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Critque please 2010-03-27 23:50:19 Reply

Well, I made this flash as a commercial for my new school. it took about a week of 50 minute blocks. That's sort of a bit for this low quality, but please tell me what you think. Positive and negative critique is welcome.


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Response to Critque please 2010-03-29 02:32:32 Reply

Well, I guess it is ok? Nothing really impressive though.

You really have to work on your drawing.


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Response to Critque please 2010-03-29 06:31:31 Reply

Idk what you want me to compare it to. Compared to a lot of average kids that go to high school and use Flash once in a while... well, then its average. Compared to ppl who have a passion for drawing in flash, its pretty much garbage. It's just whatever spectrum you want it to be looked at.


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Response to Critque please 2010-03-29 07:09:39 Reply

I like how the woman moonwalks sideways.


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Response to Critque please 2010-03-29 11:35:15 Reply

The green shirt that he (?) is wearing reads "2012" when he walks past.
Then when he comes into the frame again it reads "2011". Awful.

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Response to Critque please 2010-03-29 11:36:40 Reply

At 3/29/10 07:09 AM, Deadclever23 wrote: I like how the woman moonwalks sideways.

It was a woman? But the voice...

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Response to Critque please 2010-03-29 16:47:10 Reply

My artwork in flash can be better, I just used the school's mouse, plus I made it quickly. Thanks for that much though. Also, I didn't really say this, but I wanted to know if it was an improvement from my previous flashes.


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Response to Critque please 2010-03-29 17:13:40 Reply

It obviously is.


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Response to Critque please 2010-03-30 01:35:41 Reply

At 3/29/10 11:36 AM, PabMo wrote:
At 3/29/10 07:09 AM, Deadclever23 wrote: I like how the woman moonwalks sideways.
It was a woman? But the voice...

Trap


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Response to Critque please 2010-03-30 02:14:08 Reply

The background and final text needs to be fixed up. I think it would be easier having them both on a flat plane instead of an awkward slant.