No One Cares About Mr. Platypus

[Orwellinator]

Well I'm new to newgrounds and this whole writing forum thingy so I'm just gonna post another story that I'm happy with. It's a bit demented so don't say I didn't warn you >.>. One last thing, feedback is greatly appreciated :D.

No One Cares About Mr. Platypus

Waking up alone on his stingy nest, Mr. Platypus notices that his wife isn't by his side. Mr. Platypus has been married for a couple of months, and ever since their marriage, the other animals began to make fun of his wife. Mr. Platypus has been living with this torment for all his life. However, recently, his wife was beginning to crack up. After laying her eggs, she became more and more to herself, and looked deeply saddened all the time. Mr. Platypus could see how she was giving up.

Mr. Platypus waddled around for a while and decided to go to the nearby waterfall, where his wife usually thought about things. On the way, he discovered a note, and it said.....

"Mr. Platypus, I'm sorry but, I just can't take it anymore. I hope you'll understand. If you ever get lonely, just remember this place...where we first met. But most of all, look after the eggs."

After finishing the note, Mr. Platypus soon discovered the splattered remains of his wife's body. She committed suicide by jumping off the waterfall and onto the rocks below. Upon her corpse was a badger in a vulgar position.

"WHAT THE HELL ARE YOU DOING TO MY TO WIFE?!?!!!?!!!"

"None of your buisness," replied the badger slyly, continuing his vulgar movements.

Mr. Platypus lunged at the badger unveiling the nail under his fin, and injected it into the badger. Within seconds, the badger was paralyzed and completely helpless. The poor badger could only quiver in fright as Mr. Platypus waddled away, crying.

Mr. Platypus walked to the center of the jungle where most of the animals congregated to report what had happened. Every single animal in the world was there, and they all hated Mr. Platypus and everything associated with him. All day they talk about how they can ruin his life, and nothing more.

The leader of all the animals was the strong powerful Ostrich. He galloped briskly wherever he went. And if anyone disagreed with him, or did something not to his liking, they were met with a swift kick to the face. His foot print could be easily embedded into any animals skull. All the other animals were wise not to mess with him, and usually talked to him about torturing Mr. Platypus. This pleased the ostrich, and when any animal talked about Mr. Platypus's death, he fluttered his great plumage with a feeling of goosebumps. He loved this feeling.

"My wife KILLED HERSELF!" Mr. Platypus screamed.
"Who cares!" all the animals responded, some even giggled.

The ostrich walked over to Mr. Platypus and presented him a quick peck. At that moment, the badger appeared. He was limping horrifically, holding onto where Mr. Platypus pierced his skin. All the other animals were stunned by his appearance and waited for the badger to speak.

"Mr. Platypus is a murderer! I saw him push his wife off the waterfall! I begged for him to stop, but he just pushed her to her grave! I went to see if I could've done anything for his wife, but this ruthless fiend shanked me repeatedly with a hidden poison tipped weapon! Then, when he was satisfied with the pain he inflicted upon me, he laughed devilishly and walked away!"

A gasp rang out from the rest of the animals. The ostrich walked up to Mr. Platypus, lifted up his wings, and said.....

"I believe I have an idea of what your sentence should be for this intolerable act!"
"I didnt do that! The badger is lying!" His reasoning was futile
"My prudent and unbiased judgment came to one and only one decision. You shall be hung!

The animals let out a roar of cheer as they all chanted together, "Hang him, hang him!" Mr. Platypus could only watch as they set up a noose on a nearby tree and constructed a little platform out of bamboo sticks. Mr. Platypus walked onto the platform, and suited the noose around his neck.

"Any last words?" asked the ostrich.
"Don't touch my eggs..."

And with that the ostrich destroyed the bamboo platform. Mr. Platypus saw his life flash before him. When he was first hatched, when his parents disowned him, when he met his wife, when she laid their eggs, and now here he is, seconds away from death. The last thing Mr. Platypus ever saw was a raccoon having his favorite lunch...unhatched platypus eggs.

[ZJ]

This is pretty good. A bit depressing, though. Is this really your own work?

[Orwellinator]

Thank you for the feedback, and yes this is my work o.O why would it not be