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maplemydickcuntface
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sanity 2010-06-01 23:22:05 Reply

Normal

Normal is just a word
meaningless
and disrupt.
Some would say it's tranquility,
ask me
and i'll say "corrupt."
Corrupt as in it takes your mind
and turns it in to mush.

You have no free will
to do what some
might find
strange.
In my opinion
they are the insane ones.
They are the ones
who absent mindedly
obide by society's rule.
The fools that they are.

So let them do as they will.
Let them fall
in the pit
they dug for
themselves
every time they looked down
on another
human being,
for doing something they
defined as
"abnormal."

Damn them,
damn them all.

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Response to sanity 2010-06-02 02:34:28 Reply

I liked it, it seemed very judgemental, but not in a bad way. I liked the structure of it too, it was quite enjoyable.


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Response to sanity 2010-06-02 22:37:03 Reply

It's quite bold in its simplicity. Personally, i would twist a topic like this into something elaborate and cryptic, but, your blunt style and direct approach has really brought out your frustration.

I like it. I personally, enjoy poetry with more obsucre meaning and tact, but, none the less, i think you did a good job. well done!