fallen angel

[14etan]

I started this picture today but my computers screen got messed up before i could finish so i thought this would be perfect for mid critisism. please point out anything i could improve on or ideas that you have that i could use. if you have unfinished art word post it here to be critised or guided please only post artwork after critising another piece.

[HyperJive]

I kind of dig your coloring style, but I think you need to work on making your people a little less blocky--it'd be a lot stronger of a peice if they had a little more dimension. I always use a reference myself. I find a lot of good poses in the stock section of DeviantArt. Or you can just take a picture of yourself.

Hope this was helpful, I'm not really good at c&c.

[CosmicDebris]

We-ell the lineart's a little under average, however, the colouring makes up for it.

Almost.

[14etan]

well i was focusing more on my coloring for this picture than my line art and for some reason wheneer i do characters on the comp they end up blocky idk y ill have to work on that though thanks.

[JoeTheToucan]

What is everyone (usually young kids)'s obsession with calling their work 'The fallen angel'?
You DO realise that it's originally satan, yes? Lucifer? The angel cast from heaven for he thought himself higher than God?

Seriously, it makes you sound like a proper fag.

[14etan]

1 that has nothing to do with my 2 who said i named it that 3 yes i know who lucifer is 4 the painting is refering to fallen humanity that we failed and have fallen from grace 5 and who is the fag here a kid asking for his art to be critiqued or some person who walks in and starts an argument over the most minute detail. if you want to right a thread called why do kids all call their artwork the fallen angel by all means go right ahead but your comment is nothing more than you trying to sound like some smart ass

[JoeTheToucan]

At 6/28/09 12:58 PM, 14etan wrote: A big, long, defensive paragraph

Fuck's sake, USE FULL STOPS.

I ain't got nothing against you. I'm not trying to be a smart-ass or start an argument- there would be no point in doing so to a child. I fail to see any depth to your illustration, it gives no hint of what it's about. There's a critique for you, it seems just like another generic kid's sketch with another generic title that supposedly decreases the poor effort and boringness of the piece.

I know I may sound like an ass, but I'm just explaining why the title and image annoys me- I've seen it too often. Rubbish 'art', with a title that trys to make it sound all philosiphical and deep.