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Response to Improving one of my pieces. 2010-02-22 20:00:51 Reply

Ok then so:
- horizon line on the middle of the sword
- resize background when I move the horizon line
- refine sketch
- ink and color
- last minute changes
- submit to newgrounds!

Is that little list right? Thanks for all the help you have given me.

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Response to Improving one of my pieces. 2010-02-22 20:06:40 Reply

At 2/22/10 08:00 PM, Mabelma wrote: Ok then so:
- horizon line on the middle of the sword
- resize background when I move the horizon line
- refine sketch
- ink and color
- last minute changes
- submit to newgrounds!

Is that little list right? Thanks for all the help you have given me.

sounds about right, although I would suggest posting the final up here in the art forum about a day before you put it to the portal.
this way we can give it one last look over before we send you on your way :P

It's always good to have a second pair of eyes, or a dozen pair of eyes, to catch any last mistakes.

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Response to Improving one of my pieces. 2010-02-22 20:14:50 Reply

Yeah I'm going to do that. Don't worry about it.

Quick question, do you think that this could get on thr frontpage? Or atleast get a someone to scout me? I really want to grow as an artist/animator but if I get known I know people will give me more comments and I can improve a lot more. This has been a great experience and I have learned a lot. All thanks to you guys especially you Kinsei.

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Response to Improving one of my pieces. 2010-02-22 20:24:23 Reply

At 2/22/10 08:14 PM, Mabelma wrote: Yeah I'm going to do that. Don't worry about it.

Quick question, do you think that this could get on thr frontpage? Or atleast get a someone to scout me? I really want to grow as an artist/animator but if I get known I know people will give me more comments and I can improve a lot more. This has been a great experience and I have learned a lot. All thanks to you guys especially you Kinsei.

don't thank me too much :P

>.>....

but it could, you never know, I mean the banana-crocodile thing got front pages, so I guess it all depends if the right person see it o.0.....
but stick around here for your still art and we'll show you all kinds of tricks.


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Response to Improving one of my pieces. 2010-02-22 20:32:29 Reply

I will surely so. You deserve all those thanks and many mores. I hope someone like TF, JU, or someone like that sees it when I post it ip and likes it and at least comments on it. I know I will learn all sorts of new things from you guys. Besides if I want to be a great animator I need to make great still art first.

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Response to Improving one of my pieces. 2010-02-22 21:14:57 Reply

Dies anyone has any other comments so far about the piece? Hope you like it guys and please comment. Thanks in advance.

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Response to Improving one of my pieces. 2010-02-23 22:38:53 Reply

Sorry for the lacks of updates. I've been really caught up with school work and things like that but I will update as soon as I can. Hope to see some comments about the piece so far, hope you like it.

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Response to Improving one of my pieces. 2010-02-23 22:41:42 Reply

At 2/23/10 10:38 PM, Mabelma wrote: Sorry for the lacks of updates.

it's understandable, we all have lives that exist outside the art forum....
well except me...... I live by the coffee machine in the crawl space under the stairs


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Response to Improving one of my pieces. 2010-02-23 22:44:33 Reply

So that's what I was hearing under my stairs, I'll send you some cookies later so
you don't starve, LOL.

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Response to Improving one of my pieces. 2010-02-23 22:46:02 Reply

At 2/23/10 10:44 PM, Mabelma wrote: So that's what I was hearing under my stairs, I'll send you some cookies later so
you don't starve, LOL.

eh, I savage on cats..... mostly.......
by the way, I'm sorry about Mr. Cuddles.... he fought bravely......

mmm taste just like chicken....

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Response to Improving one of my pieces. 2010-02-23 22:51:27 Reply

Don't worry about it, cuddles was the annoying neighbors cat so thank you
but don't eAt my dogs and I might consider moving you to the attic.

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Response to Improving one of my pieces. 2010-02-24 22:20:43 Reply

Almost done guys, I'm just adding some details to the background and refining it a bit. I should be posting something tomorrow right after I add some base colors to the background. Hope you like everything so far, Comments are greatly appreciated.

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Response to Improving one of my pieces. 2010-02-24 22:37:40 Reply

At 2/24/10 10:20 PM, Mabelma wrote: Almost done guys, I'm just adding some details to the background and refining it a bit. I should be posting something tomorrow right after I add some base colors to the background. Hope you like everything so far, Comments are greatly appreciated.

ok we'll be expecting something great.


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Response to Improving one of my pieces. 2010-02-25 13:43:47 Reply

Awesome, I'll post it today.

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Response to Improving one of my pieces. 2010-02-25 14:59:02 Reply

So far so good? Does are just the base colors, I will fix everything you tell me is wrong and then change a few colors and shade. Comments are greatly appreciated and hope you like everything, so far. I should be done tomorrow or this weekend.

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Response to Improving one of my pieces. 2010-02-25 15:09:33 Reply

At 2/25/10 02:59 PM, Mabelma wrote: So far so good? Does are just the base colors, I will fix everything you tell me is wrong and then change a few colors and shade. Comments are greatly appreciated and hope you like everything, so far. I should be done tomorrow or this weekend.

just make sure you clean up the lines, they dont looks too good compared to the characters, the colours on the tree dont reach the linework, and make sure the shadows on the ground correspond with all the other shading and the light source

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Response to Improving one of my pieces. 2010-02-25 15:24:09 Reply

I will clean the lines and the colors there are just there to show you how I plan to color them so don't worry about that. I will fix the issues with the colors but does the design look good? I will let you guys decide whether or not it looks good and please suggest things to make the background better.

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Response to Improving one of my pieces. 2010-02-25 16:54:02 Reply

Thoughts? This is the most difficult part for me because I suck at making backgrounds so please help me as much as you can, Thanks in advance. Hope you like it.

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Response to Improving one of my pieces. 2010-02-25 17:10:28 Reply

looks really good, needs some shadows on the ground, from the people

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Response to Improving one of my pieces. 2010-02-25 17:12:52 Reply

Really, that's good to hear. I'll go add those shades.

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Response to Improving one of my pieces. 2010-02-25 17:26:10 Reply

Added the shades on the ground for the characters, Hope you like it. Critics are always appreciated.

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Response to Improving one of my pieces. 2010-02-25 19:24:34 Reply

What do you guys think about it so far?

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Response to Improving one of my pieces. 2010-02-25 19:28:16 Reply

At 2/25/10 07:24 PM, Mabelma wrote: What do you guys think about it so far?

well almost done.... but tI think the shadows on the ground need to be at just a little bit more angle to the right...


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Response to Improving one of my pieces. 2010-02-25 19:30:12 Reply

The character's shadows? Do you like the background? Is everything good so far? Do you think I should add anything else to make it better? Personal thoughts on it?

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Response to Improving one of my pieces. 2010-02-25 19:31:35 Reply

At 2/25/10 07:30 PM, Mabelma wrote: The character's shadows? Do you like the background? Is everything good so far? Do you think I should add anything else to make it better? Personal thoughts on it?

I like the background, I think it is simplistic but effective.


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Response to Improving one of my pieces. 2010-02-25 19:37:47 Reply

Awesome but what shadows should I fix? What do you think about the piece? Would you wrote a mini review about it? Imagine that you are a member who is visiting the piece for the first time and you wanted to comment on it. Just write like I it was the first time you've seen it.

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Response to Improving one of my pieces. 2010-02-25 19:46:43 Reply

At 2/25/10 07:37 PM, Mabelma wrote: Awesome but what shadows should I fix? What do you think about the piece? Would you wrote a mini review about it? Imagine that you are a member who is visiting the piece for the first time and you wanted to comment on it. Just write like I it was the first time you've seen it.

ok...

here goes

I feel that the shadows cast from the character are angled wrong. I feel they need to be more to the right to match the light source. the chosen colors have a very lighthearted feel about them. I think for this piece and it's content are appropriate for each other. The composition of the piece feels balanced but almost too much, perhaps some clouds could break it up a little


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Response to Improving one of my pieces. 2010-02-25 19:52:02 Reply

I will fix those shadows, don't worry about it. I'll add some clouds. Let me give it a try. I'll post something tomorrow. Thanks for the review. Do you think that once I fix that I will be done?

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Response to Improving one of my pieces. 2010-02-25 19:56:48 Reply

At 2/25/10 07:52 PM, Mabelma wrote: Thanks for the review. Do you think that once I fix that I will be done?

I think I would call that to be pretty much done
what does everyone else thing?


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Response to Improving one of my pieces. 2010-02-25 20:05:49 Reply

I would love to hear more comments besides yours Kensai. I hope someone else posts.