Epic Fail - The Fan Fic

The light came to a halt, RUCKLO YOU FAILED ME said an angry voice. Wade emerged from the light and lifted rucklo up with telepathy and punched him so hard in the face, his face dented inward.

I was at the time on the floor, The overwhelming power stopped me from getting up. Than i went unconscious.

When i awoke I was in a cell, But i wasn't alone. I quickly got to my feet and was eye to eye with a stranger hidden in the darkness. My weapons were gone but i was still a trained fighter. Suddenly the man came out from the darkness with a smile on his face.

Epic Fail huh? Heard you were looking for me he said lighting a cigarette.

Hero Dan?

You got it, He took a long drag and tossed the cigarette.

Now, Hows about we get outta here he said with a smirk and pulled out a invisible sword from his waist belt and smashed the wall,

What the fuck? Besides the invisible sword i realized that the cell was moving, As i looked out i saw a huge gap separating us from the ground.

Heh, Ive been waiting for ya man, This damn cage moves every once and a while, Luckily i have you now. Toss me across...

As i tossed him across i felt the cage move, Shit man it's moving i screamed!

Thinking fast Dan threw his sword into the gears that caused the cage to move, Get your ass over!

I jumped for it, Dan grabbed my hand and pulled me up and with the snap of his finger called his sword back to his hand.

Near our cell i found a foot locker with my stuff in it and something else...
I looked to the left and saw rucklo on the floor dead, The poor son of a bitch got the whole of wades wrath. But it wasn't my problem now.

Me and Hero Dan left the prison block and got into the Weapons Block. We got to find out what Wade is building and fast, His patience has thinned so much he killed his right hand man..

But how much time do we have left..

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Response to Epic Fail - The Fan Fic 2010-08-02 09:43:07 Reply

Pretty funny story, I like it. You have a moderate amount of detail, and just enough action going on so that it balances and doesn't get boring. The only thing is that the grammar got worse throughout the story, such as forgetting to quote characters for confusing you're with your. If that was fixed, I would like it even more. :3

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Response to Epic Fail - The Fan Fic 2010-08-02 23:24:40 Reply

Chapter 8
Setting the gears in motion

We enter the weapons block in search of some information on VERTUS. Nothing much but standard weapons here, Some handguns, M4's and a laser pistol or two. Hero Dan's methods of searching were a bit primitive compared to mine.

He pulls out a sword and slices a filing cabinet in two and starts scrambling through the papers looking for anything with VERTUS printed on it.

Finally we found our way to a terminal, I made quick use of my hacking skills and got into the Chief Inventors account. I scrolled down the weapons list and found it, VERTUS.

I took a deep breath before entering the file, What could it possibility be?

I opened it and got a.... live feed..

I just stood there for a minute looking, Nothing but a live feed of a man in a pod?

What does this have to do with VERTUS?

'' Hey fail watcha got there?'' Hero said while he started bashing buttons.

NOO!

Suddenly the Pod opened and the man opened his guys, Holy shit...

What did we just do?

But now that was the least of our problems, I heard a familiar sound behind us as we released the man from the pod.

The sound.. of a shotgun reloading.

''Hey fail, Do you know how much your worth?'' Twilight said grinning

HeroDan