keioss01's Suicide Note

[keioss01]

I was hoping I'd get to see Heaven. Sadly, I fear taking my own life is the surest exit from Hell. I remember from school, the humiliation and glory of peer perception. It would seem the temperament we carry ourselves with is the greatest deception. If only I had cared about what others thought... If only I hadn't been so clever and smart. Then maybe I'd find the happiness that others have. Everyone has found solace in the system of conformity... But not me. I have found my inner peace and I attain it only in dream. I have few outlets - may this pen be mightier than the sword. I researched sepukko, ironically, as relevant to my interests as it is - it would make more sense that I have chosen another route. Maybe it's because I don't even have a sword... Maybe it's because I didn't wana leave a mess. I know what it's like to have to clean something dirty. I thought all about how my suicide note would be about making others feel bad... But now, I'm doing my best to keep my mother from being sad. I love everyone. I love you. I love it when people make me smile, even though I get mad at myself because of it - I'm not mad at you. Never let your feelings fool you, Never let a fool tell you what to do. Never think of me as an example to follow... I have no wish to be a leader to any of you. Always stay true to yourself, don't build a mask of lies... Don't even cry when somebody like me dies. If I'm not real, then it had meant nothing anyway. I've already popped a dozen pills... This steal glock is cocked. This me saying goodbye... my life is now unlocked.

[Painbringer]

I hope that's just poetry you're writing.

[MonkeyV]

I believe this is fiction, but understandably I'm going to hold back from criticism until that's confirmed.

[WrightOnTarget]

Dude, you misspelled steel, you misspelled the EASY way to spell it.

Also, if this is real, why would you buy a stainless steel Glock to kill yourself with? Shoulda gotten a Hi-Point. Then again, you're probably twelve, don't have access to guns, and this is just poetry, or a cry for a attention.

Also, too rhymed to be real, in my humble opinion. Why even leave fucking suicide notes? Just makes people hurt, and you won't be there to relish in it.

[Loki]

At 7/20/10 07:13 PM, Painbringer wrote: I hope that's just poetry you're writing.

Because obviously, people that kill themselves go to hell anyways. So it has to be fiction.

[kazumazkan]

please let this be fake or a poem

[keioss01]

Hey everyone, just letting you know that yes I wrote the note for hypothetical reasons.

I'm still alive.

I was really trying to see and conceive my own personal suicide note.

And that's what i came up with. I wasn't trying to be funny and it wasn't a joke...

[Niallmcfc]

At 7/21/10 02:30 PM, keioss01 wrote: Hey everyone, just letting you know that yes I wrote the note for hypothetical reasons.

I'm still alive.

I was really trying to see and conceive my own personal suicide note.

And that's what i came up with. I wasn't trying to be funny and it wasn't a joke...

Remember kids : Don't smoke?

SO in case you do decide to end it you've written your own personal suicide note...

Always look on the bright side of life...

[MonkeyV]

Alright now that I know this isn't a real thing, on with the criticism:

I do this a lot myself, but I think you used way too many ellipses (...). They're good sometimes, but after a while they just make the writing way too dramatic-sounding.

But then again what else can you expect from a suicide note?

Ehh... I want to point out that it sounds a bit 'whiny' at times, but again, what else can you really expect from a suicide note?

Anyway, I guess it's good for what it is.

I guess I'm biased to not like suicide notes (even just as a form of literature). Given that suicide is one of the most selfish things a person can do, that attitude tends to show itself through the writing.

[sinfulwolf]

At 7/21/10 04:04 PM, MonkeyV wrote:

I guess I'm biased to not like suicide notes (even just as a form of literature). Given that suicide is one of the most selfish things a person can do, that attitude tends to show itself through the writing.

I agree here. Suicide is quite possibly one of the most selfish actions I can think of, and it really showed through in this particular "piece".

[EZ98]

damn i thought something exciting on the fourms would happen!

[JohnEndel959]

At 7/21/10 02:30 PM, keioss01 wrote: Hey everyone, just letting you know that yes I wrote the note for hypothetical reasons.

I'm still alive.

I was really trying to see and conceive my own personal suicide note.

And that's what i came up with. I wasn't trying to be funny and it wasn't a joke...

So you wrote a hypothetical suicide note to see what it would be? That's morbid, man. Follow it up with a hypothetical "everything is great" note!

[Supasang]

At 7/21/10 02:30 PM, keioss01 wrote: Hey everyone, just letting you know that yes I wrote the note for hypothetical reasons.

I'm still alive.

I was really trying to see and conceive my own personal suicide note.

And that's what i came up with. I wasn't trying to be funny and it wasn't a joke...

GLaDOs is happy your Still Alive

[PH4NT0M117]

funny thing that relates to this, i used to write death notes at my desk in my room, and my mom found one of them. all i wanted to do was see how serious i could be in my writings, and she took me seriously. as it turned out, she finally confronted me and i laughed my ass off and explained it to her, i was grounded for a week................... dammit