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Shortmonkey v Dubbi v Ponz 2010-03-22 21:09:43 Reply

Topic: Nightingale (Satire)

I am forcing you guys to write a satire...try your best!

1 day to write
2 days thereafter to vote


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Response to Shortmonkey v Dubbi v Ponz 2010-03-23 02:58:34 Reply

tis be first again. i had to look up nightingale and satire. lol

///birdbrain///

oh you fly;
that must be fun

you live in the same house as a bum

you eat worms;
oh that's so yum

that reside in the earth
the grime and the grum

life of leisure;
aerobatic features

oh;
such a wonderful creature

summer, fall
you leave in cold seasons

but we call you a bird brain for a reason

lol idk...i kinda felt bad talking about a bird like that for no reason.


Oh yeaaa

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Response to Shortmonkey v Dubbi v Ponz 2010-03-23 05:38:02 Reply

This satirical poem is about the male nightingale and how the males sang and were mistaken for females. Read about it here (there's only a small mention of it). Yeah, I had to research too, Ponz.

The Nightingale's Frustration

How could you mistake me for a lady?
My trills and curdles are quite masculine
Beauty and passion can be manly
But the night songstress, you all name me

I'm hunting for company in this twilight
For company of a lady, not a man!
Just because I'm still going, and it's now daylight
Does not mean I'm a lady...
I'm just not a pretty sight

Go ahead, laugh at my misfortune
But please, don't mistake my gender
The truth has been effected by distortion
When will this dreadful nightmare end?

Years have passed, technology advanced
Now my time has come
My old title will be abolished
Night songstress forgotten once and for all

Humans will distinguish me from a woman
The world will see the light
So trill I will, with pride and passion
Here I go with all my might!


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Response to Shortmonkey v Dubbi v Ponz 2010-03-23 20:15:03 Reply

Not my greatest form, but it gets the point across...

Obama

Oh, nightingale, sweet nightingale
Can you fetch me my ale?
For the white house gets lonely
And for Uranus, I want to set sale
Yes, birdie, I'm drunk, so very drunk
So very drunk and pale
But it's hard to destroy a nation
Without drinking a gallon of ale
So with a beer, health care
Is passed, oh do I dare,
Even though it's not fair?
Oh, but I don't care.
It's time to turn the
Once great US into a
Nightmare


I'd rather learn from one bird how to sing
Than teach 10,000 stars how not to dance.
-- ee cummings

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Response to Shortmonkey v Dubbi v Ponz 2010-03-23 20:29:20 Reply

Good entries, competitors. Now let the voting begin!


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Response to Shortmonkey v Dubbi v Ponz 2010-03-23 20:37:42 Reply

I vote Shortmonkey


Excellent

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Response to Shortmonkey v Dubbi v Ponz 2010-03-23 20:56:24 Reply

At 3/23/10 08:37 PM, Birdbeard wrote: I vote Shortmonkey

Thank you for the vote!

ShortMonkey - 1
Dubbi - 0
Ponz - 0


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Response to Shortmonkey v Dubbi v Ponz 2010-03-23 22:42:16 Reply

Short monkey gets my vote. It was more satirical, or if anything it made me crack a smile


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Response to Shortmonkey v Dubbi v Ponz 2010-03-25 21:03:25 Reply

Well, that's it. It's been 2 days. I would have liked to see more votes but anyway, looks like I win, 2-0-0.

My thoughts on the other contestant's poems:

Ponz, to be honest, your poem was pretty terrible. Definitely not as good as your others.

Dubbi, your poem really had nothing to do with the aim of this contest, but it was a good poem with a good message.


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Response to Shortmonkey v Dubbi v Ponz 2010-03-25 21:04:55 Reply

At 3/23/10 10:42 PM, TheSubject666 wrote: Short monkey gets my vote. It was more satirical, or if anything it made me crack a smile

Oh, forgot to say, thanks for the vote!


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Response to Shortmonkey v Dubbi v Ponz 2010-03-25 21:16:33 Reply

ShortMonkey's got my vote. It struck me as the most satirical.


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Response to Shortmonkey v Dubbi v Ponz 2010-03-25 21:18:00 Reply

I'm going to extend this battle by two days in order to get more votes in.


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Response to Shortmonkey v Dubbi v Ponz 2010-03-25 21:18:08 Reply

My bad. I didn't know it was over, heh.


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Response to Shortmonkey v Dubbi v Ponz 2010-03-25 23:58:21 Reply

At 3/25/10 09:18 PM, zachdamacman wrote: My bad. I didn't know it was over, heh.

Doesn't matter - Trevor extended the voting period for two more days. Thank you for the vote!

ShortMonkey - 3
Dubbi - 0
Ponz - 0

that's right, I'm taking it, lol

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Response to Shortmonkey v Dubbi v Ponz 2010-03-26 03:58:03 Reply

More votes, PEEPAL!!!


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Response to Shortmonkey v Dubbi v Ponz 2010-03-28 12:29:02 Reply

Great job new guy! /rubs hair into a tangled mess


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Response to Shortmonkey v Dubbi v Ponz 2010-03-28 18:30:23 Reply

At 3/28/10 12:29 PM, TrevorW wrote: Great job new guy! /rubs hair into a tangled mess

Lol, thanks! I still would have liked to see more votes, even if it was for the other contestants, but I'm glad about the win.

Better luck next time to Ponz and Dubbi. It was a fun match and we may battle it out again sometime!


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Response to Shortmonkey v Dubbi v Ponz 2010-03-29 21:21:36 Reply

I vote Ponz, it was my kinda poem...


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Response to Shortmonkey v Dubbi v Ponz 2010-03-29 21:58:35 Reply

At 3/29/10 09:21 PM, SuperGerbal wrote: I vote Ponz, it was my kinda poem...

Battle has ended. Sorry!


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Response to Shortmonkey v Dubbi v Ponz 2010-04-03 19:55:28 Reply

At 3/25/10 09:03 PM, ShortMonkey wrote: Well, that's it. It's been 2 days. I would have liked to see more votes but anyway, looks like I win, 2-0-0.

Dubbi, your poem really had nothing to do with the aim of this contest, but it was a good poem with a good message.

Eh, I don't really understand satire. I thought I was satiring Obama.... Anyway, good battle!


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Than teach 10,000 stars how not to dance.
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