Robotday2010 Writing Entry -fatkid-

[FatKidWitAJetPak]

ENTRY FOR 2010 ROBOT DAY -FatKidWitAJetPak-

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The Iron Beast

There once was a city just covered in ash.
Everywhere you'd look you'd see the trash.
Like the gang bangers and the homeless too,
Every single one of them involved in a crew.
They were crews of destruction, absolute induction,
Female abductions and violent eruptions.
The public, did not appreciate
The way the gangs littered the streets with hate

A man, sitting on the streets
Looked up and said, looking quite beat
Who will save us, where and why?
The only thing that comes to mind is something from the sky.
Something that's true, I don't want lies.
I want to see it with my very own eyes.
Can it be done? Can it exist?
I'm pretty sure I don't want to wait for Jesus

Just then, something from the clouds
Whizzed around and landed on the ground
It was unexplainable, totally irrational
Absolutely crazy and totally improbable
Some described it as a glistening block
As they saw his shooting flames spread through the lot
His extravagant metal gleamed in the sun
He must have weighed ten thousand tons

A gang nearby looked up in fear
They'd never seen anything like that here
It kneeled before them with an iron glare
All they could do was freeze and stare
It slowly looked up, peered at a man
He grabbed his body then he threw him into the sand

They started to run, they started to hide
The iron god, made a roar of delight
He swished his twin hooks from within his back
And began to slice gangs with his big red sack
The sharp pointy hooks that he swished through the air
Clutched onto a man, grabbing his hair
The iron beast twirled him, whirled him around
Then he slammed his body onto the ground

His body broke, his legs did twist
Blood gushed from his body and went into a mist
A rocket glared, into the night
Then it came, within the robots sight
He saw it fast, he examined it nice
He reversed its direction and they called out CHRIST
It went into the car, causing an implosion
2 seconds later followed an explosion

The robot jumped over walls of fire
He only went up, higher and higher
Until he was but a twinkle in the sky
Then what came next simply terrified
A large ring of blue emerged in the air
And a bright white light began to snare
The men of the gangs with their AK47s
Their uzis and guns and 7 / 11's

The twinkling star, headed towards the fight
And every single man gasped in its might
By the time the thugs, ran for cover
Everything, was already over

Miles away, where fireflies danced
And all the animals silently slept
A little rabbit, protected in his shroud
Witnessed the shape of a mushroom cloud
The entire sky was covered with a hue
A hue of yellow, orange and blue
The trees swished backwards and the ground shook
As the tiny city started to cook

When everything was over and the town was dull
Little boys and girls emerged from their hole
Sewers opened and shops unbarred
Was this the end of the vicious war?
They gazed, into the white thick smoke
To see the mayor, Mr Tom Fulp
Sitting in the middle of the grey city block
Inside a red and black, vicious robot
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*also he had a very large cock*

I am thinking of making this into a rap. Any suggestions? For now, this is officially my entry for the writing portion of ROBOT DAY. I hope you enjoy it!

Comments, suggestions, porn tapes, whatever, are appreciated!

[tailsrules1278]

I think you could turn this into a rap song and maybe if you're good with Flash too, make it like a music video! Your poetry and rhymes are outstanding!

[SteakandKidneyPie]

That is so great,
I could not match,
I really can't wait,
Til all is attached.

When I said attached, I mean that I can not wait until they are all submitted

[FatKidWitAJetPak]

At 6/5/10 11:18 PM, SteakandKidneyPie wrote: That is so great,
I could not match,
I really can't wait,
Til all is attached.

When I said attached, I mean that I can not wait until they are all submitted

I cant wait either until all the others are submitted... but what happens if there arent any other submitted? Lol.

[Makeshift]

A have one thing to ask,
Before I go to bed.
Why haven't you posted this,
In the contest thread?

[Makeshift]

Fuck. Never mind, I see it there now.

[SteakandKidneyPie]

I cant wait either until all the others are submitted... but what happens if there arent any other submitted? Lol.

I might be submitting, so I am not sure. By the way that is a really good poem.

[FatKidWitAJetPak]

At 6/5/10 11:30 PM, Makeshift wrote: Fuck. Never mind, I see it there now.

You shouldnt feel bad
I do tell
For I was quite mad
I did fail
You see I sent this
sent to MC
Asking where to Dis'
This poetry
Then I saw later
The thread
Where all the better
Is fed

And by better I mean the better poems for the robot day.... hopefully including mine.. lol im shaking in suspense. Im the first one on there so I dont know what sort of competition I will get. It should be fun to see the other entries, I cant wait!

[Makeshift]

At 6/5/10 11:39 PM, FatKidWitAJetPak wrote: And by better I mean the better poems for the robot day.... hopefully including mine.. lol im shaking in suspense. Im the first one on there so I dont know what sort of competition I will get. It should be fun to see the other entries, I cant wait!

Well I was going to do a poem style story like you did but about something different. I kind of got excited when I saw yours because I thought maybe mine wouldn't be allowed, but I'm sure they won't let down TWO poem/stories, riiight?

Do you mind if I'm doing the same style as you? I probably wouldn't format it the same because I'd like to look as unique as possible.

[FatKidWitAJetPak]

Do you mind if I'm doing the same style as you? I probably wouldn't format it the same because I'd like to look as unique as possible.

I got your PM, yeah man we should do a collab ahah, just send me a few samples and lets get started,

[Makeshift]

At 6/6/10 12:03 AM, FatKidWitAJetPak wrote:

Do you mind if I'm doing the same style as you? I probably wouldn't format it the same because I'd like to look as unique as possible.

I got your PM, yeah man we should do a collab ahah, just send me a few samples and lets get started,

I am confused,
I do not recall,
Sending a message,
To you at all.

Although this may be,
I'd like to suggest,
That we unite,
And come out as best.

We will write of robots,
As a pair,
And win us the prize,
Of money to share.

So you wanna collaborate?

[TrevorW]

Poem/stories fall into the form of pose poems. They are very simple in design and tell a story. Usually meter is still appropriated and such things as injunction are greatly payed attention to.

[FatKidWitAJetPak]

I dont feel like making a poem as a post
Fuck you

DOH, my bad man for some readon I thought you were someone else. Man do I feel lame.

Anyway,you could collaborate with steak and I, but the prize would be small if we win. I dont care though lol it would be fun writing it!

Want to collaborate with us? Send me a PM. I am writing the first part of the poem, about 14 lines, he is writing the second, and you could write the third! :)

Interested?

At 6/6/10 12:16 AM, Makeshift wrote:

At 6/6/10 12:03 AM, FatKidWitAJetPak wrote:

Do you mind if I'm doing the same style as you? I probably wouldn't format it the same because I'd like to look as unique as possible.

I got your PM, yeah man we should do a collab ahah, just send me a few samples and lets get started,

I am confused,
I do not recall,
Sending a message,
To you at all.

Although this may be,
I'd like to suggest,
That we unite,
And come out as best.

We will write of robots,
As a pair,
And win us the prize,
Of money to share.

So you wanna collaborate?

[FatKidWitAJetPak]

Whooowee! The thread is finally bringing in more competition! WritersBlock's poem is kickass, and some of the other stories are awesome to. Where do you think my poem stands currently in all that writing? I hope they dont mind its a poem.

[SteakandKidneyPie]

I do not know. I still think you have a huge chance. I do not really know how it will go, they are both very good.

Good Luck anyway

[FatKidWitAJetPak]

At 6/23/10 05:26 PM, SteakandKidneyPie wrote: I do not know. I still think you have a huge chance. I do not really know how it will go, they are both very good.

Good Luck anyway

Lol, the sex one was just a joke. Some of the short stories are really awesome. However, I dont mind if I dont win. This was really fun for me. Thanks for the collab btw.

[SteakandKidneyPie]

At 6/24/10 12:52 AM, FatKidWitAJetPak wrote:

Good Luck anyway

Lol, the sex one was just a joke. Some of the short stories are really awesome. However, I dont mind if I dont win. This was really fun for me. Thanks for the collab btw.

I meant Writers Block and your Iron Beast. I knew the other one was a joke. lol