Hi guys so I recently made my first animation. I'm quite happy with it but I would like feedback. I know it has many faults and I'm happy to fix them so help me out. I'm trying to become a better animator so if you have any tips please tell me. Spend about 2 days on it, everything animated frame by frame and hand drawn with the brush tool and my crappy bamboo tablet. Hope you like it.
http://www.newgrounds.com/dump/item/2022 1c8a38bece07f4c1bca16520822e
The character that's "Dancing" Is Xix my original character.
Here's an image of him: http://Mabelma.deviantart.com/art/2010-X iX-If-you-see-come-in-149659238
The preloader isn't working. Fix it, or just re-submit it without the preloader.
At 1/26/10 08:10 PM, Thematrix27 wrote: The preloader isn't working. Fix it, or just re-submit it without the preloader.
Or you could just right click and press play.
You got some good art skill and fbf skill, your on a good road.
Looks nice and all, but why did you include longer than 3 frames in the title?
That's pretty normal if your making an animation.
This animation proves you have skill working with flash,
however if every flash you submit to this site is going to be like this, you are not gonna get real far.
It's rather short. Also that xix guy dancing is a 3 frame loop, it doesn't look really convincing.
Also i suggest (you don't have to) calling your character something else.
It gives people an image of you just like my image of mmautrey.
Try coloring xix in your animations. he looks an awful lot like madness guys.
Anyway, it's a good starter and keep going.
:: what's with me and the also's?
You should go to sleep.
At 1/26/10 08:10 PM, Thematrix27 wrote: The preloader isn't working. Fix it, or just re-submit it without the preloader.
I have no clue why it isn't working but you can always try what the user below said.
At 1/26/10 09:59 PM, mario-dude wrote:At 1/26/10 08:10 PM, Thematrix27 wrote: The preloader isn't working. Fix it, or just re-submit it without the preloader.Or you could just right click and press play.
Thanks for helping me out with that.
At 1/26/10 10:05 PM, DrClay wrote: You got some good art skill and fbf skill, your on a good road.
Thank you so much for the kind words. I hope I can become a great artist/animator some day.
At 1/27/10 09:17 AM, Pippatchu wrote: Looks nice and all, but why did you include longer than 3 frames in the title?
That's pretty normal if your making an animation.
This animation proves you have skill working with flash,
however if every flash you submit to this site is going to be like this, you are not gonna get real far.
It's rather short. Also that xix guy dancing is a 3 frame loop, it doesn't look really convincing.
Also i suggest (you don't have to) calling your character something else.
It gives people an image of you just like my image of mmautrey.
Try coloring xix in your animations. he looks an awful lot like madness guys.
Anyway, it's a good starter and keep going.
what's with me and the also's?
Don't really know why I added that.
Yeah I know.
Thanks and don't worry about it I don't plan to submit anything to NG until it's well polished, long enough to be enjoyed and I like every single thing about it.
Yeah I get what you mean, I'll make it a little more real by adding more frames and making him lean smoother.
Why do you think I should change his name?
This is just a test and the actual character on that animation is missing a lot of things that makes XiX what he is. I did it like that because I felt comfortable doing it in that style for my first animation.
Thanks Glad you like it I will surely make more animation as time passes.
I know right, LOL
Something new.
One Legged animation
Hope you like it.
It's very messed up but I was just practicing something. I won't fix it but if you have any critics please post them so I can use them on the next animation. The next animation will be colored, I promise. Sorry for the lines being so messed up. I wanted to animate something very loosely and I think I did.
I know I promised that my next animation was going to be colored but I just had to try out what Jazza said. Hope you like it.
I recommend that you do away with the 'square' shape for your skeleton animation. Just making the body a stick gives you so much more freedom. Example .
Animator for hire. Check out the stuff I have on the portal and the forums. If you like something, send me a message.
Yeah the stick for body gives freedom but I don't plan to make a real animation out of that, I will use it as a wireframe for more complex characters and the square help me define the volume of the chest, the length and many other things. I will use your suggestion if I plan to do some kind of stick animation. Thanks for the reply.
Nice job, you are on the road to Front Page and awards.
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Wait all i got was a guy nodding , did i miss something ?
nobody
At 1/29/10 05:14 PM, HDXmike wrote: Wait all i got was a guy nodding , did i miss something ?
Keep Scrolling down and clicking links.
At 1/29/10 05:11 PM, bl00db47h wrote: Nice job, you are on the road to Front Page and awards.
Thank you so much I hope you are right. I will keep animating little things for now but I will start my career as an animator with a bang, I promise.
Use a faster framerate like 24, 25 because it looks like your using 12 fps. 24 - 25 run smoother just to let you know and try.
Don't go into the light...
Actually the last animation (jump) is running at 24fps at I find it looks way better. I will use that frame speed for future animations.
This one is a little old and I got commissioned to do it. Hope you like it. I told you the next one was going to be colored. Should I add a character to the wire framed jump?
A little bump/. I would love some critics, comments or anything what so ever.
Hey guys hope you like this. It's just something I did out of boredom and for practice. I started shading it but it looked weird so I just made it one color. I am aware that the scarf is jumping around to much I will fix it in the late or near future.
*NUMP*
I know it's not much but I would love any kind of comments thanks in advance. I will be animating something very soon so look forward to that.
posting 4 times in a row should be against the rules...just kidding but anyway cool animation you should try making a game
how did you post this i dont know how to post a flash file on here...
At 2/4/10 09:27 PM, B36D wrote: posting 4 times in a row should be against the rules...just kidding but anyway cool animation you should try making a gam
It should be.
My latest practice animation, hope you like it.
Some text:
Today I wanted to hone my animating skills so I though of animating something a little more complex than what I usually do so I though of this. A falling Feather/Leaf, I hope you like it. It has a lot of problems but I'm quite pleased with it, I may go back to it and fix those problems but for now enjoy.
Done completely in flash, all FxF.
I'm back to animating, help me become a good animation through comments, feedback, suggestions and anything you can of.
At 2/18/10 05:39 PM, Mabelma wrote: My latest practice animation, hope you like it.
It seems to be missing frames where it rolls over itself in the middle of the falling. skips like 2/3 frames where it starts to roll and instantly is flat before continueing to fall.
Good apart rom that though
At 2/18/10 08:43 PM, Lemmiwinks91 wrote:At 2/18/10 05:39 PM, Mabelma wrote: My latest practice animation, hope you like it.It seems to be missing frames where it rolls over itself in the middle of the falling. skips like 2/3 frames where it starts to roll and instantly is flat before continueing to fall.
Good apart rom that though
That's the exact part I noticed that seen off. I wil try to fix it and re upload as soon as I can.
A little update for the falling feather animation. I fixed that turning up on the air part. Hope you like it.
Does it look better now? A little thing, I am using for that animation a 20 frame rate and everything is in triples until it finishes the turn around and from there it's all on double, am I improving? What do you guys suggest I try next?
Does it look better, worst, anything at all would be appreaciated.
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