my first piece

[xTY3x]

this is the first complete piece i've ever done (i mean drawn and colored with photoshop). i'm trying to work on his story and maybe i could start a comic series. tell me everything

[J-qb]

At 5/14/10 10:23 AM, xTY3x wrote: this is the first complete piece i've ever done (i mean drawn and colored with photoshop). i'm trying to work on his story and maybe i could start a comic series. tell me everything

Quite an okay piece you have there. Nice style, I like the shading; I can never get that all black shading to work. The drawing style of the severed head (medusa?) doesnt really seem to match that of the guy holding it though. Id personally make the hair a bit more angled and less scribbly.

I like the hand; that looks really convincing. There are some weird shadows on his paints that I cant really place.

I like how you tried something different for the guys head; but I think it could use some more work design wise; at the moment it looks a bit like a dumb guy; which I dont think he is supposed to be.

[xTY3x]

At 5/14/10 10:35 AM, J-qb wrote:

At 5/14/10 10:23 AM, xTY3x wrote: this is the first complete piece i've ever done (i mean drawn and colored with photoshop). i'm trying to work on his story and maybe i could start a comic series. tell me everything

Quite an okay piece you have there. Nice style, I like the shading; I can never get that all black shading to work. The drawing style of the severed head (medusa?) doesnt really seem to match that of the guy holding it though. Id personally make the hair a bit more angled and less scribbly.

I like the hand; that looks really convincing. There are some weird shadows on his paints that I cant really place.

I like how you tried something different for the guys head; but I think it could use some more work design wise; at the moment it looks a bit like a dumb guy; which I dont think he is supposed to be.

thank you. i agree with you about the erinni's hair (yes i know it's a strange demonic creature from greek mythology, but i'm italian and we're all into this fuckin weird ancient stuff so forgive me), they're too scribbly and curved. that shadow on the pants is explained by the light hitting the upper-left side of the folds so that makes the opposite side be dark. unfortunatly by mistake i deleted the pdf image and i don't grant any modify to be that accurate.
i know, that charachter may seem dumb, but that's because he doesn't have any emotion, he's the personification of reason.
also as you said i tried an unusual design for the head in order to give him a special trait (maybe i should've said he's not human). as you see he doesn't even have ears. i thank you for that advice, but i think i won't change that since i love too much that square head.
p.s. i'm sorry if my english isn't perfect, but i hope you'll understand the difficulty of talking about shadows, light angles ecc.

[test-object]

At 5/14/10 10:35 AM, J-qb wrote: Quite an okay piece you have there. Nice style, I like the shading; I can never get that all black shading to work. The drawing style of the severed head (medusa?) doesnt really seem to match that of the guy holding it though. Id personally make the hair a bit more angled and less scribbly.

If he actually were holding the Medusa head that way, the hair would form an almost straight line.

[xTY3x]

If he actually were holding the Medusa head that way, the hair would form an almost straight line.

yes, but he's just raised it, so it's still moving

[bigjonny13]

His arms seem off putting to me due to them being straight and jagged, they should be smoothed out. Also, the wrist needs to dip in smaller and then spread back out for the hand.

[xTY3x]

At 5/15/10 11:28 AM, big-jonny-13 wrote: His arms seem off putting to me due to them being straight and jagged, they should be smoothed out. Also, the wrist needs to dip in smaller and then spread back out for the hand.

i made them straight on pourpose, that's my typical stroke. about the wrist, he's supposed to be stocky and a little heavy: if i have drawn it your way it would've been too thin, being in contrast with his structure

[xTY3x]

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[ZagmenO]

I like it! It's nice and colorful. I guess it could use more detail, but if cartoony is what you're going for, and it most likely is, then you've pulled if off!

[bigjonny13]

At 5/15/10 02:37 PM, xTY3x wrote: i made them straight on pourpose, that's my typical stroke. about the wrist, he's supposed to be stocky and a little heavy: if i have drawn it your way it would've been too thin, being in contrast with his structure

Ah, okay, that makes sense then. But looking back at it now, his left hand should be a bit bigger, because at the moment, it's smaller than his right hand.

[xTY3x]

Ah, okay, that makes sense then. But looking back at it now, his left hand should be a bit bigger, because at the moment, it's smaller than his right hand.

maybe you're right, but unfortunatly as you probably read above i don't have the psd image and it'll be very difficult to make that change. however i'm working on other pieces and i'll post them soon trying to follow your advices

[misagi]

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