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Response to Sentinels: Operation Leviathan Aug. 23rd, 2009 @ 08:06 PM Reply

So is anyone doing the next picture?

I really like the idea of this story thread by the way. Let's hope you can fend off the retards with their shitty art and boring storylines.


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Response to Sentinels: Operation Leviathan Aug. 23rd, 2009 @ 08:25 PM Reply

At 8/23/09 08:06 PM, MeMB wrote: So is anyone doing the next picture?

I really like the idea of this story thread by the way. Let's hope you can fend off the retards with their shitty art and boring storylines.

You doomed us all now their going to come!

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Response to Sentinels: Operation Leviathan Aug. 24th, 2009 @ 12:03 AM Reply

I just did this big truck.
I don't have a name for it.
Do you like it?

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Response to Sentinels: Operation Leviathan Aug. 25th, 2009 @ 12:29 PM Reply

At 8/24/09 12:03 AM, lolxxXDarkSideXxxlol wrote: I just did this big truck.
I don't have a name for it.
Do you like it?

Nice idea Darkside.

Anyways here's the blueprints for the two levels inside The Javelin.

LEVEL B, which is the lower level.

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Response to Sentinels: Operation Leviathan Aug. 25th, 2009 @ 12:32 PM Reply

Level A- Upper level. Controls and Facilities.

Since The Javelin is used in missions that take more time, it has more luxuries than conventional ships.

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Response to Sentinels: Operation Leviathan Aug. 25th, 2009 @ 12:34 PM Reply

Anyways sorry about the recent lack of progress in the story, things will hopefully get a bit more pace once it comes up to Ignis.

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Response to Sentinels: Operation Leviathan Aug. 25th, 2009 @ 12:52 PM Reply

Would doing a scene entitled "Meanwhile..." and showing someone picking up their ship from an area on the planet be too random?


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Response to Sentinels: Operation Leviathan Aug. 25th, 2009 @ 12:57 PM Reply

Looking pretty good so far.but im not going to really going to contribute to this thread,because even though you said personal art styles are welcome,my style would look pretty out of place here.

(well that,and incase you guys think i'll fuck everything up.)

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Response to Sentinels: Operation Leviathan Aug. 25th, 2009 @ 01:08 PM Reply

Looks like the Javelin needs a fully operational command crew.

This reminds me SOOOOOO much of Mass Effect, and I like it
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Response to Sentinels: Operation Leviathan Aug. 25th, 2009 @ 01:50 PM Reply

At 8/25/09 01:08 PM, big-jonny-13 wrote:
This reminds me SOOOOOO much of Mass Effect, and I like it

I was thinking the same thing. And Halo maybe, with the cryostasis bit.


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Response to Sentinels: Operation Leviathan Aug. 25th, 2009 @ 02:30 PM Reply

I got a page on the way.


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Response to Sentinels: Operation Leviathan Aug. 25th, 2009 @ 03:28 PM Reply

At 8/25/09 12:34 PM, TheDaveAngle wrote: Anyways sorry about the recent lack of progress in the story, things will hopefully get a bit more pace once it comes up to Ignis.

I was thinking having a small fighter ship inside the javelin call the "splinter" I've been trying to come up with designs for it can it be in the javelin if I make it. (making spaceships/fighterships is what I'm best at)

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Response to Sentinels: Operation Leviathan Aug. 25th, 2009 @ 03:41 PM Reply

At 8/25/09 03:28 PM, angryglacier wrote:
I was thinking having a small fighter ship inside the javelin call the "splinter" I've been trying to come up with designs for it can it be in the javelin if I make it. (making spaceships/fighterships is what I'm best at)

That's a really good Idea, i've got a couple of ideas that could be used with the fighter as well; The area where it's kept could be the section underneath the cockpit of the Javelin, where a "Jaw" opens up and the fighter is then launched out into battle as a projectile, then it's flight wings fold outwards and the pilot can assume control, another idea is that the fighter is also designed to be streamlined and pointed so it can impact and penetrate into enemy ships and "Inject" the occupant into the enemy ships to raise hell inside before returning to the splinter and ejecting out again, Second idea kind of puts emphasis on it's name "Splinter"

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Response to Sentinels: Operation Leviathan Aug. 25th, 2009 @ 03:59 PM Reply

While designing spaceships is surely alot of fun, don't you think we should be focusing on the story abit more?


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Response to Sentinels: Operation Leviathan Aug. 25th, 2009 @ 04:59 PM Reply

Here's lineart of the splinter coloring is next.

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Response to Sentinels: Operation Leviathan Aug. 25th, 2009 @ 05:09 PM Reply

Pretty cool design. Angryglacier, would you mind if I PM'd you what I've done so far with my page so I can get an opinion on it?


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Response to Sentinels: Operation Leviathan Aug. 25th, 2009 @ 05:17 PM Reply

At 8/25/09 05:09 PM, Nergali wrote: Pretty cool design. Angryglacier, would you mind if I PM'd you what I've done so far with my page so I can get an opinion on it?

Sure

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Response to Sentinels: Operation Leviathan Aug. 25th, 2009 @ 05:19 PM Reply

I've finished up the splinter I want to know if it's ok before I post it's weapons and stats.

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Response to Sentinels: Operation Leviathan Aug. 25th, 2009 @ 05:22 PM Reply

Cool. Also I've just sent you the PM.


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Response to Sentinels: Operation Leviathan Aug. 25th, 2009 @ 05:24 PM Reply

At 8/25/09 05:09 PM, Nergali wrote: Pretty cool design. Angryglacier, would you mind if I PM'd you what I've done so far with my page so I can get an opinion on it?

^^THIS- Confuses the hell out of me.

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Response to Sentinels: Operation Leviathan Aug. 25th, 2009 @ 05:25 PM Reply

At 8/25/09 05:24 PM, TheDaveAngle wrote:
At 8/25/09 05:09 PM, Nergali wrote: Pretty cool design. Angryglacier, would you mind if I PM'd you what I've done so far with my page so I can get an opinion on it?
^^THIS- Confuses the hell out of me.

Oh sorry, didn't want to post my page till it was finished.


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Response to Sentinels: Operation Leviathan Aug. 25th, 2009 @ 06:24 PM Reply

At 8/25/09 05:25 PM, Nergali wrote:
Oh sorry, didn't want to post my page till it was finished.

That better be one hell of a page you're going to post for the time it took...


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Response to Sentinels: Operation Leviathan Aug. 25th, 2009 @ 06:51 PM Reply

(I'm not the greatest artist, but I tried my best. I'm usually better when it comes to writing than to drawing with GIMP.)

Hunched over a sensor array, the Cerxes-Class automaton tirelessly watched the readings for any anomalies. As it prepared to switch to another satellite, a sudden distortion caught its attention.

Its cybernetic brain pulsated rapidly as it integrated its right arm into the system, and within seconds it had downloaded all the knowledge surrounding the anomaly and then uploaded its report.

"THIS IS OUPOST BETA UNIT 05. UNIDENTIFIED SHIP ENTERING PLANETARY ORBIT. UNKNOWN MODEL. POSSIBILITY OF FALSE ALARM IS-"

"It is them." The voice echoed from a nearby transceiver. Its cold, calculating tone would have sent chills down the spine of any organic, but to the drone it was simply the voice of its master.

"ODDS OF MAKESHIFT CARGO SHIP, BOUNTY HUNTER CRAFT, OR PIRATE VESSEL ARE 200% HIGHER THAN-"

"I know it is them. My sources assures me of this. Prepare for contact, perform Order 34 and, if captured, initiate memory purge. If I am correct, she will be on the ship. I have been waiting for this day for some time."

"BY YOUR COMMAND."

As it automatically spoke its order acceptance speech, the doors beside it sealed shut as security measures were put into affect. Slowly the machines around it turned off, and finally, in the darkness, its visor activated, producing a sickly yellow glow.

Now it need only wait. It had its orders, and now it would follow them.

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Response to Sentinels: Operation Leviathan Aug. 25th, 2009 @ 06:54 PM Reply

Interesting.

Anyways, now that Glacier's Splinter is in the ship jaw and Darkside's Truck is safely locked down in the Hangar It's time to move out, and see what can be found out from the name of "Coris", Regardless of what danger lies ahead.

The Atmosphere disappears around The Javelin as the Air-lock opens, exposing the dark reaches of space.

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Response to Sentinels: Operation Leviathan Aug. 25th, 2009 @ 07:17 PM Reply

I'll do the next one.

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Response to Sentinels: Operation Leviathan Aug. 25th, 2009 @ 07:19 PM Reply

theres 2 things i dont get when do we post our own story pics and how are we supposed to know because at the moment it looks like your still developing the story
also can i post a redesign of the splinter i did, sorry glacier

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Response to Sentinels: Operation Leviathan Aug. 25th, 2009 @ 07:23 PM Reply

At 8/25/09 07:17 PM, lolxxXDarkSideXxxlol wrote: I'll do the next one

sorry i was writing while you posted so i didnt see that i guess it answers my question sorry

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Response to Sentinels: Operation Leviathan Aug. 25th, 2009 @ 07:33 PM Reply

Here's the splinter's information:

The "splinter," is a small fighter/infiltration class ship with the ability to fold it's wings and "stab" itself into the enemy ship. During it's process of lodging itself into the enemy ship it's cockpit moves back and goes inside the middle of the ship to prevent damage to the pilot, it then folds it's wings back all the way and fires a stream of armor piercing rounds. Once it breaks the shell of the enemy ship it then moves at top speed and rams itself through to the inside of the ship, when it's inside the pilot can either get out or continue flying the splinter inside the enemy ship. Infiltrating a enemy wastes half of the micro gattling guns ammo.

Weapons:

twin mounted micro gattling guns found at the base of the wings of the ship, firing armor piercing liquid nitrogen rounds.

triple "Spear" disruption laser found at the very bottom of ship, used for making a whole through any shields a enemy ship may use, or destroying incoming missiles.

Armor:
Ship has little armor, it's only defense is it's size and the spear disruption lasers.

Engine:

the fighters engine doesn't hold much power for flight for more than 3 days, but can reach maximum speeds of 200 MPH.

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Response to Sentinels: Operation Leviathan Aug. 25th, 2009 @ 07:39 PM Reply

At 8/25/09 07:19 PM, ashman112 wrote: theres 2 things i dont get when do we post our own story pics and how are we supposed to know because at the moment it looks like your still developing the story

I reckon it's pretty much set for it to be opened completely now.

Just a couple of pointers for everyone and anyone

-Try to maintain the narrative.
-Use interesting Camera angles.
-If you have difficulty with speech bubbles you may as well use the text box for dialogue, give yourself more room to work with.
-Don't overcomplicate things with too much plot twist and story, lets maintain a decent flow that the readers can follow easily.
-Rather than introducing new characters try to develop existing ones.
-Consider carefully what other users before you have contributed and established
before you put

Finally a little metaphor I use for the pacing of a story.

"Imagine someone is tickling your nose slowly with a feather, your nose begins to irritate slowly and builds up gradually, until finally you sneeze with explosive energy!"

Weird I know, but if you understand the meaning, it's quite handy.

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Response to Sentinels: Operation Leviathan Aug. 25th, 2009 @ 08:33 PM Reply

Robert checks the scanner and finds out that the Javelin is surrounded by 2 ships.
Are they friends or enemies?

Is up to you now!

Not much explanation because of my English, I'm really sorry :(

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