Ninja and Lizard Writing Thread!

[EpicsplosionMedia]

We are all going to write scripts involving a ninja and a lizard. Here is mine:

NINJA AND LIZARD SAVE THE DAY
BY EpicsplosionMedia
Cast: Ninja, Lizard, Bob, Police Officer, Terrorist
Setting(s): House, Washington Monument

SCENE 1 (HOUSE)

(Ninja and Lizard are sitting at home)

Ninja: Lizard, I heard there is trouble afoot!
Lizard: I heard there's trouble an arm!
Ninja: HEY! Not cool, my great grandfather was an arm.
Lizard: But where is the location of this trouble?
Ninja: I don't know.
Lizard: Let's just go to Washington DC!
Ninja: Yes, trouble is always lurking around there!

(Ninja and Lizard exit)

SCENE 2 (Washington Monument)

(Bob is standing next to Washington Monument, Ninja and Lizard enter)

Bob: Ninja and Lizard, thank Flannigan's foot you're here!
Ninja: What is the trouble!
Bob: A terrorist is going to blow up the world...From the top of the Washington Monument!

(Ninja and Lizard gasp)

Lizard: How terrifying!
Ninja: Thank god I'm wearing to pairs of pants!
Police Officer: Yes, thank him!
Lizard: A police officer!
Police Officer: Yes, I am a police officer.
Ninja: How can we stop the terrorist?
Police Officer: Well, we are doing nothing in our power to stop him, so I will lend you this gun.
Ninja: Good!

(Ninja fires gun at terrorist)

Terrorist: You missed, and even though you did, I will take my revenge!

(Terrorist shoots Bob, Bob's head explodes)

Ninja, Lizard, and Police Officer: BOB!
Lizard: I will avenge Bob!

(Lizard takes gun from Ninja, fires it at terrorist, terrorist dies)

Terrorist: I am dead!
Ninja, Lizard, and Police Officer: We win!

THE END

[Thematrix27]

At 1/26/10 05:25 PM, EpicsplosionMedia wrote: (Lizard takes gun from Ninja, fires it at terrorist, terrorist dies)

Terrorist: I am dead!

Why the hell would you shout that before you died, and how would you talk if you were dead?

[homor]

LOL SO RANDOM XD!!!!!!!!!!

no but seriously, the Humor is weak, there is little Narrative or pacing and everything is rushed, the characters are bland and stock, the jokes are lame.

it's totally supposed to be a joke, but that really only furthers the problem rather than resolves it.

[EpicsplosionMedia]

At 1/26/10 05:56 PM, homor wrote: LOL SO RANDOM XD!!!!!!!!!!

no but seriously, the Humor is weak, there is little Narrative or pacing and everything is rushed, the characters are bland and stock, the jokes are lame.

it's totally supposed to be a joke, but that really only furthers the problem rather than resolves it.

This is not a 100% effort into writing witty Oscar-winning comedies thread, if you were expecting that. And plus, Mr. Critic, since you don't like mine, why don't you show some balls and write your own script, because that's what this thread was intended for, not for snobbing around like a jackass.