TheThirdSix's Poems

[TheThirdSix]

"Don't Bring Me This."

I can't see beyond my nose.
Is it the fog?
I can't hear within what used to be earshot.
This noise is polluted.

All I can see is you.
Your mouth is open,
but I hear no words.
Just cries and coos, noise.

Speak to me,
because I want to hear.
Bury me beneath you,
your words, your thoughts.

Lay with me on this damp road,
for it's raining.

"Hands"

"My hands, they bleed.
Your eyes, they see this.
I can't feel, but I know.
My breaths are short.

I look at my hands.
They are rough and cut.
Should I leave?
The door is open.

When I think,
I cry.
When I believe,
I live."

I will post more as I write.

[TrevorW]

I think you should try to dig deeper into how you feel. As these are written now they are rather one- dimensional. Do not be afraid to describe the emotions you feel and how they effect your world. Go into detail if you have to -- play with the words. TRY THINGS!

Keep writing and keep trying

Cheers