do you think this is a good rap?

[theblackkangaroo]

yo yo
i like crusts on my bread thats what i fucking said
i have you layin in a perminate bed
im talkin bout a coffin bitch
ill fuck you up just like i do fish
i dont like to wash my dish
because i dont like get a tick
yes that right you can get a tick from washin a dish bitch
i rap like a dude with a big dick becuse i am bitch.

[joabos]

All raps are horrible. And so is that one.

[theblackkangaroo]

OH I AM NOT BLACK BY THE WAY.

[theblackkangaroo]

people please i need your appinion

[JaY11]

Were you desperately trying to rhyme or something?

[TJoyal]

Mine's better

The name's TJoyal, you're nothing but junk
I'm taking you to school and your gonna flunk
You messing with me and you're messin with the best
Mess with me anytime and I'll pass that test
Look in my eyes. theirs nothing but red
Fuck off before I put you on your deathbed
I'll knock you out so hard, you'll get brain damage
How will you expect to manage? I keep my words sweet and my raps cold
That was my rap and you have just been told!

respect!

[Spartan204]

First of all, this thread is a joke, right?

Second, TJoyal, are you trying to make this into another big rap thread.

[TJoyal]

At 12/3/08 05:10 PM, Spartan204 wrote: First of all, this thread is a joke, right?

Second, TJoyal, are you trying to make this into another big rap thread.

No. I didn't even know we had those here since the majority hate rap. I just thought of this right now.

[theblackkangaroo]

yo. fuck you bitch yeah ill pass the test
im not under stress like you and your man breasts
oh i just dissed you what you gonna do foo
you cant do shit because i just killed youuuuu.

now who is best

[JimmySaint]

Uhh... Some improvement is needed, I'll put it that way... Sorry

[Sparki29]

At 12/3/08 05:00 PM, theblackkangaroo wrote: ill fuck you up just like i do fish
i dont like to wash my dish
because i dont like get a tick
yes that right you can get a tick from washin a dish bitch
i rap like a dude with a big dick becuse i am bitch.

this whole part sux monkey -boys balls

[Timmy]

Let's go through this "rap" shall we?

i like crusts on my bread thats what i fucking said

Raping about bakery goods is always certain to make a hit. Unless you are being clever, and "bread" is being used as the slang term for money. In that case, I have no clue what "crust" refers to.

i have you layin in a perminate bed
im talkin bout a coffin bitch

Any insult you have to explain is way better than straightforward, clear insults.

ill fuck you up just like i do fish

Fist sex made Dre famous.

i dont like to wash my dish
because i dont like get a tick

Wait...what?

yes that right you can get a tick from washin a dish bitch

Oh, ok.

i rap like a dude with a big dick becuse i am bitch.

Referring to yourself as a bitch will bring all the ladies running.

So - yeah. Good rap. I give it a 10/10.

[TJoyal]

At 12/3/08 05:11 PM, theblackkangaroo wrote: yo. fuck you bitch yeah ill pass the test
im not under stress like you and your man breasts
oh i just dissed you what you gonna do foo
you cant do shit because i just killed youuuuu.

now who is best

I'd respond back but if rap threads are frowned upon, I don't want to suffer a ban by continuing my raps.

Plus the only part that was funny was the one with the breasts, lol.

[His-Penis-is-on-Fire]

God damn, you fucks are fucking awful at writing music.

[TJoyal]

At 12/3/08 05:16 PM, His-Penis-is-on-Fire wrote: God damn, you fucks are fucking awful at writing music.

It's rap...it's not music

[ripmycat]

No.

Doesn't really need much more :/

[full0fish]

Here:

My names full0fish and i'm here to say, im the rappingest guy in the USA,
my bros call me the hiphopapotamous cos my lyrics bottomless,
others call me the rhymanocerous cos my rymes are so notorious,
give jerry a pasty, cos hes starting to turn nasty,
you face looks so ghastly, and hopefully this thread won't contain any links to rick astley as that is a bannable offence,
D fence! YO!

[Not-God]

At 12/3/08 05:07 PM, TJoyal wrote: respect!

Dear god that was worse than the first person's, it's just so corny hehe. I kinda like the "I keep my words sweet and my raps cold" part however.

Take a look at this song, one of my favorite pieces of poetry. There's just something about Tupac that seperated him from the rest. And yes, there is good rap out there, don't hop on the bandwagon and say that it sucks just to try and be offensive and try to show that you're all-knowing about music, when in fact you're the opposite. My favorite musicians are spread among all different styles of music, so i'm not just defending rap. People just have to learn to seperate the dumbasses from the geniuses, and i'm sure you'll find something you'll really, really like in every genre. Be humble about things.

Supress the revolution of premeditated scheme
Introduce a drug called crack, to us ghetto teens
Got a law for raw ni**** now playa what it be like?
When will ni****see they got us bleedin with three strikes
Can't seem to focus hopeless, with
violent thoughts I wrote this
Got these Devils petrified, hidin from my hocus-pocus
And so I learned to earn my currency in over time
Affiliated, clearly click a military mind
May God forgive us though we dwell inside a paradox
Thugged out and drug dealin, from the womb to the block
My live mind got me survivin five rounds
My forty-five got my fortified with live rounds
When shit's thick we plot hits, when our glock spits
All hail, Out on Bail, Wrath of 2Pacalypse
Forever ghetto necessary picture food stamps
Outlaw Thug Ni**** never left the boot camp
verse 2
Now I was born as a rebel, making trouble for the devil
Take this gang bang shit, to a whole nother level
Can you feel me now? Armies in every city
Definition of power, players are you with me?
See the war is the prophecy, survival is the strategy
Rest in peace to my comrades that deceased
Organize these streets in time
You'll have these devils petrified of a ni*** in his right mind
They tell us that we hopeless and hell bound
This fo the brothers in penetentiaries jailed down
I got you in my heart till tha day I die
Think of the damage we can do, if we bustin high
Can you picture me loc? it's a thugs wrath
Political contracts and blood baths
For Matulu Shakur up in the rikers,
Though they got you, I never let them stop me
The struggle continues

[PsycoticDemon]

At 12/3/08 05:07 PM, TJoyal wrote:

sweet and my raps cold

That was my rap and you have just been told!

respect!

Hey, that is the old type of rap! =O
Win!

[His-Penis-is-on-Fire]

At 12/3/08 05:20 PM, TJoyal wrote:

At 12/3/08 05:16 PM, His-Penis-is-on-Fire wrote: God damn, you fucks are fucking awful at writing music.

It's rap...it's not music

Rap is a genre of music, idiot.

[LOLZILLA]

yo chikkity CHECK YO SELF
befo' yall WRECK YO SELF
GEE YOO NIT in da hous

[Achilles2]

At 12/3/08 05:00 PM, theblackkangaroo wrote: yo yo

No, it isn't good. You need a meaningful central message. Even if your lines and rhymes are god, and even if your flow is good, you don't have a central message so the song would suck.

[Kool-Aid]

Haha is this made by yourself? Not bad

[TacoFreak]

No it doesn't and doesn't make any sense.

[TacoFreak]

At 12/3/08 06:30 PM, TacoFreak wrote: No it doesn't and doesn't make any sense.

No it isn't*

I'm making so many typos lately.

Also to the OP: Don't make stuff just rhyme, it has to make sense and have some sort of meaning.