Gonna be my first post..

[Kixen]

http://www.newgrounds.com/dump/item/139e cd6af61820502352c1e935076dd2 tell me what you think, also please don't steal, it's unfinished gonna add more lyp syc, and a little more story.. It's not that funny until end wich isn't done.. just tell me what you think.

[JustinWatkins]

lmao. This looks good. (: I can't wait to see the finished product.

[Kixen]

Thank you very much.

[Damien]

Yeh that was hilarious!

Needs more BG and better fonts. Also...Fuck the censoring xD
Makes it look kinda dull =(

[Kixen]

I know this sounds bad, but my mom doesn't let me swear.....otherwise i would... And i might add a background, im just really bad at them

[Mexifry]

Tbh it needs work.

First issue I have is the line quality.
The line weight is really inconsistent and makes the drawings alot worse than they could be.
Don't be afraid to zoom in 400% to draw your lines.

Second, fix up the VA work because the volume goes from way too quiet to blowing out my speakers.
The voices for the characters changed after the whispering which made no sense.
Also a random script doesn't equal a funny script. Try to think of a coherent story.

Third, their needs to be backgrounds, Cause a white screen is really boring. Also the animation is really choppy and the mouth color when he is going through the air keeps on changing colors.

If this is your first animation ever than its all right, but the things I mentioned are things to look after.

[Damien]

At 2/8/10 01:19 AM, Mexifry wrote: Second, fix up the VA work because the volume goes from way too quiet to blowing out my speakers.
The voices for the characters changed after the whispering which made no sense.
Also a random script doesn't equal a funny script. Try to think of a coherent story.

I thought it was funny though.

AND I WANT TO HEAR FUCK GODDAMNIT

And yeh the line quality...Meh. I STILL WOULD VOTE 3 ON THAT SHIT.

[Kixen]

Alright, thank you for the criticism

[Rabid-Turtle]

That was pretty good, bro.
Couldn't help but smile at the way the duck walked.

Other than what has already been said,
'S pretty good.
The only thing that bothered me was the fact that his exhale didn't fade out completely.
You might want to check that out.

[Kixen]

Thanks everyone! Im glad you liked what was done so far! Ill get it done along with another thing im working on. i might be able to post this, this weekend!

[the-muffinman]

If your not going to use swearing you should just take out the "censored" thing and replace it with a different word. Or even keep the censored but at least take out that weird noise it makes man

[Ani-x]

There is no point in censoring your self, either curse or don't. Censorship for the sake of doing it is not really funny, nor does it add anything (often takes away)
So if you are not allowed to curse, Then don't. and replace it. Or if you want to curse but don't want get in trouble, make 2 versions, one you show your family and one you show the world.

Pretty funny though, Could use work as others mentioned.

[Starogre]

Yea the censoring is strange and fix up the spelling errors and match the subtitles to the voices perfectly. Otherwise, I liked it, thought it was funny and barely hearing them was kinda funny as well as you can just read the subtitles. It emphasizes how quiet they are talking. I donno, i thought it was good...

[duhidiot]

You have to submit this when its finished. Its funny as hell.

"Yeah, cool. But why we whispering?" " Cuz theres mexicans over there..."
..... "I believ that is racist"

Lol'd.

[Kixen]

okay, Thanks everyone! I didn't think i would recieve so much feedback!

I guess i'll lower the volume of when the rocket crashed, And bump up the whispering just a tad!

Anyways i would love some more feedback and comments, i like to hear what you people have to say!

[Ani-x]

At 2/11/10 04:21 PM, tainted-dark wrote: okay, Thanks everyone! I didn't think i would recieve so much feedback!

I guess i'll lower the volume of when the rocket crashed, And bump up the whispering just a tad!

Anyways i would love some more feedback and comments, i like to hear what you people have to say!

a little tip i learned that may help.
When you are done with your animation and all the sounds are in.(assuming they are on there own layer)
go to export>Movie>WAV Audio
Now save that. Open the audio you just saved in a audio editor ( i used Audacity)
from there you can see the entire levels of all the sounds, here you can adjust the volumes and such to make sure all is leveled out and such.
Now when you are done, save it.
Go back to flash then go to Import>the sound you just saved.
Put it on its own layer.
This will not only help save file size of the movie, but will also force the flash player to make sure all the audio is on sync.

[Kixen]

ya my audio is on different layers. im just going to import a few sound effects and voice acting and bump up and lower, just tweak and mess around with it until it works, a little better.

[Kixen]

decided not to post it guys, i found it rather kiddish and stupid.. Frankly cause im a kid.

[Damien]

At 2/12/10 11:38 PM, tainted-dark wrote: decided not to post it guys, i found it rather kiddish and stupid.. Frankly cause im a kid.

Seriously dude. If you follow the advice the people gave you...It's definatly worth a 3.00 or some shit.

And perhaps some backgrounds might help ^^

If that's not already said....Im too lazy to re-read it.

[Kixen]

Idk, the audio seems pretty bad, ill see what i can do.. I might post it, but im not really sure yet, i guess ill do what i can and post it, It doesn't matter if it gets blammed i guess

[bl00db47h]

Maybe post the finished product here first to see if people like it?

[Kixen]

Sounds like a plan!

[duhidiot]

At 2/13/10 04:02 PM, tainted-dark wrote: Sounds like a plan!

Yeah? SO DO IT ALREADY!

[Zyphonee]

The style is pretty dandy, but I personally don't like the lip sync too much, it is a bit annoying, I really think you should fix it, the lower part of their beak moving up and down seems a bit unrealistic, you should most likely put the beak in a separate layer and make the movement in FBF

[Kixen]

At 2/16/10 02:55 PM, duhidiot wrote:

At 2/13/10 04:02 PM, tainted-dark wrote: Sounds like a plan!

Yeah? SO DO IT ALREADY!

My computer is broken! i'm trying to fix it!