Mwc9 :feb: Worth 1000 Words : Talk

[gumOnShoe]

Please limit all discussion of this months writing competition to this thread. Please wait to post here until the official contest rules have been posted and linked to in the next post. Thank you. :D

[gumOnShoe]

Official contest rules and guidelines located here: http://www.newgrounds.com/bbs/topic/1026 816

You are free to move about the cabin.

[gumOnShoe]

At 2/9/09 04:07 PM, Fyndir wrote:

At 2/9/09 04:05 PM, gumOnShoe wrote: DEADLINE: MARCH 1ST, 2009; MIDNIGHT STD, EST (ie midnight between Feb 1st and Feb 2nd) (GMT -5)

I burst out laughing when I noticed the error.

Oh damn, I missed that part. LOL.

Do me the honors and post the correction if you want Fyndir, in the same thread. :(

[Lost-Chances]

I was some how expecting something different but I'll try to corporate a private project into this (into a two in one thing). It's an interesting concept but for some reason I feel it's weird to stop on the 13th image. Then again, it might be a case of just being overly superstitious. I some how expected a "make a St Valentines Day story" guideline but this works in a more interesting way.

Wonder if I'll ever be a judge.

Those pictures are certainly very intriguing. I'm already starting to cook up ideas for a few of them, though I'm going to have to stir over this one for a bit longer. It's a bit relieving, because last time I felt as though I was walking on thin ice.

I'm going to see what this month's competitors think before going any further, heh...

[TheSilverGuitar]

At 2/9/09 04:58 PM, Lost-Chances wrote: Wonder if I'll ever be a judge.

I nominate Lost-Chances for judge on the grounds that he is awesome.

[LazyPint]

At 2/9/09 04:05 PM, gumOnShoe wrote:

PRIZES - Tom Fulp is backing our competition! Yay!

Saves me money, which is something I'm totally into.

(Note pending voice battle TC may replace Fyndir as first place prize. :o)

I'm guessing you meant TS for Tactical Shoe, mais non?

[Gagsy]

Ok I'm actually going to try for this I think. Once I heard 'picture competition' I just knew it'd be revolved around one picture and that idea is damn cool.

[gumOnShoe]

At 2/9/09 05:16 PM, LazyPint wrote:

(Note pending voice battle TC may replace Fyndir as first place prize. :o)

I'm guessing you meant TS for Tactical Shoe, mais non?

Indeed I did.

As to who the fifth judge is for this contest I'll be discussing it with the other judges and we'll come to some sort of consensus. Any decision made, will be completely impersonal, etc. I'll let the person know that's judging if and when it happens.

[Renandchi2]

Ok guys, I made my entry, and it was a lot of fun to make. When I write stories, I write whatever comes to mind at the moment, and I think it shows. I'd appreciate any critisim/reviews.

[BananaBreadMuffin]

At 2/9/09 04:07 PM, Fyndir wrote:

At 2/9/09 04:05 PM, gumOnShoe wrote: DEADLINE: MARCH 1ST, 2009; MIDNIGHT STD, EST (ie midnight between Feb 1st and Feb 2nd) (GMT -5)

I burst out laughing when I noticed the error.

And he also managed to make TacticalShoe's link go to a typo'd dead page :D

[Renandchi2]

Review of Ironosaur's story:
I think his story was great! I give it a 9/10. It was a bit hard to follow at times, but it brought out a clear messageof how violence due to religion is not right. I liked the small humor baked in as well. And the metaphors for the guns being instruments were top notch.
I loved the prayer being recited. It uppened the suspense, and it made mr read faster, because I was eager to read to the end. Besides the amen mitherfuckers comment (which felt kinda unnessasary, but still good) the ending was perfectlynplotted out, and it madebme act out the story in my head. This story beat mine by a longshot, and I hope to see it win money

[TacticalShoe]

I really like the idea behind this competition, so expect an entry from me..... well, not soon, but sometime.

[WritersBlock]

I've started writing for the 12th image, and I've borrowed a little from a couple of the other pictures ;D I think I've got a good thing going, but we'll see how it turns out.

On a side note, I picked out picture number 13. "Down On His Luck" by McCubbin. I had to write a short story based on this picture in high school, so I thought if it's good enough for the education department, it's good enough for you guys.

Good luck everyone. I hope the $30 prizes can pique interest in this competition and really motivate some people. I kind of wish I weren't judging so I could be eligible for the prizes.

Hint hint gum, let's get this rotational judges idea up and running! When more people can step up to judge, that is...

While I'm here, I'll make an attempt to at least make a few comments on what we have so far. Plenty of time left, so it's anybody's game. I'm not entirely sure how the judges will be tackling this, so I'll make no attempt to emulate that, unless it's without me knowing. I'm awful with ratings, so I'll stay away from those too. I'm also not big into pointing out spelling errors, though I'll talk about grammar if I think it's appropriate.

Renandchi2

Not a bad effort. The woman in the picture does indeed have a look of amnesia on her face, at least to me, and I think you captured the atmosphere of the setting fairly decently. A few phrases here and there seem a little off, and could've been disposed with though, I feel. Instead, a bit more description in the place of certain phrases might have given the piece a bit more spice. The dialogue was not too bad; there is a comfortable flow of the story within the dialogue. Perhaps through the fault of the Internet, it could've looked nicer and maybe easier to read if it was spaced out a tad, but that's not essential to a good story.

Ironosaur

When I looked through the pictures yesterday, I was interested in seeing where people took this particular picture, and I wasn't expecting this. Your story made me laugh: I got a sense of satire, like Pastafarianism is intended to be. The speech was executed well, moving between the dfferent parts of the story. I liked the musical metaphors in particular. I wouldn't have minded reading a little more build-up, perhaps more on these guys in plaster. The climax gave me a giggle though, the way it's done in four lines, I like stuff like that for some reason.

[Hybrid-Of-Souls]

Considering that Tom himself is backing this up with NG cash to spare, I thought this would be a contest I could get involved in.
I drew out some ideas on the picture with the solid color people.

[Sun-Wukong]

Sweet, that first picture gives me a neat idea. I'm going to start righting as soon as I do some research on current day Russia and the former Soviet Union. Glad to see you guys have so many original ideas for contests.

[TheReno]

Well I finished. My first western Im so happy! For those of you who are confused, Carbines are shorter and lighter then regular rifles, good for close quarters combat, so dont vote down cause you think I forgot the rifle he used lol. He dun switched. 8 guages did exist back then. Very powerful gun. Also very hard to miss with em xD The town is fictional, the characters are fictional. It was originally going to be called Pennslyvania Haven, where John was going to not be a law man but still fight a gang and have to run from them to friends in pennslyvania and duke it out there, but I changed it cause my favorite westerns are those bout the marshals or sheriffs. ENJOY. And Ill review others later but its 11:43 pm and Im creativly tired from writting all that just now so let me recharge and come back with a fresh mind.

[JadeTheAssassin]

I started writing mine.

I don't know how it'll turn out, or if I should start again, but I like how it's forming.

TheReno

The western setting was captured quite well, I think, in many cases thanks to dialogue driven sections. I liked it how you used historical processes to feed the story, and plunge the character into more exciting situations. In the first person sections, getting to know John was interesting. I thought the description was adequate, hitting its peak in the final fight scene. I've got to admit, the use of narrator voice with different perspectives confused me to begin with, but I got into it. Unfortunately, this got me muddled up in the story too. That being said, it was ended nicely. Not bad at all.

[Idiot-Finder]

Despie my phobia, if only there's a photo of a spider ready to eat a bug caught on a web...I'd make the story erotic.

[Drugged]

At 2/9/09 04:07 PM, Fyndir wrote:

At 2/9/09 04:05 PM, gumOnShoe wrote: DEADLINE: MARCH 1ST, 2009; MIDNIGHT STD, EST (ie midnight between Feb 1st and Feb 2nd) (GMT -5)

I burst out laughing when I noticed the error.

I just noticed that. STD.

[TheReno]

I just finished Ironosaurs story and I must say, brilliant. What really appealed to me about this was not the undertones of that world and this, the causes of violence, but was that the colors themselves really took on a persona their own. Now I admit that is true of most story characters, but the point Im trying to get across is that they feel like their colors, blue is blue ya know? And the insturments names as a weapons was funny. Really a great story. Id give you 9/10

Thanks for the review scarab. The whole point of the father son scenes was for two things:
1) It allowed me to skip that big ass chunk of time in which nothing happened that needed more emphasis
2) It let me fit the picture. As I said, I wanted this called Pennslyvania haven, but I set it in texas hoping for a chase. The story changed in my mind when I got up to the first Haven showdown. I wanted it all in Texas. What to do about a fuxing forest scene then? Kill a dude and refer to 1 please xD

But I understand it kind of threw you off base for a second. I revised those parts a couple times as I wrote them but I just never got it to feel right, so I went with the best try xD Again thanks for the review. I hav a bit of a wait it seems and I hope their filled with good stories like the one I just read. Good luck everyone!

[darknessdweller]

Like I'd ever have the skills to make some kind of story as good as theirs!

[TheReno]

At 2/11/09 04:38 PM, darknessdweller wrote: Like I'd ever have the skills to make some kind of story as good as theirs!

Never know till you try! I thought for sure Id bomb out on westerns since I lean more towards sci fi and fantasy, but what do ya know, I did alright lol. Just try your best and if you lose, it doesnt matter, you learn. and you try again in the next contest. So come on, you know you want to.

[Lost-Chances]

At 2/11/09 04:38 PM, darknessdweller wrote: Like I'd ever have the skills to make some kind of story as good as theirs!

Heh, you'd be surprised. I'm not really into English as a subject (I prefer more black and white subjects like science) and I'm not amazing but I'm okay. I at least am able to piece a story together some people can enjoy to some-what an extent.

I finally finished my story, just making some adjustments and it'll be up on my user-page by about Saturday (to ask for any more ideas for improvement). Then I'll submit at some point before the competition is over. It's something I've never really tried to do, a some-what romance. In it's current state it's a little clunky but I'm hoping to improve it.

[4urentertainment]

Wow wow wow, when did newgrounds have a writing contest? How many have I missed?

And if "Tom is backing this contest up with money" this time, then what were the other contests? No prize?

[4urentertainment]

Well I'm definitely entering this contest. I've been waiting for something like this for a long time.

[TheReno]

Themanthelegned: I liked your short story. Very intresting to get a perspective on things beyond our notice. If givin the chance, I have no doubt a moth or any sort of bug would do what you have described, especially about the light xD A bit too short though, for me anyway. I wanted to see what happend after the light, or maybe events leading up to it instead of just straight to a light. A 7/10 just cause it was too short for me. Good Luck in the contest!

Renandchi2: Im sorry, I cant give you a review for your story. Ive tried to read it several times now but I just cant do it. Its written well, dont get me wrong, but the story doesnt intrest me. It probably will several other but I am sadly not intrested, just as Im sure alot of people wont read mine cause its a western. Im really sorry though. So I wont give a rating, because if I didnt like it cause it was poorly written, thats one thing, but when it is well written and i just dont like the story genreish thing, thats just biased. Good luck to you too xD

[BankingOntheEnemy]

Yay!! I like how we are reviewing each others stories...its a great way to get and receive feedback!