyone one fights." Apoca whispered as he stood over Agito's half dead body.
"Always fighting never listening."
Agito looked up at his step-brother, his glowing eyes penetrating the darkness of the cold German cobble stone road.
"They never listen to each other." Apoca said as gazed at the street full of corpses.
"They only listen to the clergy. They listen to god."
Agito gripped the ground, trying to rise from the wet path.
"But what kind of god would let his creation kill it self? Why doesn't he say something? Why doesn't he tell us the truth?"
Apoca said as he spread his arms to the air, tilting his head back as thunder roared in the distance.

"MAYBE THERE IS NO GOD! MAYBE WE'VE BEEN LIED TO OUR ENTIRE LIVES!" Apoca yelled to the air, lightning passed through the heavens as his voice ripped through the streets.
Agito's breath was heavy, his fingers numb from loss of blood, the gash on his chest as open as a church door.
"People crave answers, but are you satisfied if the answers are wrong? How do you know something is wrong if everyone says its right?"
Agito looked at his step brother as the rain started to pour down from above.
Apoca looked down at him and smiled, "Brother, it starts with the world being round, then the world revolving around the sun."
"Then piece by piece, the Clergy loses control."

[TheRedRocks]

I like it! Its perfect for a beginning intro! It almost dragged me into the story wanting to find our more.... I think you should keep going.

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