At 6/11/10 04:24 AM, PeterBarton wrote:
I finished my submission. Should be in your google wave account, gumOnShoe.
I'll get to it, but its toward the end of my queue atm.
I did read 4 more stories this evening beyond what I had already read. I'm sorry if I'm going out of order at this point but I'm doing my best to crank through these.
I am focusing on those stories that were posted on wave. it would be a great help if you would literally post it on wave as text and not as an attachment as I can then edit/markup and respond in wave. That said, I am still reading those with attachments on wave first. I will get to my inbox after I finish those.
I am sad to say I was not able to accept anything I read tonight in its current state. All works needed heavy revision and several were full of the exact kind of errors I warned about. Things to watch out for:
1) Make sure your subject agrees with your verb
2) Make sure you write in one tense, correctly
3) Avoid the passive voice, please!
4) Do not get so absorbed in your plot that you forget you are writing about characters.
5) Don't submit something you just wrote, edit it first.
6) Try to use a grammar checker, it will find something.
7) Make sure your opening is both interesting and enlightening. After about 5 paragraphs I should be intrigued beyond belief and at least slightly familiar with who the main character is or what the main plot point is. The point is, there should be something there for me to latch onto in order to understand the world I'm entering into. Call it a hook, call it setting or characterization or liquid awesome... I don't care; just make sure it is there.
8) Do not under any circumstances contradict your all knowing narrator by having that narrator say something else
9) Be specific rather than vague.
10) Show instead of telling