At 1/18/09 08:01 PM, djconnect wrote:
give writers a place to share there creative stories in a friendly environment. So if you want to talk about a favorite book, or share your latest chapter come join us now!
Would this count? It's a premise that was orginally going to be turned into a book, but I decided that making a flash might be better
In the small town of Orso, there is a rumor going around about the thief of the forest. It is said that he hides in the forest and attacks any who cross his path, killing them and taking everything of value on their person. He once slaughtered a hundred men in one battle and claimed all their weapons for his own. He is said to have the face of death and the mark of the devil on his shoulder. The people of Orso haven't dared leave their village both out of fear of the monstrosity and protection that the thief provide.
War rages in Virdum, the country that Orso inhabites. Atlum, its neighbor, has blamed the death of one of its heirs, on the kingdom. Two young boys, Brand and Kyler, decide to leave their village to join the war effort in the hopes of becoming war heroes. Ignoring the rumors, they venture into the forest to find an a group of bandits planning an attack on the village. To their surprise a young man carrying 10 swords on his back, decends from a tree and defeats them all without any effort.
The man that saved the village is the thief of the forest. Claiming to be the "King of Thieves", Ryder makes a deal for the two boys. He will be their bodyguard during their journey to the capital in return for anything the boys collect for their jobs as soliders. The three then journey to the castle, not knowing that their journey would be the start of the fate of Virdum and Altum. Ryder's secret might be the key to the survival of both kingdoms.
Could you please give me constructive criticism (please don't tell me about my spelling errors, there's no spell check on here) on this. I know you guys are supposed to be nice in terms of flaming, but please tell me if this idea seems worthy enough to continue on with.
I'll post a new story idea every month as its part of my New years resoulution.