Criticism

[Xpu9ioo]

I'm going to write a novel and wanted some honest criticism from you guys on Newgrounds. The book will be called "Patsy", It's about a 20 year old guy named Patsy (he's Italian) He moves to America in 1919 to escape disease and start a new life. He eventually goes on to own condos and get into fights with Irishmen. It's based off the life of my great-grandfather.

So, what do you think? Or is there already a book like that out there?

P.S. first post ever!

All rights are reserved to me! so no stealing!

[Luke]

It's hard to criticize without having a piece of writing to criticize really. Giving us the story idea doesn't really tell us much besides the plot, which we can't really criticize. Maybe write a chapter or something, and we can tell you what we think.

[Xpu9ioo]

At 1/30/10 04:43 PM, EpicFail wrote: It's hard to criticize without having a piece of writing to criticize really. Giving us the story idea doesn't really tell us much besides the plot, which we can't really criticize. Maybe write a chapter or something, and we can tell you what we think.

yeah, i hear what you're saying. I guess i'll finish writing the first chapter or so then come back. Thanks

[Timmy]

At 1/30/10 04:43 PM, EpicFail wrote: It's hard to criticize without having a piece of writing to criticize really. Giving us the story idea doesn't really tell us much besides the plot, which we can't really criticize. Maybe write a chapter or something, and we can tell you what we think.

I agree. Write a quick summary or excerpt from your proposed novel so we can discuss not only your plot idea, but also your writing style and the flow.

Perhaps also include a topic outline of the book, to give us more of an idea of your great-grandfather's life that you want to cover.

[TrevorW]

Why 1919? This can be very important for the symbolism or very simple in that that is when the story starts for the character. Explain why you picked it please!

[Evark]

The writing forum is for sharing your work once you've put some time into writing something. You can't expect honest opinions or input on something you haven't written yet. I mean... we could think the idea is brilliant and then it could turn out horrible, or vice-versa.

Please make another thread when you've got a significant portion of the story written so that we may critique your work then. The explanation may be a good way to lead us into your work, especially if you're planning to make it novel-length but only post it here in chapters or excerpts.