UnknownFear's Stories

[UnknownFear]

I have never really written a short story before, but I have had amazing ideas about some so this thread will be my stories for all of you to see. Hopefully they are good :)

=//=After School Detention=//=
Genre: Horror/Sexual :P

It was 1:30 PM, half an hour more and than school would be over for the weekend. Jacob was so excited the day was almost over! His college girlfriend Jennifer was coming home from Montreal for the weekend, and he especially couldn't wait as it was their one year anniversary Saturday. He made reservations at a nice fancy restaurant, had tickets for a romantic comedy, than they were going to spend the whole weekend at his place, with Jacob's parents gone for the weekend. He was so anxious he was getting hard just thinking about it.

Jacob was in the 10th grade at Applewood High, along with one of his best friends who he's known since the 5th grade, Boddy Jones. Bobby Jones was a good kid, a 75% average in all his classes, but not the most popular kid in school. He had a terrible stutter that would often get him picked on. Bobby sat across from Jacob, and he was doing his work when a paper airplane landed on his desk. He looked at it and unfolded it to find a note:

yu-yu-your a stupid little st-st-stuttering asshole!!

He looked back and saw a group of 3 kids laughing at him. Bobby started to get upset and he yelled back at them, "Fu-fu-fuck off y-y-you ja-jerks!!". They looked at him and they were pissed. They came up to his desk, and Jacob got in-between. "Leave him alone you fucking losers!!" they punched Jacob in the mouth. Jacob was red with rage. He tackled one kid against a desk, breaking his arm. Mrs. Bridget, the teacher, made Jacob stay after school for fighting even though the other kids started it. The fucking kids didn't even get in trouble.

It was not 3:00 and Jacob was in the class room, reading his book, waiting for his detention to be over. He had no idea when that time would be. Mrs. Bridget said he had to wait in the classroom till sh said so, and she said it in a very weird tone and a creepy smile. A few minutes passed and Jacob had to go to the bathroom. He went to the door, opened it and walked out. The hall way was pitch black, with just the lights of the EXIT signs posted above the two double doors. He made his way to the bathroom and did his business. On his way out, he noticed a faint glow under the door of the Teacher's Lounge room. He went up to the door, pressed his head against the cold door, and listened. Faint moaning sounds came from inside, sounds of a women. But it sounded different somehow.

Jacob slowly turned the door knob and opened it just a crack and peered in. He saw Mrs. Bridget, naked and lying on a table. There was long, blackish tentacles coming out of her back and going in and out of her. It was like her vagina was sucking the blackish thing deep inside of her and letting it out. There was one going deep inside her anus, along with her ears. The sight made Jacob gasp and just than, Mrs. Bridget froze and looked towards the door. Their eyes met, and she smiled a weird, raor-sharp grin and him. He closed the door and ran towards the douby, le doors. Mrs. Bridget burst through the Teacher's Lounge door and saw him trying to leave the school. She thrust a tentacle at Jacob and it latched onto his legs, making him triple and fall, hitting his head on the floor. Disoriented, Jacob realized he was being pulled across the floor towards Mrs. Bridget, her smile widening. He stared up at her, white as a ghost and wet himself. Mrs. Bridget looked down at Jacob and said "I told you not to leave the classroom", in a sweet yet creepy voice. "Now you'll really face the consequences". Jacob's screams echoed through out the empty school.

[JackDCurleo]

What the hell? that was just weird, thats really all I can say, it was fairly well written, the end of the first paragraph where it said: those fucking kids didn't even get in trouble, was a little breaking in the narration though because it wouldn't make sense for the narrator to side with the protagonist unless its from his perspective or a friends.

[UnknownFear]

At 1/31/10 03:11 PM, JackDGreatest wrote: What the hell? that was just weird, thats really all I can say, it was fairly well written, the end of the first paragraph where it said: those fucking kids didn't even get in trouble, was a little breaking in the narration though because it wouldn't make sense for the narrator to side with the protagonist unless its from his perspective or a friends.

True. My bad. I read a lot of Stephen King books and short stories so I kind of wanted to do one in his style. Glad you found it weird, though :)

[Dubbi]

I really liked it, a story from a forum hasn't caused me to laugh this hard in quite some time. "He was so anxious he was getting hard just thinking about it.", epic win!

By the way, read my story, A nod returned.

[UnknownFear]

At 1/31/10 03:54 PM, Dubbi wrote: I really liked it, a story from a forum hasn't caused me to laugh this hard in quite some time. "He was so anxious he was getting hard just thinking about it.", epic win!

Thanks :)