Untitled Story (Heh)

[Luke]

I put a lot of time in to this story, and it's too long to post itself, but I have it on DeviantArt. Unfortunately you need an account, but I'm sure most of you go there anyway, or have an account.

The story is about a boy, at the age of 15 who goes to Japan as an exchange student, he gets tied up with a girl, and then the wrong crowd. Things are changing around him, and he's becoming a different person...

The story is hard to explain, but it's a good read, and there is meaning behind it. I hope you guys will take the time to read it all and give me some constructive criticism, the story is not NEW anymore, it was finished a few months back.

Story.

[Luke]

Just giving this thread some CPR, wouldn't mind constructive criticism. I understand that most people just want to post their stories and not take the time to read other user's stories. But then what's the point in this, right?

[elementell]

I came.

Oh god thats fucked up right thar

[Luke]

At 1/29/10 05:35 PM, elementell wrote: I came.

Oh god thats fucked up right thar

You really liked it?

[TrevorW]

I personally will only read things that are actually in the post. Perhaps we could find a way to compromise?

[Luke]

At 1/29/10 05:48 PM, TrevorW wrote: I personally will only read things that are actually in the post. Perhaps we could find a way to compromise?

No, I don't think we can seeing as it won't fit, and I'm not going to make a number of posts to put up a single story I wrote when I could simply link you guys to the entire thing.

[HahaISuckMoreThanYou]

At 1/29/10 05:51 PM, EpicFail wrote:

At 1/29/10 05:48 PM, TrevorW wrote: I personally will only read things that are actually in the post. Perhaps we could find a way to compromise?

No, I don't think we can seeing as it won't fit, and I'm not going to make a number of posts to put up a single story I wrote when I could simply link you guys to the entire thing.

Could you copypasta it into your blog since it has a much greater char count?, I'll see it in a second, but I'm too lazy to register right at this very second, so I'll repost later

[Luke]

At 1/29/10 05:56 PM, HahaISuckMoreThanYou wrote:

Could you copypasta it into your blog since it has a much greater char count?, I'll see it in a second, but I'm too lazy to register right at this very second, so I'll repost later

Christ, I'm pretty sure the story is too big for my news post too man. Just sign up on Deviant Art, or I can try hosting it elsewhere, not sure of many sites though, give me a bit and hopefully I'll have it up somewhere else for you to read.

[HahaISuckMoreThanYou]

At 1/29/10 06:01 PM, EpicFail wrote:

At 1/29/10 05:56 PM, HahaISuckMoreThanYou wrote:

Could you copypasta it into your blog since it has a much greater char count?, I'll see it in a second, but I'm too lazy to register right at this very second, so I'll repost later

Christ, I'm pretty sure the story is too big for my news post too man. Just sign up on Deviant Art, or I can try hosting it elsewhere, not sure of many sites though, give me a bit and hopefully I'll have it up somewhere else for you to read.

Nah, fortunately I thought demonoid was a bitch to sign up, but apparently that was a similar site I got fed up with because it was pretty easy. As for the news blog hilariously enough, yea I tested it didn't fit. Christ man how long did it take you to write that?! :P

[Luke]

At 1/29/10 06:12 PM, HahaISuckMoreThanYou wrote: Christ man how long did it take you to write that?! :P

I worked on it for a few days at a time, and then I'd take breaks. I don't know how many hours I put in to writing it, but thinking it all up, brainstorming, organizing, re-writing, proof reading, etc. It took longer than I wanted it to take. But I took a few weeks break between writing it, I got sick of doing it, but then I realized how much work I'd put into it, and how I'd hate to see it go to waste, personally I thought it had potential.

[Luke]

Here it is on spamtheweb, much easier than Deviant Art.

[Timmy]

At 1/30/10 03:43 PM, EpicFail wrote: Here it is on spamtheweb, much easier than Deviant Art.

In the future, just break it up into smaller posts in one thread. All of the authors in the MWC do it for their stories, so it's not that difficult.

[Luke]

At 1/30/10 05:02 PM, Timmy wrote:

At 1/30/10 03:43 PM, EpicFail wrote: Here it is on spamtheweb, much easier than Deviant Art.

In the future, just break it up into smaller posts in one thread. All of the authors in the MWC do it for their stories, so it's not that difficult.

I was going to, but it would just be a pain in the ass. I think it's easier to just link to it. Seeing as breaking it up into smaller posts just brings up my post count for nothing as well. But I understand.