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A good fuck... (Nsfw) 2010-07-25 12:08:44

Ok, so here is the first story i ever did... i know the English isn't great, but its the substance that counts... right? /10 rating please :)

We were sitting on the couch talking, then, her voice started to sound, seductive, soon, I had a raging
boner in my pants at the thoughts of copulating with her, then she mounted me, on top of me, her
bosoms close to my face, her hand on the back of my head, pulling me closer, her pussy almost grinding against my raging cock, everything screaming at me to unzip my pants and fuck her, instead, i sit their, doing everything i can to abstain.

As she begins to rub her georgeous body from head to to, from her perfect DD breasts, to her finely sculpted ass, and over every single curve in between, she grabs my bands, and places the on her buttocks, my cock screams at me "FUCK HER NOW" i resisted it, barely, she whispers, "squeeze" i do, she thrusts forwards, pushing my face into her warm breasts, moaning with pleasure, she lowers her pussy, and begins to grind it against my jeans, i grunt with pleasure, doing everything i can to abstain and resist! But alas, it was an uphill struggle, as i helplessly watched my hands still squeezing, as she raised herself, and unzipped my trousers, and removed my pants, revealing my throbbng shaft, i was at her mercy, a moment of silence, she locked her lips onto mine. then she thrusted hard, burying my shaft in side of her, her tight pussy gripping and squeezing my shaft, her rhythmic thrusts and intense moans made it an almost overwhelming experience... Her kiss became more aggrssive, i saw her eyes open and roll upwards, as she relentlessly thrusted, within seconds my hips began to convulse, thrusting to meet her the both of us moaning extremely loudly, her thrusts became more aggressive, i realised that she was cumming, and hard, her moans became sharper, then with one almighty thrust, she broke the kiss, and we both came simultaneously, sreaming at the top of our lungs in pleasure... And her juices squirted onto my shaft, my balls tightening, my load shooting deep into her womb.

She collapsed onto me, the both of us panting, after a minute, she raised herself off of my shaft, and whispered in my ear, "would you like to go again, sweetie?" my shaft answered for me, rising to the occasion to prod her pussy, she smiled and said, "i thought so" this time, she started thrusting, gently this time, her body, a distance from mine, i could see her breasts bounce beautifully with each thrust, my lust skyrocketed, at that instance, i moved forward, and began to suck her perfect tits, she pulled my head in hard, making it clear that she loved it, as she purred my balls began to tighten again... i moaned into her breasts, she knew that i was cumming, but was not going to let me yet, she reached down with her free hand and tightly gripped the base of my shaft, and began to thrust harder, our moans became louder, and soon we were at the same pace of relentless thrusts as before, my mouth still sucking at her teet, my tongue tweaking her nipple. he grip on my shaft tightened, her thrusts became more aggressive, her hand pulled me into her harder, she unleashed a loud scream as her second orgasm washed over her, she pulled away, releasing my shaft, and my head from her grip. she looked down and realised that she had not let me cum this time, although there was already a very large mix of mine and her love juices.

She gave me a apologetic look, which quickly changed to a look of desire, she slid down my body until her mouth was level with my still erect cock, she took it in a gentle grip and stroked it, gently, then harder, my hips convulsed, and with that, she forced me back into the seat, and her lips moved to the bottom of my shaft, taking the entirety of my 6.5 inch shaft into her mouth, sucking hard, moaning and making loud slurping noises, i could barely handle it, if she wasn't holding my arms down, i would have grabbed her hair and fucked her hard in the face, but it would not have been as good a feeling of her tongue swirling around the head of my shaft, as she sucked harder and her head bobbed up and down faster, i was moaning loudly now, my balls tightening cum shooting from my shaft into her mouth, she moaned, and eagerly swallowed every last drop, and proceeded to suck it clean, at this point, i couldn't handle any more of this, and couldn't move any more... my head laid back, panting loudly, i said through gasping breaths, "We have to do this again some time" to which she responded in a satisfied tone "Any time..." We continued to fuck like this regularly, sometimes more that 7 times a week, needless to say, we ended up married, 2 kids, but throughout all that, we never stopped the vigorous regular fucking... FIN

Note: I am only 15 and shouldn't righting stuff like this but fuck it... it's my way of getting rid of some excess lust.

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Response to A good fuck... (Nsfw) 2010-07-25 17:09:32

If this were a comedy piece it'd be 10/10 since it probably gave me the best laugh of my life, but unfortunately you sound very serious which makes it one of the worst pieces I've ever read.

Your spelling is pretty average and stands room for improvement while your grammar and use of punctuation is non-extant other than commas. I'm guessing this was typed with your massive boner since you couldn't take the time to capitalize "I" or the first letter of sentences.

Aside from that your scene description was pretty much limited to "thrust," "hard" and "fifteen". Words like "pussy" and "cock" won't do a story any justice and just provide poor and vulgar imagery. To begin with I'd suggest you write something sensible when you're not satisfying a raging hard on, and pick something you know about. The only thing I can assume is that you were trying to write something to masturbate to, which is awesomely funny.

But hey, thanks for the details of your penis and fantasies, it was great for a laugh.

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Response to A good fuck... (Nsfw) 2010-07-26 04:05:55

D...D..AMN!THATs FINE!


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Response to A good fuck... (Nsfw) 2010-07-26 06:21:16

At 7/25/10 12:08 PM, OMGhaxedlol wrote: Note: I am only 15 and shouldn't righting stuff like this but fuck it... it's my way of getting rid of some excess lust.

If you have excess lust, just
beat it and get it out of your system. Works for the rest of humanity.

As for the actual story, RabidSquirrelStudios took the words out of my mouth. This story reminded me of Welcome to the NHK when the protagonist attempted to write a porn script, but slowly devolves into typing "swollen" over and over again. A good read if you have $119 for a used copy.

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Response to A good fuck... (Nsfw) 2010-07-26 17:29:32

Seriously this needs more attention, it's the funniest thing I've ever read.

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Response to A good fuck... (Nsfw) 2010-07-26 22:36:36

Silly 15 year old, women dont have cats inside their pants. I dont know what fairy tells have been told to you.

Also, this is a VERY well done story. 10/10. Nice job!

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Response to A good fuck... (Nsfw) 2010-07-28 00:35:50

At 7/25/10 12:08 PM, OMGhaxedlol wrote:

:grinding against my raging cock, everything screaming at me to unzip my pants and fuck her, instead, i sit their, doing everything i can to abstain.

Grammar/ spell fail.

Also, immature and unprofessional. Go look at the Hentai Bliss series. I am not one for porn or Hentai, as it brings disappointment of society to me, but it is very well done.

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Response to A good fuck... (Nsfw) 2010-07-30 07:36:55

At 7/25/10 12:08 PM, OMGhaxedlol wrote: Note: I am only 15 and shouldn't righting stuff like this but fuck it... it's my way of getting rid of some excess lust.

Until you can learn to control your lust, give the erotica a miss. We really don't want to have to read what a teenager gets off to (most things with pulses, as I recall)


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