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At 6/29/12 11:36 AM, Warforger wrote:

At 6/29/12 10:15 AM, TheKlown wrote: Does Obama Care hurt poor and lower middle class people who can't afford health-care? Someone online said it on a youtube vid but I don't know if it's true.

I think I've explained this before. It forces everyone to buy healthcare, when this happens insurance companies have more money, when insurance companies have more money they can lower their rates and still provide insurance for those people who actively need it thus everyone has healthcare and it's affordable.

Only if there's competition between insurance providers. If there isn't and there's a monopoly, what possible reason would the insurance company have to lower their rates? INCREASINGthem is in fact the more logical thing for them to do as they have a captive audience who MUST purchase their goods as a result of a Government mandate.

This suggests that there are serious monopolies or monopolistic potential in a lot of states. So that suggests to me that your argument is incorrect. Unless you're relying on the good will of health insurance companies to ' do the right thing' rather than acting in line with increasing their profit margins?

At 6/29/12 10:01 AM, jeremyjamal wrote: Recently my mood seems to be more unstable than Brandon Marshall (football Joke). I know that my life is pretty decent right now, but I cant help feeling down and sluggish at times. Its really starting to bother me, so I ask internet, what should I do?

Exercise. It releases hormones which make you feel better ( eating chocolate does the same thing but is less healthy over all. Sex works for the same reason as well.)

At 6/29/12 10:22 AM, TheKlown wrote: How can the force lower middle class and poor people to pay fines if they can't afford it? This is the dumbest shit I've ever heard. Why don't these rich ass holes like Obama and his Rich celebrity friends pay for our health care? Why are actors making millions of dollars doing movies while we have harder workers doing construction for a living who bust their balls making shit money even tho they're working harder!

Someone more knowledgeable may have to correct me on this, but I was under the impression that Obamacare had a built in protection for the lower classes? Ie, if you can't afford it the Government pays, and it only really impacts in terms of the financial aspects if you CAN afford it but for some reason choose not to?

Or is the media in Britain not reporting things correctly ( wouldn't shock me to be honest).

At 6/29/12 09:14 AM, Bahamut wrote:

At 6/29/12 06:45 AM, Tri-Nitro-Toluene wrote: Approximately two years ago I left this fine site for an adventure known as ' life'.

If all went to plan with me (which has never been since.... ever), I would have easily got myself into life long ago.

Now someone pass the jammy dodgers and bring me a cup of tea. No sugar please I'm on a diet.

While you're here and plan to stick around, how about returning to your mod duties?

I wouldn't object too strongly. I can certainly pop onto the forums at least once or twice a day to help keep on top of things.

At 6/29/12 06:35 AM, Xenomit wrote: But it literally won't let me

The site never lets you leave.

One of us. One of us. One of us!

At 6/29/12 06:45 AM, ZJ wrote:

At 6/29/12 06:33 AM, Tri-Nitro-Toluene wrote: Has Luke Wilson even been in a good movie?

Seriously, I cna't even think of anything he's been in that's even remotely passable.

3:10 to Yuma, Idiocracy, Old School, The Royal Tenenbaums, Rushmore, etc.

3:10 to yuma is about the only one I can remember anything about. Does this make me some of kind of movie heathen?

Approximately two years ago I left this fine site for an adventure known as ' life'. During that time I have found that ' life' isn't all its cracked up to be and wish to re apply for membership of this fine establishment. I'm sure within the archives and memories of the club there will be recollections of my existence which can verify that I am indeed a true gentleman.

Now someone pass the jammy dodgers and bring me a cup of tea. No sugar please I'm on a diet.

Has Luke Wilson even been in a good movie?

Seriously, I cna't even think of anything he's been in that's even remotely passable.

Also, I should say I'm not being an arse or anything on purpose, I just don't get a chance to discuss History that much outside of Uni, and kind of leap on the opportunity when I can :P

At 1/28/10 02:52 PM, DizzeeRascal wrote: I have to disagree with you there. Going to war over the Sudetenland, with Czechoslovakia behind us would have been a much more favourable position for the allies, even without the Spitfire (which I might add, was a very good, but not decisive aircraft. Hurricanes outnumbered them nearly 3-1 during the Battle of Britain). One of the key reasons the Germans were able to make war in 1939 was their annexing of Czechoslovakia, giving them the raw materials they badly needed.

True, but the reason for not going to war over Czechoslovakia, can't just be put down to Chamberlain. The intelligence services of the British at the time stated that the Czechs could field 19 divisions ( at maximum) of infantry and cavalry. When it came down to it, the Czechs were able to mobilise just over 40 divisions, meaning the Chiefs of Staff under estimated the strength of the Czech army by half.

From a military perspective, the Czechs had first rate defences by any standard, and large numbers of well trained troops. They could have easily held up on their own, or at the very most, with minimal allied support on that front. To even contemplate taking over these defences, the Germans would have had to have concentrated all of their resources on the Czechs, leaving their flank hopelessley exposed to the French and British. Really, I am just echoing the sentiments of Len Deighton's Blitzkreig, which is a fantastic book, dispelling many of the myths of the invincible German army.

Not read that book, but from what you're saying I'm not disagreeing with the points its making. The only problem I have with that kind of thinking, is that the Nazi's Operation Green was designed to work as a surprise attack, with the Luftwaffe ( the entirety of it more or less with only minimal left at home for defence) striking at the Czech air bases to immobilise the air force AND also mobilisation areas and communication systems, meaning that mobilisation might not be able to have been achieved properly. Which had the potential for the fortifications to becoming isolated from each other, and the main force of the Czech army. Throw in some bombers and it seems feasible that they could have taken Czechoslovakia in the 4 days that the Nazi General Keitel ( I think it was him anyway) identified as being the limit before the French would get involved.

To paraphrase David Vital, the Czechs could hold out in the short term, but in the long run the Germans would have won as they had superior production capabilities.

They only became strong because we enabled them to do so through appeasement. Of course, hindsight is always a nice to have, but even at the time, our intelligence reported the Germans, with their current resource levels, wouldn't have been ready for war until. at least 1942. Giving them Czechoslovakia was just what they needed.

Intelligence of all the main powers in that period was, to be honest, quite crap. Especially military wise. If you look at the figures of British estimates of the lufftwaffe, from like... 1934 onwards, they constantly ranked it as being more powerful than the RAF. When you compare the British Estimates to what the Germans actually were producing, it wasn't until around about 1939 when war broke out that we were actually starting tog et it right.

The allied powers were stupidly pessimistic with their predictions and their intelligence. The fucking Rhineland was down to Gamelin being an idiot and not realising that a vast number of the troops in the DMZ weren't armed as they were basically just construction workers.

But yes, I think we can both agree that Chamberlain was a fool to think he could charm Hitler.

FYI boys and girls,

I'm starting to keep track of the various threads offering advice that have been posted on the forum, and other threads which will be of use/ interest to people who use the forum. I'm putting them on my user-page.

I've got the ones that I know of so far, but if I've missed some it'd be awesome if you could let me know and post the link to the thread as a comment on my user-page that'd be awesome.

Likewise if you've got some websites which you've found really useful/ interesting in aiding your abilities as a writer, then leave a comment and I'll add it to the list eventually :P

At 1/27/10 06:12 PM, DizzeeRascal wrote: Indeed. If he wasn't so up himself about his persuasive abilites, he could have averted WW2, or at least started it at a point which suited the Allies more favourably.

To be fair, 1939 probably was the better moment to go to war. Anything before then that Britain got involved in might have resulted in a loss, which would have destroyed Britain economically, and possibly physically.

For instance, whilst theoretically we could have gone to war over the Rhineland and the Anschluss, and the Sudetenland we didn't have Spitfire production up to standard at those points ( or being produced at all really in the case of the Rhineland). Hell by 1938 the spitfire still wasn't functioning properly above a certain height, its engines were freezing up and it was coming crashing down. So Munich agreement acted as a way to get some things sorted out before war came, though Chamberlain clearly wasn't going for that kind of tactic, and was just being his normal idiot arrogant self.

As has been said, pace is a bit of a problem with it, but also, you don't seem to have really given the baby any character. If its able to think about those sorts of things then it should have some form of character.

Also, this is totally the thought pattern of Stewie Griffin moments before he was born....

At 1/28/10 01:27 AM, TrevorW wrote: Who are the lit mods?

From what I've seen the Mods for the forum are:

GumOnShoe
Timmy
Aviewaskewed
Tri-Nitro-Toluene
Coop83

With a few others popping in an out as needed.

Dialogue doesn't appear two be very natural. I don't think I've ever come across anyone who speaks like the way you made your characters speak.

It seems to be very much on the lines of that you're just literally having the characters say what they feel in this case. That's fine to an extent, but people don't often just blurt out things like ' My life was fucked before i met you' than k god you're here!. They word things differently.

The sort of language a character uses is one of the best ways to signify them as separate entities, so when writing dialogue, think about the character, and how they would say what you want them to say.

I also got a mixed message about the feelings of the characters in this. Part of it felt like they were in conflict about the situation of being together, part of it didn't. If that was what you were aiming for, then awesome you got it down, though increasing the length and describing the scene where this all takes place could add something to the piece in terms of the conflict I think. If that wasn't what you were going for then you need work on making the message and feelings of the characters clearer.

You can do this, as I said, by more natural dialogue, increasing description of the context of the piece, and describing the actions of the characters. Remember, that a stupid amount of communication between people is via body language, now whilst Writer's are utilising the word and we don't have a body to physically show body language to the reader, we can at the very least describe it where appropriate, especially if we're utilising a narrative style which allows for us to describe how people are behaving, or standing or whatever, which can add that extra spice to the work, and make the difference between:

He stood behind her, glaring at the room. No one was going to come anywhere near his woman.

and

He stood behind her, glaring at the room, arms folded, and his head scanning the crowd for any potential wannabe suitors who were drunk enough to try and make a move on his woman.

This is of course jsut my perspective but I hope it helps you out = )

At 1/26/10 06:31 PM, Gagsy wrote:

At 1/26/10 06:26 PM, Tri-Nitro-Toluene wrote:

Psyduck is basically Luke skywalker but more awesome.

I can almost picturing him training with Yoda now. Though I imagine your version would be much more hilarious.

Kudos.

Yoda doesn't just train Psyduck. Psyduck also trains Yoda in the art of what it means to live again. For his tender innocence reaches into Yoda's little green muppet/ CGI heart and makes him feel young once more.

This of course makes it even more tragic when the Elite Snorlax reigment storm the swamp and capture and torture Yoda to death. But through it all he never betrays our brave Psyduck's location.

God I'm going to have to actually write this now. The epic Gungan Vs Pokemon Battle on Naboo is just begging to be the finale...

At 1/26/10 06:30 PM, FBIpolux wrote:

At 1/26/10 06:25 PM, homor wrote: oh how i can't wait to stop being a hack!

thanks Fbipolox.

What's a hack...

God I hate being French sometimes. It makes it hard to detect sarcasm on the internet :(

Someone that's bad at writing :P

Currently my plan goes as this:

Brock is a blind alien from the planet Johto

Misty is Pricness Leia's replacement

Han solo is an old grumpy bastard who just wants to retire as he's fed up of this stupid rebellion shit.

Psyduck is basically Luke skywalker but more awesome.

Nartuto Wars: Return of the Raichu coming to a cinema near you!

It reads fine as a poem from what I can tell. But I dunno, something doesn't really work for me with it. I don't really get the idea that there is actually a specific thing the poem is about. I read it and it jsut appears to be a load of well written sentences about nothing.

There's nothing wrong with that per se, but I prefer poetry to have a meaning behind it, specifically one I can easily identify.

It's well written as I can see it, I'm just not sure what it is you've written about.

At 1/26/10 06:00 PM, FurryFox wrote: I'm really torn up if I should start posting here. I love writing stories about anthro characters with yiff and such but people always seem to flame them and never offer any good advice. Don't want to be posting here if that's the case.

As far as I'm concerned post away. Literotica is a valid genre, and even if the stuff has furries in it, it still counts.

At 1/26/10 05:53 PM, FBIpolux wrote: (aka POKEMON STAR WARS NARUTO FAN FICTION),

Dude, that would be epic as a fan fiction goes.

Hell I may try writing that myself when I've got time. If Darth Vader and Yoda can appear in god-damn Soul Calibre, then Ash can sure as hell be the Emperors illegitimate love child who utilises the force to control his pokemon and fight off hordes of annoying blonde ninjas.

A taster me thinks is required!

Naruto silently paced through the darkness of the death star, his chest moving slowly up and down as his breath entered and left his body. The storm trooper armour was cumbersome, uncomfortable, and hot. As he entered the engine room, his eyes fell on the tied up form of Princess Misty. Her eyes were terrified.

' Naruto! Don't! It's a trap!' she yelled

Before he could react an arc of electricity sailed through the air striking him in the chest. The attack was super effective. Somehow the Empire had learnt that Ninjas were vulnerable to electricity.

A figure walked towards him from the other side of the gangway. Naruto's vision, blurred by the attack, could barely make out who approached him. Then it dawned on him. It was HIM. As the darkness engulfed him all he heard was the rodents cry of ' Pika!' as the man in the red and whtie hat smiled...

I freaking love you Scarab. I was gonna do this myself, and you just saved me the effort = )

A thought occurs to me. Whilst I see no problem with a thread for every story/ poem/ whatever, I think a thread for every idea that people have and want to get a bit of feedback on or whatever might be a bit too much, so perhaps an official thread for posting ideas for stories or scripts to get some basic comments about the idea without cluttering up the forums?

Do some free writing. Write whatever comes to mind, see where it leads you. If you get images write them down with as much detail as you possibly can.

Do that, and you'll see just how easy writing is. The hard part is planning it out and editing it so its good. But worry about that later if you're problem at the moment if just putting pen to paper so to speak.

This is an old kids poem i wrote ages, back this could very well be on my userpage, I don't remember.

Either way I felt posting it here might help kick things off in this forum properly.

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The Battle for the final crumpet

There once was a battle, of which there's a tale,
That a fight broke out 'cause the bread was all stale.
Let me tell you this story, and trust me it's true,
And just pray this event doesn't happen to you.

In the middle of May, when the whether was nice,
A group of friends went out with enough to suffice
The needs of twenty and ten. T'was such a shame
There were fifty of them, and they all had their names.

There was Hare, Duck and Gerbil, Rabbit and Mouse.
Cat, Dog and Weasel, and of course the Wood Louse.
Bear, Bat and Ferret, Crow, Magpie and Budgie,
And then there was Mole, who was a little bit funny.

They sat themselves down in a quiet forest glade
And laid out the picnic straight out in the shade.
Out came the jam tarts, the doughnuts and the crisps,
The butter, the marshmallows and liquorice sticks.

The friends started eating, and had so much fun
And before they all knew it, the picnic was gone!
But the friends were still hungry, which was a problem
As the only food left was a crumpet between them.

'That crumpet shall be mine,' snarled weasel the thief
Who swiftly nicked it and tried to hide in the heath.
But a stone knocked him over, with a curse and an oath,
He dropped the snack which was picked up by Stoat!

Stoat ran a mile, the friends they gave chase!
Budgie flew up and slapped stoat in the face.
Crow tackled Budgie, crumpet dropped to the floor,
Sat there a while, as the best friends played war.

Then Mole wandered up, as he wasn't fighting,
Ate the crumpet with a smile that was truly delighting.
'This Crumpet is lovely,' he called as he scoffed!
The friends stopped and cried 'He's gone and eaten the Lot!'

'Now chums,' pleaded Mole, as his friends all advanced,
'How about we forget this and all have a dance?'
His friends paid no heed to his cries and his pleas,
Surrounded him quickly brought him down to his knees!

'No friends, I am sorry! I was just hungry'
'Oh bother' cried hare 'He just made me feel sorry.
Come along chaps lets all go home to bed and tea
Now how do we explain to mom just where I've been?'

So all the friends all went home, back to families,
To tell them a tale of friends and camaraderie.
The Lesson they all learnt? Friends will be friends.
Despite their faults, always stick with them to the end.

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Thoughts comments and criticisms please.

Click

We don't allow this sort of stuff.

Specifically unfinished chapters etc not be allowed.... though thats the least of whats wrong with that thread to be honest...

At 1/26/10 05:11 PM, DumbassDude wrote:

It'd need to be ruled up with a certain word count per section, and limits on whether the writer can completely change the story using just his part and such.

Yeah basically; Limited word count, restrictions and etc. Only thing that concerns me is that one person will be writing their part, finish it, only to find someone has already posted the next part.

It's why you set out who can post in that collab at the very beginning, and the mods delet anything that isn't by the set specific individuals.

Not too difficult to do, we just need to set up a few guidelines to begin with. As Gum said, the old Writers Guild had a system for it and that worked.

Just as long as I don't have to come in here everyday and lock a bazillion threads from people saying ' ZOMG! LOOK AT MY AWESOME NOVEL IDEA' and it turns out to be a rehash of either star wars or Lord of the rings I'm happy.

Gum, I'm thinking a forum rule that being a dick in reviewing anything is a short term ban is perhaps a necessity so as to encourage constructive criticism?

At 1/21/10 11:41 AM, ArmouredGRIFFON wrote: Now I must cough all the time, and he looked at the score and replied.
But you haven't ticked cough on the list.
No because it's not a COUGH. I need to cough to get the mucus out
So you cough up because you choose to.

No.
I cough up so I don't die. If I don't cough up the mucus I choke, and my body tries to spew it.

Which means you have a cough of sorts, and that you filled the form in wrong.

If you are coughing, of any sort, then you shouldn't have put 0 down on the form.

Therefore it is not a cough at all, and that's why I gave it a doughnut for a score, because my 'coughing' is something I must do to prevent, choking.

A cough is defined as 'a sudden noisy expulsion of air from the lungs that clears the air passages' Source

So if you are doing that, regardless of reason, you are coughing, and as such should put down on the form how severe, or regular or whatever your coughing is and not indicate that you'renot coughing by putting a 0 on the form.

I really don't get your logic for putting a 0, just because you *have* to do it to stop from choking, doesn't mean its not a cough. Unless I'm missing something you're saying here, this jsut doesn't make sense.

I know this isnt the main point but this part just baffles me a the moment.

Of course it's fucking cronic. I've had to cough shit up from my lungs for OVER a YEAR. Does he even know how to define cronic. Possibly not because the boots he was wearing told me he was a homosexual.

Wow... this has what to do with what exactly?

Basically from the rest of your post I get the impression you're complaining because you got a shit member of staff, who didn't give you a proper diagnosis, and because of that somehow the entire NHS is corrupt.

Its not corrupt, its just forced to work to timetable and targets, hence the shitty questionnaire.

Also, generalisation much? Bad experiences of one individual does not equal the entire system being ' ZOMG FAIL!'

At 1/26/10 12:49 AM, STEM wrote:

At 1/26/10 12:47 AM, HazeStigma wrote:

At 1/26/10 12:44 AM, AnonymousAlchemist wrote: You're going to need some help. YOU HAVE MY SWORD!

And my axe!

And my life, for Aiur

So damn tempted to just the lock the thread now so this awesome will not be ruined.