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Response to Writing Forum Lounge 2010-04-30 14:49:24 Reply

posted,
also it's a national holiday in Holland no it's not pico day (would have been cool though)


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Response to Writing Forum Lounge 2010-05-01 20:50:49 Reply

At 4/17/10 08:24 PM, PinballWizard976 wrote: I have an idea that i'd like to bounce off of you guys if that's cool.

I was reading your idea, and it made me remember this one night I was waiting for the bus on hwy99, and I saw a dog chase a cat across. I could kind of tell what was about to happen, so I jumped up and shouted at the dog, trying to scare them away from the highway. The dog stopped then ran the other way down the side walk, but the cat just ran out there, it had to been scared for it's life, and no cars stopped, or even touched their brakes, and it got hit.

A guy waiting at the stop for the same bus said something about "stupid cat" but then I started thinking from it's perspective. It had this dog barking, chasing, and most likely trying to eat it from behind, when an angry looking person jumps out in front of it shouting. I realized that, if I had been in the same situation, I probably would have done the same thing: panic, pick a random direction, and run for it. The cat just picked the wrong random direction.

Maybe you can use that. There's not a whole lot darker than forcing characters to choose between two bad choices, ha ha. One of your crows could try to force a opposum to cross by luring a predator or something to their side of the road.

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Response to Writing Forum Lounge 2010-05-03 15:45:42 Reply

Dead in here lately. What's everyone up to?


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Response to Writing Forum Lounge 2010-05-03 16:33:43 Reply

blah. School is now done, and I have some spare time.

Anything people want read and reviewed? I've been out of the loop here for weeks.....


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Response to Writing Forum Lounge 2010-05-03 17:58:24 Reply

I've been on the go, and looking for a new place to live. Still haven't found work :(

I am getting a game sponsored tho :)

And I decided to start a new writing project. I installed a twitter widget on my phone, and made an account (@holycrapRUN) and I'm writing a story, one sentence at a time. It's about an apocalypse survivor in a mountain village, shielded from the lethal effects of the end of the world, but not all the effects. In all likely hood, there will be nuclear bears attacking the main character at some point in the future. I'm not promising much, but if anyone is on twitter and wants to check it out, it would make me smile :)

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Response to Writing Forum Lounge 2010-05-04 11:42:26 Reply

At 3/23/10 08:37 AM, sinfulwolf wrote:
Well welcome to the forum then. What comic book have you published? Was it through one of the larger companies like Image? Just curious is all.

Sorry for not responding 'till now.

The comic was produced through a small up and coming company called Zeroes2Heroes. At the moment, its only online but I'm happy, so long as people are able to read and enjoy it. The site itself has been very quiet but they're going through some restructuring, so I suppose its understandable.

The comic is called "Stan's Last Deal", if you want to check it out.

Cheers!

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Response to Writing Forum Lounge 2010-05-04 11:53:06 Reply

At 5/3/10 03:45 PM, Ravariel wrote: Dead in here lately. What's everyone up to?

Not a lot, writing wise, I'm afraid.

I'm working on a commission for Fro in the collaboration forum, where he wants a script for a game. It's mostly in the notes stage, but I'm getting there and moving towards a nice game skeleton script.

Fleshing it all out is the main issue I think I'll have, but when he gets a chance to look at the script, perhaps a few late night sessions on AIM will iron things out.


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Response to Writing Forum Lounge 2010-05-04 13:56:04 Reply

At 5/4/10 11:42 AM, MightyGeko wrote:

Sorry for not responding 'till now.

The comic was produced through a small up and coming company called Zeroes2Heroes. At the moment, its only online but I'm happy, so long as people are able to read and enjoy it. The site itself has been very quiet but they're going through some restructuring, so I suppose its understandable.

The comic is called "Stan's Last Deal", if you want to check it out.

Cheers!

It's all good.

I've heard of that place. I will have to go check it out, as they've had some good stuff on there in the past.

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Response to Writing Forum Lounge 2010-05-04 14:31:27 Reply

At 5/3/10 03:45 PM, Ravariel wrote: Dead in here lately. What's everyone up to?

I hear ya, the main thing that's been keeping me away is school. But this summer that's about to change, this time, it'll be work. I plan on working full time this summer. So my job will keep me away from NG. I need more money.


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Response to Writing Forum Lounge 2010-05-05 15:49:42 Reply

just found some good ass trance radio stations to keep me going! WOOT!


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Response to Writing Forum Lounge 2010-05-06 21:36:19 Reply

can we do chacter worksheet here, like a history for gaming chacther


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Response to Writing Forum Lounge 2010-05-07 07:19:15 Reply

At 5/6/10 09:36 PM, kidd25 wrote: can we do chacter worksheet here, like a history for gaming chacther

I don't see why not - I've used this sort of thing to help develop the back story for one or two of my characters over the years.

In fact, I think I used some of that back story in the entry I made for the Monthly Writing Contest in Either February or March...


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Response to Writing Forum Lounge 2010-05-08 12:25:51 Reply

At 5/3/10 03:45 PM, Ravariel wrote: Dead in here lately. What's everyone up to?

Schoolwork, lots of it.

But, I can't say that it isn't partially self inflicted. In my English class, currently we're doing independent projects that will take us somewhere into the start of June. I chose to take on the National Novel Writing Month idea and write a novel by June 5th. My goal is 40,000 words and currently I'm at 3000 (I need to get going; I'm behind). I don't think it'll kill me as writing for an hour and a half or more each day is what I do anyways, but it's still going to be a good deal of work especially with end-of-term assignments coming in. But, It'll be alright.

I'm also reading four more books for the same class by June first. In total, I'll have read five. I've just finished Invisible Man on Thurdsay, I'll have Streetcar Named Desire done for Tuesday and then I'll be reading The Great Gadsby, Fahrenheit 451 and Slaughterhouse V. I'm not stressed about that as that isn't really a lot of reading for me, but that's part of what I'll be doing.

On an unrelated note, I'm also thinking about starting a webcomic with some online friends. I don't know if that will actually take off, but it's in the planning.

Man, I haven't posted in this thread in ages.


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Response to Writing Forum Lounge 2010-05-08 12:35:38 Reply

At 5/8/10 12:25 PM, InsertFunnyUserName wrote:

I'll be reading The Great Gadsby, Fahrenheit 451 and Slaughterhouse V. I'm not stressed about that as that isn't really a lot of reading for me, but that's part of what I'll be doing.

All brilliant books! But its spelled Gatsby!

Also I would suggest that you read "The Road." Simply a brilliant book.


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Response to Writing Forum Lounge 2010-05-08 13:05:37 Reply

At 5/8/10 12:35 PM, TrevorW wrote: All brilliant books! But its spelled Gatsby!

Ah, yeah, I don't have the book on hand.

Also I would suggest that you read "The Road." Simply a brilliant book.

What's it about?


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Response to Writing Forum Lounge 2010-05-08 13:21:53 Reply

At 5/8/10 01:05 PM, InsertFunnyUserName wrote:
At 5/8/10 12:35 PM, TrevorW wrote: All brilliant books! But its spelled Gatsby!
Ah, yeah, I don't have the book on hand.

Also I would suggest that you read "The Road." Simply a brilliant book.
What's it about?

It is an emotional representation of a world without beauty, hope, or dignity. The world has ended. It is also the manifestation of the greatest strength a man, father, and person could muster in order to save the slight chance the world has. This book gives testimony to the will of humanity and the true goodness that can exist in them among a vast plain of destruction.

Also I wish I read that much. I'm reading the Three Musketeers and that will take me a couple weeks. My eyes hurt after 100 pages or so ;/


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Response to Writing Forum Lounge 2010-05-08 16:15:16 Reply

At 5/3/10 03:45 PM, Ravariel wrote: Dead in here lately. What's everyone up to?

I've been being murdered by school. Especially AP tests. Then, in the summer, I'm doing some leadership conference thing that I can slap on my college apps. So, I haven't been here, and I don't plan on being here really all that much. I'm really sorry guys...


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Response to Writing Forum Lounge 2010-05-13 15:27:30 Reply

Speaking about murdering something that can't die or can't murder, WHO LET THIS TOPIC DROWN!

It's been wallowing in countless dark grayness aching for the writer's community to show it the sweet sweet love it has and/or had! IT LONGS to be swept from beneath the pile of peer review scandal and scribbled feelings!

...so...write any good books lately?


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Response to Writing Forum Lounge 2010-05-16 01:51:39 Reply

I haven't been here in forever

I don't really no why, just haven't figured it in my time recently

Anyways I have been writing recently

I have a big essay due in which we write a conversation between characters we read about the characters we have read about that year.

I'm writing about the characters Okonkwo, Heathcliff, Brutus, and Merlyn all talking about some things.

However, I have ideas but I don't know how to put them together.

It's quite an ordeal. I wanted it to be on the topic of Might vs Right with Merlyn and Okonkwo and Okonkwo with Heathcliff discussing weakness and love.

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Response to Writing Forum Lounge 2010-05-16 04:14:56 Reply

I am going to be posting storys on my news page and I just wanted to advertise a lil'
So please check it out. Comments will be open so don't hate just luves, but no GAY love lol :D

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Response to Writing Forum Lounge 2010-05-27 17:53:56 Reply

Hey, just need a quick series plot line. I'm making a game where a guy's family was killed and he's going to go get revenge by doing the same back. (Think the Punisher story)

Anyway, I need a motive or reason why the guys family was targeted in the first place and I don't want it to be an exact copy of The Punisher, so can anyone come up with a few ideas for a motive?


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Response to Writing Forum Lounge 2010-05-27 18:58:07 Reply

At 5/27/10 05:53 PM, Fro wrote:
Anyway, I need a motive or reason why the guys family was targeted in the first place and I don't want it to be an exact copy of The Punisher, so can anyone come up with a few ideas for a motive?

Mexican Drug Lords. They want everything.

I find the whole Mexican drug war compelling. It has a lesser impact on me than the whole affair in Somalia, but it still carries weight. I have a character who served with the Mexican Army to fight the war. She's American born, but she was sent over as a bomb expert as part of a show of support for the Mexican government. She was honourably discharged, but i haven't been able to think of a good reason... (hint hint, I'd like a little brain storming help please).

I also came across something interesting. We all know about the battle of Thermopylae, but there was another one in 1941 where the Australians had to hold the line against the Nazis so that the British could retreat, and they did it with a nice amount of Badassery. And that's when i thought "Thank god i have an Australian Character who wants to live up to the heroics of his grandfather and the financial success of his father" (he's the son of a CEO of an Australian corporation who goes to the City this story takes place to expand. Hilarity ensues).


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Response to Writing Forum Lounge 2010-05-27 19:09:56 Reply

Fro: Instead of having the attack on his family be meant for him... have it actually be meant for his family. Perhaps his wife saw something she didn't, or she was attacked in a back alley by the big baddie's son and she killed him in self defense (double revenge story). Perhaps the guy's son is say... 18 or so and starts getting involved in drug trafficking, but takes a few too many steps out of bounds and gets a hit put on his head. You could even involve Wolf-Raven's Mexican Drug lord idea for that one.

Wolf-Raven: Looking for an idea for her to get out of the army? How about a medical discharge? Bomb went off by her and messed her up a little bit. If you don't want to do that, she could have simply served her contract and she's getting out and wanting to move on. Or she's seen so much shit she just wants to live a normal life again. Or, she got a job that offers good pay, benefits... and little danger.

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Response to Writing Forum Lounge 2010-05-27 19:12:47 Reply

At 5/27/10 07:09 PM, sinfulwolf wrote:
Wolf-Raven: Looking for an idea for her to get out of the army? How about a medical discharge? Bomb went off by her and messed her up a little bit. If you don't want to do that, she could have simply served her contract and she's getting out and wanting to move on. Or she's seen so much shit she just wants to live a normal life again. Or, she got a job that offers good pay, benefits... and little danger.

Aye. She eventually winds up becoming a Vigilante in Settler's City (Capital V is intended; it's the name of the group). But a Medical discharge doesn't sound half bad...But what would that entail? a really big gas or a full out decapitation?


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Response to Writing Forum Lounge 2010-05-27 19:18:01 Reply

And by Gas, i mean Gash.


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Response to Writing Forum Lounge 2010-05-27 21:08:59 Reply

Well, it could be a) mental problems. or b) physical problems. It's got to a bit more than a gash and considering that to have it qualify for a discharge she probably wouldn't be able to be part of a group called the Vigilantes. From my knowledge, I could be wrong... seeing as I know someone who had their legs blown off in Afghanistan and they got prosthetic and are going back overseas as a helicopter gunner.

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Response to Writing Forum Lounge 2010-05-27 21:47:12 Reply

At 5/27/10 09:08 PM, sinfulwolf wrote: Well, it could be a) mental problems. or b) physical problems. It's got to a bit more than a gash and considering that to have it qualify for a discharge she probably wouldn't be able to be part of a group called the Vigilantes. From my knowledge, I could be wrong... seeing as I know someone who had their legs blown off in Afghanistan and they got prosthetic and are going back overseas as a helicopter gunner.

Hrm...i think i might have something...for the purposes of the story, she can't be disabled, as she's still more or less in fighting form.

During a firefight in Chihuahua, My character (Who's name is Elise), while defusing a bomb, found a friend of hers in trouble. He was wounded in the leg in one of the main arteries and was bleeding to death. Elise, who was training to be a medic at the time, hurried over to her friend to try and stop the bleeding. During this, a grenade went off from behind her. As she turned to look at it, a cartel member opened fire and she was shot from behind. Though she was lifted to safety by another comrade, her friend ended up dying in the street. The shot had damaged her kidney so bad that she had to have it removed. That, coupled with the psychological trauma of the death of her friend, allowed her to apply for honourable discharge, as she had made a few friends in the higher levels of command. She would later recover from both the psychological impact and the wounds, though she has no left kidney, and she also has a nasty battle scar.

Realistic? No?


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Response to Writing Forum Lounge 2010-05-27 23:19:47 Reply

At 5/27/10 09:47 PM, Wolf-Raven wrote:
Hrm...i think i might have something...for the purposes of the story, she can't be disabled, as she's still more or less in fighting form.

During a firefight in Chihuahua, My character (Who's name is Elise), while defusing a bomb, found a friend of hers in trouble. He was wounded in the leg in one of the main arteries and was bleeding to death. Elise, who was training to be a medic at the time, hurried over to her friend to try and stop the bleeding. During this, a grenade went off from behind her. As she turned to look at it, a cartel member opened fire and she was shot from behind. Though she was lifted to safety by another comrade, her friend ended up dying in the street. The shot had damaged her kidney so bad that she had to have it removed. That, coupled with the psychological trauma of the death of her friend, allowed her to apply for honourable discharge, as she had made a few friends in the higher levels of command. She would later recover from both the psychological impact and the wounds, though she has no left kidney, and she also has a nasty battle scar.

Realistic? No?

Fairly realistic, especially considering that kevlar vests don't do much against bullets, and the plates I wore didn't do much for the abdomen. She'd also have some shrapnel wounds from the grenade, so occasionally in the story (depending how long after the incident your story occurs) you can have her picking out bits of shrapnel from her skin. Mostly shoulders, back of the neck. All very small pieces that wouldn't have killed her and the doctors felt it would be more damaging to take out than to leave in (the body does slowly work shrapnel out of the body. I knew someone who was pulling little black slivers from his scalp like a year later).
Also, it might be interesting to still have her have some of those psychological issues. Sure not as bad as when she got out, but flashbacks and nightmares will still occur.

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Response to Writing Forum Lounge 2010-05-27 23:35:38 Reply

At 5/27/10 11:19 PM, sinfulwolf wrote:
Fairly realistic, especially considering that kevlar vests don't do much against bullets, and the plates I wore didn't do much for the abdomen. She'd also have some shrapnel wounds from the grenade, so occasionally in the story (depending how long after the incident your story occurs) you can have her picking out bits of shrapnel from her skin. Mostly shoulders, back of the neck. All very small pieces that wouldn't have killed her and the doctors felt it would be more damaging to take out than to leave in (the body does slowly work shrapnel out of the body. I knew someone who was pulling little black slivers from his scalp like a year later).
Also, it might be interesting to still have her have some of those psychological issues. Sure not as bad as when she got out, but flashbacks and nightmares will still occur.

Really? Kevlar doesn't do anything against bullets? You'd think otherwise, but i guess they're better against low calibre bullets.

I can totally work Shrapnel into it. And the nightmares...well...Wolfgang will definitely have them, so she may too.

Then again, Wolfgang has had more scarring things done to him.


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Response to Writing Forum Lounge 2010-05-28 02:42:33 Reply

Kevlar was designed to stop shrapnel.