Ok I have a short story due tomorrow for English and it's only supposed to be a few pages 2.5 minimum and I'm already done with three pages and on to page four and I plan to keep going. Thing is I'm not sure if it is "school appropriate" so you tell me. Does this sound right for an Eight grade english story, also im in high ablity, its a program for advanced kids. pretty much the opposite of sped classes (and please only serious responses.)
It was a cold January night. Steve was watching the Super Bowl, it was Steelers vs. Seahawks. His wife Jennifer was sitting next to him on the couch crocheting. Steven was enjoying the Super Bowl on the brand new satellite dish he had just installed himself and was quite satisfied with his work seeing as how the picture looked crystal clear. But little did he know that his satellite dish was actually broadcasting a third-party signal that the manufacturer didn't know about, a signal that was about to be picked up by an advanced alien race.
The aliens had been on a quest for universal conquest for many decades. Their strategy was simple yet effective. They sent out hundreds of unmanned probes to distant worlds to investigate for possible life. The probes stayed in orbit around the world, disguising themselves as stars, and took extremely magnified pictures of the surface of the planet and then analyzed them. If the pictures showed any signs of life then the probes sent a signal back to the mother ship and it would send out one lone spy to infiltrate the planet and investigate. If the spy detected any signs of life he sent word back to the mother ship and they would begin an invasion. The aliens themselves were somewhat to the resemblance of humans, except they were grey and had elongated rectangular fingers. And their eyes were on short sort of plump stalks only inches from their heads. Also most aliens were at least 6 feet tall. They called themselves the "Grinto". They were waiting to hear the outcome of their first strike on a planet in the Virgo Stellar Stream galaxy when they received a signal resembling one from a probe. They traced it back to a planet in the Milky Way galaxy, not far from their current position. The signal, alerting the alien over minds about the habitation of the planet, was coming from Earth. They decided it would be best to dispatch a spy right away. Anyway back to the tale of Steven and Jennifer.
The game was over, Steelers beat the Seahawks and won the Super Bowl, and Steven and Jennifer were asleep in there bed when suddenly there was a light tap from the ceiling, this alerted Lucky ,the family dog, and he immediately grew aware. As he was sleeping on the foot of the bed this also awoke Steve and Jennifer. They, again, heard a light tap from the ceiling. Since they had been robbed a few months ago, the reason they bought Lucky, they had been extra cautious about anything they heard in the night. Steven had even bought a handgun, which he keeps under his pillow whenever he goes to sleep.
He slowly reached for the pistol while he got up from bed. He stood in front of his closed bedroom door listening, waiting. He heard a window slowly open and he knew what was going on. He whispered to his wife in a hushed tone, "Jennifer call the police, I think someone is in the house." She quickly, and quietly, obliged. He heard light rummaging coming from outside the living room just down the hall and to the left. He slowly opened the door and the second his hand touched the knob, no the second he moved, the house was silent. No one moved, Jennifer was about to dial 911 when the silence came about. She dialed the numbers into the silenced phone then out a pillow to her mouth so as to muffle her voice to everyone but the phone. " 9-1-1 operator, is this an emergency?" piped a cheery voice on the other line.
"Yes," whispered Jennifer into the phone, "We think someone is breaking into our home please send someone out now." She whimpered, following it with her address. The dispatcher said she would send out an officer now. She slowly hung up the phone and the rummaging had continued.
"I'm not going to take this," said Steve as he again reached for the knob. Jennifer pleaded to him not to go and reassured that the officer would be here soon. "I know," hissed Steve," But I'm not about to sit idly by while a stranger vandalizes my house, and he's about to learn that." He said as he loaded the handgun. He slowly turned the door knob then opened it slowly. He was glad he had recently oiled all the hinges in the house, just about a month ago I believe. He slowly walked down the hall. The rummaging continued letting Steve know that the robber was not yet aware of his presence.
Steve was ready, "I have a gun," he yelled as he turned the corner and quickly flipped on the light. No one was there. The room was completely empty except for the possessions on the floor and such. This let him know someone was in the house. He searched around but saw no one. He heard strange noises from above and looked up. Just then the creature pounced. Steve was down on the floor wrestling with the beast until Jennifer ran away and bashed it in the head with a baseball bat. It flew against the wall with a mysterious green liquid streaming down its head. Steve fired three rounds at it and one hit its mark, right in the chest. The creature went down in a slumped mass of flesh. Steve slowly stood up and his wife helped him. "What do you think it is?" enquired Jennifer.
This is where I'm at so far and am writing a little more of it. I'm on my third can of mountain dew. Also the creature kills Steve and Jennifer but I don't know how to properly have that in an 8th grade story for school. If I was just writing a story I would put "it jumped down on Steve and slashed his head off in one sweep." but that prolly won't fly in school so plz gimme some help.
