An appreciation on Life

[permaximum1]

Well here is an essay that i wrote and recently submitted to my schools literary magizine. It got accepted and was published i was surprised and would like to see what people think about it. So basically what i am asking is just read it and critique thank you and i hope your enjoy it.

Everywhere you go on this planet there is life in one form or another, from the thermal vents at the bottom of the ocean, to the frozen ice land that is Antarctica. This world teems with life, and yet we rarely take time to appreciate life.
We live on a planet that is ideal for life to exist. We live in a universe where the four fundamental forces exist in such a way as to allow life. The four forces are: gravity, electromagnetism, the weak nuclear force, and the strong nuclear force. If, for example, one force was absent life would not exist. The weak nuclear force enables the reactions that turn neutrons into protons- without that, complex chemistry could not exist.
The weak nuclear force causes beta decay. This means that it causes a proton to decay into a neutron and vice versa. Beta decay is key to complex chemistry because it is what allows elements to become other elements. Another main thing that the weak nuclear force does is provide the fuel for nuclear fission which is how stars burn. Without it there is no deuterium, which is two protons fused together. With no deuterium to fuse together and become helium stars cannot burn. So each of these forces is very important to life.
Even our solar system's position in the galaxy is ideal. If our solar system were closer to the galactic center than the giant black hole that is there would inevitably cause some disturbance. Lastly the position of our planet is ideal for life. Closer to the sun and our water would boil, farther away and our water would be permanently frozen. If we didn't have large outer planets to shield us from asteroids life would not have enough time to form. The list goes on and on but it's clear Earth's position is ideal for life.
A human is composed of trillions of cells, and one cell has multiple parts. In every cell there is DNA, the basic building block of life. It is composed of many atoms bonded together. One of these atoms is hydrogen, which is also the simplest atom. It is made up of a single proton and a single electron. An electron is not composed of anything else, as far as we know. But a proton is made up of two up quarks and a down quark, and quarks are made of things called preons. Go even farther down and everything is a result of very minute strings vibrating in space. I am not even going to attempt to explain string theory because I can not even begin to comprehend it. But the basic premise is that the vibrations of these strings gives rise to certain particles.
Next time you are outside look up at the sky into the universe beyond, and realize how vast and awe inspiring it is. After that look down to your hand; look past your skin deeper into your cells and realize how complex you truly are.

[JohnEndel959]

I liked it, and it does seem perfect for a school newspaper, but it seemed like, at times, you were just listing facts. At the end you tied it all together with the night sky thing, but it seemed more like a paper than a literary work. I'm not judging, just suggesting.

[permaximum1]

At 5/25/10 01:18 PM, JohnEndel959 wrote: I liked it, and it does seem perfect for a school newspaper, but it seemed like, at times, you were just listing facts. At the end you tied it all together with the night sky thing, but it seemed more like a paper than a literary work. I'm not judging, just suggesting.

Ya i can see where u are coming from. I tried to make it more interesting than anything. I am experiment with working science ideas into a form of literature.