Humanity

[Dragyli123]

This is the beginning of the second part of Humanity, please give constructive criticism.

Part 2-Big City Nights

They left for China on Monday, June 24. Their plane was a good hour late, as most planes are, so they spent their time joking around and eating dried fish. The plane ride was rather uneventful until the cockpit reported that someone nearly bombed it, but the bomb was not activated because he left out a wire and was caught soon after. They arrived in Tianjin in the afternoon, intending to spend the night there and go to Beijing the next day.

The instant they got out of the Tianjin airport, two policemen stopped them.

"Show us your passports." One of them demanded roughly in Chinese.

Akiran took the passports out of his pocket and showed them to the policemen.

"Take them." The policeman who spoke commanded to the other one.

"What? Why?" Akiran asked, surprised.

"Your passport is of the country Japan. Hers is of the People's Republic of China. Therefore, you do not have the right to have her in your care. Since she is not an adult, she must have an older family member with her." The policeman smirked, "And you have none."

"Who are you kidding? She is my sister! Can't you tell by the name?" Akiran cried.

"It does not matter. The People's Republic of China does not accept Japanese passports." The policeman said, grabbing Akiran's arm and snapped his wrists in a set of handcuffs.

"Damn it! What is wrong with you? What do you have against me?" Akiran demanded.

"We are only acting by the law." The policeman grabbed Hikari.

Akiran suddenly tackled the policeman.

"Leave her alone." Akiran growled. The policeman pulled out a gun. Akiran jumped aside as the policeman fired a shot, then slammed into him again. But, the handcuffs got in his way, and Akiran lost balance and fell to the ground. The policeman pointed the gun at Hikari, yelling, "Don't move!" He began to walk closer. Akiran got onto his knees, then climbed up and jumped at the policeman, trying to tackle him again.

"Hikari, run!" He yelled, just before the policeman fired a shot.

Then there was a sudden pain in his shoulder, and he fell down again.

[Ass-Crumb]

Err where's the first part? Frankly if this is part of a continuing story I think it'd do well for you to post this in the same thread as the first for the sake of organization and all that.

[FallenRevival]

At 1/31/10 08:36 AM, Ass-Crumb wrote: Err where's the first part? Frankly if this is part of a continuing story I think it'd do well for you to post this in the same thread as the first for the sake of organization and all that.

/agree