Need Feedback for Cutscene

[UknownXL]

I need feedback on my cutscene. The voice actors have not finished the voices yet so the gaps where nothing is happening is most likely because I plan to add the voices in. So please take a look and let me know what you guys think. Please leave constructive criticism.

http://www.swfcabin.com/open/1265579442

[DillonBrannick]

Overall it's good, I think you should do actually animate the walking and when the guy is flicking the needle you should fix up that finger

[Psychofig]

I think the shadows are a bit too overdone. You're probably going for a dark look, and that's fine, but you shouldn't have smoothed shadows and thin, unsmoothed lines in one face. The style is decent I guess, although without voices, I had no clue what the hell was going on.

Looks better than 80% of the other crap on Newgrounds though.

[DethPickle]

I like your style, I'd say make sure it stays consistent throughout though. Like in the beginning there's a lot of shadows and they have a lil more blur around them but then it looks like you switched to hard lines later on. But anyways nice dark look to it. Maybe animate the guy walking a lil more and also I can tell later that he's wearing glasses but I say touch them up a lil bit when he first looks up at the camera because I though he just had huge creepy white eyes. Keep up the good work.

[UknownXL]

Here I fixed up the animation.
http://www.swfcabin.com/open/1265596074

also I made a loading screen.
I would like feedback on it as well.

http://www.swfcabin.com/open/1265596142

[UknownXL]

Feedback plz.

[zrb]

At 2/8/10 01:11 PM, UknownXL wrote: Feedback plz.

I like the loader,sounds remind me of MGS.

[ShadowEagle]

At 2/7/10 06:12 PM, jfig111 wrote: I think the shadows are a bit too overdone. You're probably going for a dark look, and that's fine, but you shouldn't have smoothed shadows and thin, unsmoothed lines in one face. The style is decent I guess, although without voices, I had no clue what the hell was going on.

Looks better than 80% of the other crap on Newgrounds though.

i definetly agree with what he said, there are alot of shadows which make the physical features of the characters ahrd to see, and i would like to hear some of the voiceover work. if you need another voiceover guy contact me. i've done professional work.

[UknownXL]

I sent you a Pm