English Report on Life

[aiko10]

I stare at my room window. An empty sheet of paper lay on my desk and a feeble little pencil twirling across my hand. the graphite gently kissed the papers surface forming the letters "S" Followed by "E" and it goes on as: "S-E-C-R-E-T T-O L-I-F-E"
"Secret to life
Is there? A secret to life. The brain twisting crossword puzzle baffling us for years, The unsolvable sudoku puzzle that's been puzzling us for as long as we can remember. Maybe, If you believe there is. Life never what we expect things go according to what decisions we make our future in in our hands rather the hands of the decision we make. All decisions lead to somewhere be it good or bad we have to face them. If your faced with a cliff and the decision to jump or to walk home and you chose to walk home you would have to face a life as dull as the one I have. If you chose to jump you would have to face plummeting to the watery trenches of the unknown abyss that is the cliff. If you were faced with the decision of making a report (like I am) and making it an 'A' worthy paper or not and you chose not to you'll just probably get a sermon on 'why you didn't even made an effort to do the report easy enough a 10 year old kid could do it' (I know I've been there). But if you chose to give it your all, well you might just be blessed with the A that your paper deserved and maybe even those awesome zoo york shoes you've been wanting for like forever.
So I guess, for me, the secret to life is to make the...you all would think I'd say the 'right decision' right? What is the right decision? I won't talk about that now I get off topic and might not get that 'A' and those zoo york shoes I'm dreaming about (*wink). So back to the topic, The secret to life... make the decision that you know for yourself that you won't regret. It's worthless to make a decision that you know you'll regret in the end, my advice, be wise think before choosing what you'll go with. If it's passing this report and hoping that I get that 'A' and the shoes then so be it because for me having that 'A' and those shoes is something I won't regret"

As I lay down that pencil on the desk I think to myself. Quietly, I fold that piece of paper and put it inside my bedside drawer. And as the graphite once more touched the surface of another paper It read:

"Don't imitate me, I just threw away a perfectly good 'A' worthy report and my dream shoes for some stupid attempt to not look like a geek"

I put that inside a folder labeled English Report on Life. I snuggle my pillow under the warm covers and close the light. So what do you think would've happened if I passed that report?

[Phobotech]

At 1/27/10 06:31 AM, aiko10 wrote: Life never what we expect things go according to what decisions we make our future in in our hands rather the hands of the decision we make.

I would revise this sentence....like, "Life is never what we expect(period.) We expect things to go with what decisions we make(period.) Our future is in our hands rather than in the hands of the decision we make.

Overall, I'd advise to be more observant on when to slap a punctuation mark in there once and a while. It would clear many things up.

[Phobotech]

...BUT if you're profile is right, this is pretty damn good for a young writer. There are some profound words of wisdom in this, it just needs polish with it's structure. You also get distracted from your main point, but you'll work out what problems are in here with practice.

They say it takes 10,000 hours devoted to something to become an expert at it. That's 3 hours a day for 10 years...keep it up! Never stop!

[aiko10]

thanks. I know I have punctuation mark problems that's what my English teacher keeps on telling me and yes it's true I'm only 14. Even my mom asks me if I really right these stuff. but I never pass these ones. This is actually a true story and I still have the piece of folded up paper that contains my original report but of course I didn't right the " Don't Imitate me...." thingy.... I wanted to.... and making this (the original report) 2 hours to finish it's actually longer that this. but thanks!