need help with parody/animation

[Jereminion]

hello i am making a gears of war parody. since it is meant to just be funny with content i guess i can just make everything a movieclip and use motion tweens. this is it so far

http://spamtheweb.com/ul/upload/210709/7 965_gearsmulti.php

some people say it is funny when i showed them which is the point. any other ways i can make the animation better or funnier?

[fluffkomix]

try shorter spaces inbetween lines. long spaces bore me and if there are too many i tend to just exit out of the movie.

[kylelyk]

1. Better sprites(drawing)
2. Lipsynching
3. Actual sounds for bullet fire
That would make it much better:)

[Neo-13]

Serious improvement needed on the art. Sound effects. And try to include some comedy. It didn't even get a twitch of the corner of the mouth from me.

[Jereminion]

At 7/21/09 12:28 PM, Neo-13 wrote: Serious improvement needed on the art. Sound effects. And try to include some comedy. It didn't even get a twitch of the corner of the mouth from me.

i thought it was pretty funny when the voice actor said bang bang bang and you can hear crickets in his yard

[Neo-13]

At 7/21/09 12:43 PM, Jereminion wrote:

At 7/21/09 12:28 PM, Neo-13 wrote: Serious improvement needed on the art. Sound effects. And try to include some comedy. It didn't even get a twitch of the corner of the mouth from me.

i thought it was pretty funny when the voice actor said bang bang bang and you can hear crickets in his yard

I didn't.

Maybe other people do/will, but you won't exactly be braking new ground with this as it is.

[Wolfos]

wow... you cant draw... try to use better colors

[WhoknowsmeaUdiO]

At 7/21/09 02:35 PM, robin1232 wrote: wow... you cant draw... try to use better colors

Best. Advice. Ever.

Try and follow some animation tutorials here and use a thinner outline.

[Jereminion]

i guess no point in trying if none of u thought it was funny.. that was the point even if the drawings were bad and i messed up dang