song
- gunner-564
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gunner-564
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writing a song
THE SONG well a bit of it:
/lieing in a cold wet pit
don't now where i am
all my commrads are scared
what to do where to go i dont know
will we escape or will fade away
where are we?
how do we get out?
just where are we?
in here for days my men going insane/
after that i got stuck but this im going to work on it or just throw it out
but please review.
Do whatever you feel....
- megakill
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megakill
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To be completely honest, this seem rushed.
I feel like your trying to explain a topic you have little knowledge of, and you should try to focus on things that come from the heart.
All in all, the theme is unoriginal, but still timless, and if you could find the inspiriation to improve upon, and expand on this, it could be quite a good song,
Hope this helps!
