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At 6/8/09 07:31 PM, PsycoticDemon wrote:

Stuff that MeMB said.

I couldn't have explained it better myself o.O
But yeah, someone just save this story already. Sniper + hobo die from the crash, Mr. Wilson or whatever goes to somalia, ACTUALLY FINDS OUT WHO THE REAL BAD GUY IS!!!!

We've gone through 25 pages now, and we STILL DON'T KNOW WHO THE ANTAGONIST IS!!!! Once you get to somalia, sure, introduce ONE new friend for our main character. and one, MAYBE two, new enemies. Because right now, Osama is going to be a bigger baddie than the main character. You need to make it not only LONGER, but BETTER. Good luck lol.

stfu you haven't done shit, btw new pic
The sniper and hobo run from the flaming jeep and into the remains of the train, slamming the door shut right as the jeep hit. This meant the were now trapped. Hobo and sniper believed that they had accidentally left the hero behind and he was now dead. Btw the thing is with the zombie candymen is that the mind control bug is still active in their brains meaning that even when they themselves are dead the mind control makes them reanimated corpses, similar to the one the hero first encountered. Because the mind contrl bug is in the brain the only way to kill them is destroying the brain. I love this pic

I just quickly scrolled through the last 4 pages and counted like 8 actual drawn images... which leads me to believe this thread sucks. I'll give it one more page.... if I don't see more art than not, it's getting locked.

Thanks

forgot one thing, that last pics a two parter

The two ventured through the remains of the train battling the reanimated candymen. Finally the reached the end where they could exit. Btw for my next pic which i just don't feel like doing, i'm planning on the sniper and the hobo getting to somalia and chuck saying something like,"sorry, this is the most that i can do for you, i have to go now. Good luck"

you guys need to shut up and start posting pictures again.

Our Hero finds himself lying in an alley, it stinks of garbage and sewage, the hot Somalian sun beats down overhead.

At 6/8/09 04:10 PM, Zoidz wrote:

At 6/8/09 04:02 PM, TheDaveAngle wrote: RIP candy woman and Jared.

Amen, bro. :(

And may I do the honors of doing the next scene after mastermalpass's second scene? I would like to return a character that was from the beginning of this thread.

And it's not MJ or Jared.

No.. he awaked didnt u guys now that?
UGH..

At 6/8/09 04:19 PM, TheDaveAngle wrote:

wow..thats really really fucking insulting, i know my art isn't the best but you sdon't have to be a complete dick about it

I think he meant his art had GOTTEN better

Yee thats what i meaned sorry for that type fauld

Ok everyone, this page is the defining moment; the fate of the thread depends on this page, if it sucks the thread will be locked by ReNaeNae and "So There I Was..." will never be completed, so now is the time to show the worth of the story and the artists who have poured their time into it and prove that the story still has potential and the right to be finished, LETS DO IT!

Ok guys here's an update of our current situation...I suggest you read it and DO NOT POST A COMMENT ABOUT IT HERE. Just comment on the blog.

UPDATE

WE CAN DO THIS GUYS... JUST GET YOUR HEADS DOWN AND POST SOME FUCKING PICTURES!!!

Our hero awakes in a daze.

Picture part 1 of 2

forgot the fucking pic

From ReNaeNae

I just deleted 40+ posts of bickering and irrelevant crap on just the last 2-3 pages.

As the topic starter, it's up to you to keep things on track, and if they get out of hand, contact a mod to step in. You handled it perfectly on page 24 when you told people to disregard an image that would take the story in an unfavorable direction... now just apply that to the in-fighting and you should be ok. Some arguing is to be expected, but ...eight images in 4 pages?! c'mon!!

MORE ART, LESS CHATTER.

You have until the END OF PAGE 25 to prove the thread is worth keeping open. Good luck.

That was from ReNaeNae the Art Forum Mod. Let's prove to him that this thread is worth the effort he spent clearing it up for us.

...Here's Pic 2 of 2.

Due to file size restrictions I had to trim the shit out of the picture.

Our Hero stumbles out of the allyway. But he knows where he is.

At 6/9/09 10:34 AM, KoLdBLooD wrote:
That was from ReNaeNae the Art Forum Mod. Let's prove to him that this thread is worth the effort he spent clearing it up for us.

Correction: she. She's female. That said, nice picture! I like your style. I'm working on something now.

What our hero did not know, is that when Gman teleported him to the village of Antooye, there was a huge flash of energy. Needless to say, it was noticed by a faction of Somalian pirates, who had a camp roughly twelve kilometres from Antooye.

The campleader immediately ordered a small patrol to check it out. And so, a white pickup with five armed pirates and a mounted machine gun drove off to investigate the strange blast of energy.

Correction: she. She's female. That said, nice picture! I like your style. I'm working on something now.

Whoops... My bad. =P

What our hero did not know, is that when Gman teleported him to the village of Antooye, there was a huge flash of energy. Needless to say, it was noticed by a faction of Somalian pirates, who had a camp roughly twelve kilometres from Antooye.

The campleader immediately ordered a small patrol to check it out.

Nice, Great job on advancing the story. Good job on the pic also.

that's nice, who's next? (I can't do the next part at the moment)
do not try to kill or reaveal sniper's identity, I've got something HUGE in my mind, and it will explain why Jared came back to life ;D

i'll do the next one, hobo and sniper finally reunite with the hero

At 6/9/09 02:53 PM, Falconpunchr wrote: i'll do the next one, hobo and sniper finally reunite with the hero

Could you wait until I post the one I'm working on now? I'm pretty sure this won't interfere with your part. Shouldn't take too long. Thanks!

Our hero wandered through Antooye; wounded, hurt and dazed by the fall. Suddenly he heard the distant roar of a motorized vehicle. It grew louder and louder. It was coming this way. He prepared for the worst and checked his holster. No gun!

Panic struck, and our hero franticly searched the surroundings for anything that could be used as a weapon. To no avail. But then he spotted a bone on the ground. It looked like it could be human, but more importantly, it looked like it could be wielded as a club, in lack of better weaponry.

At 6/9/09 03:12 PM, MeMB wrote: Our hero wandered through Antooye; wounded, hurt and dazed by the fall. Suddenly he heard the distant roar of a motorized vehicle. It grew louder and louder. It was coming this way. He prepared for the worst and checked his holster. No gun!

lol. Is that Gman's shoulder I see in the windows?

Ok guys, I think we need to plan things out a little. I'm sure that if we're discussing where this story should lead, rather than arguing about it, then it's a little more acceptable and Renaenae will allow it (if not then Renae, Please say so).

We just have to come to terms with what's going on. Our Hero, has been dropped off somewhere in Somalia, with a simple mission - capture the rebel leader so Gman and his employers can get to him.

I'm thinking that we've had enough action. And I suggest that rather than go rambo through somalia, and kill his way up to the leader he could for example join the Pirates, and sneak his way up.

I have to say that I am surprised that my scene with jared going solid-snake around the cruiser, and being stealthy, was the only spy-themed scene in the whole story.

All I want is for people to think of something a little different, or more importantly, think of how their scene is going to affect the story. I fill many of my scenes with Dialogue, so they tell you what's happening, and what's going to happen. Also, that guy who told us about the story arc - LISTEN TO HIM! Story structure is very important. Have you guys seen the golden compass? If so, were you really immersed in the story? If no, then it's because it was loads of story crammed into one - we had too many protagonists and antagonists. KEEP IT SIMPLE!

Oh and KoldBlood... Sorry for spoiling the name, I didn't realise it was important to the sirname. But of course, no one else in this thread seems to think twice before a plot twist so I wouldn't be supprised if that in the last scene you could go "But his name was ACTUALLY __________ and that Gman had orriginally been employed by our hero to get someone else but hired out hero by accident" Or something like that.

At 6/9/09 04:44 PM, mastermalpass wrote:

Oh and KoldBlood... Sorry for spoiling the name, I didn't realise it was important to the sirname. But of course, no one else in this thread seems to think twice before a plot twist so I wouldn't be supprised if that in the last scene you could go "But his name was ACTUALLY __________ and that Gman had orriginally been employed by our hero to get someone else but hired out hero by accident" Or something like that.

Unfortunately there is no bigger picture for our protagonist. There he was... Just sitting in a bar, then all this happened. Although His surname is revealed, I'm still going to reveal his full identity closer to the end and disregard anyone else who tries to take that away from me.

I think the action has just about run it's course for now. Our hero is too wounded to put up a fight. and it will take a while for the other two side characters to catch up.

I've got a two parter coming up.

At 6/9/09 05:10 PM, TheDaveAngle wrote: I've got a two parter coming up.

wait what about mine?!

At 6/9/09 04:44 PM, mastermalpass wrote:
lol. Is that Gman's shoulder I see in the windows?

Haha, yeah. I actually included him in my last two pictures. Look carefully and you should spot him in both.

Anyway, I think you're right about what way we're going to go. Our hero is now alone, and now that he is greatly outnumbered he should resort to guerilla tactics, such as infiltration as you said. I think we should move more towards an action comic with funny bits in it than the other way around. But I guess that's up to whoever's drawing. As long as we do our best to keep the story compelling, everything should be fine.

Also ReNaeNae said there should be more pictures, not that we cannot discuss how the story is evolving. Just make sure to keep active with picture-making. That's why I drew those last two frames.

you know what neverind finish doing your two pictures

Our hero grabs the bone, but he knows that this won't be much use if anyone attacks him, time for a different tactic.

He uses the curtain to fashion a disguise, and prays to god it looks convincing.

now i'll do the next

At 6/9/09 05:58 PM, TheDaveAngle wrote: He uses the curtain to fashion a disguise, and prays to god it looks convincing.

to hot for armor......but not hot for a robe/head wrap combo

nice......

At 6/9/09 05:58 PM, TheDaveAngle wrote: He uses the curtain to fashion a disguise, and prays to god it looks convincing.

Nice man! Good introduction to the new guerilla approach.