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Page five is finally here! And it seems omega dog has been revealed....sort of.
Enjoy!

At 1/7/14 08:26 PM, maficmelody wrote: Perhaps your dialogue could be a little more conversational. I can guess the diamond came from a diamond store and that possession of said diamond, without a receipt, would get one "hauled off" to jail. Less talk and more illustrations to.. illustrate a point seems more comic appropriate.

I've included what I had in mind:

All I can say about this is that at least you tried to help me on some points of the comic. So yeah, thanks.

At 1/6/14 05:15 PM, JackDCurleo wrote: At 1/6/14 04:52 PM, RayLeeWorld

it was sort of a joke right there

No dude, jokes are funny.

Okay, dude, it wasn't really a joke, it was more of a reference, it's not gonna hurt anyone.

At 1/6/14 04:54 PM, gween123 wrote: In the art realm, this is a lot better than your previous thread, but it could use a lot of work. As a story, it seems cut-and-dried and the dialogue seems a little underdeveloped.

Riiiiiiight.

At 1/6/14 04:31 PM, JackDCurleo wrote:

At 1/6/14 04:10 PM, RayLeeWorld wrote: Page 4 is finally up everyone!

"...We could be richer than Bill Gates..." I'm sorry but that stretches my willing suspension of disbelief past the breaking point. Why would these anthropomorphic animals who live in the future of a (presumably) anthropomorphic animal ruled world still have Bill Gates in it? Even if say the anthropomorphic animals came along some time in the future or whatever I'm sure they'd have a different paradigm of wealth whom they could be richer than. World building, hombre.
I'm not going to bother saying anything about the art since it won't do anything.

I'm sorry if you didn't get that line, it was sort of a joke right there. So even in the future, bill gates may not be around but he's still recognized. I apologize if you didn't understand.

Page 4 is finally up everyone!

I'm sorry i'm keeping you all waiting today, but I was very tired yesterday and couldn't start on page four much, but now i'm working on it today, i'll post very soon hopefully.

At 1/2/14 11:08 PM, RayLeeWorld wrote: Page 3 is up! Did some changes with the text and stuff.

My fucking mistake, I wrote bank instead of jewlery store, here's the revise text version.

Page 3 is up! Did some changes with the text and stuff.

At 1/2/14 06:59 PM, Flowers10 wrote: Well, your not doing a very good job.
All the pictures you have posted have perspective in them, its just not very good. :P
basic perspective is quiet easy though, just google 1 point perspective to start you off.

Well, I feel there's so much perspective these days, I'm not gonna use as much. Sorry.

At 1/2/14 05:38 PM, Flowers10 wrote: Learn some perspective, it would make your comic allot clearer

I try my best not to use much perspective as I can, but thanks anyway.

At 1/2/14 05:03 PM, ThePsychoSheep wrote: It's really not a colossal change but it really helps the panel to stand out more

I see, well, thanks anyway.

At 1/2/14 04:45 PM, ThePsychoSheep wrote: The second panel where the buildings are shown,that black spot on the left corner(I presume it's a cloud?).

Sorry about that. That was actually a picture of city I posterized with.

At 1/2/14 04:37 PM, LadySeraphina wrote: I really enjoy the backgrounds. Unfortunately I have bad eye sight so I couldn't read the dialogue.

Sorry, I'll try putting the dialog much bigger when I post the next page.

At 1/2/14 04:34 PM, Daverom wrote: I van see what you're trying to do with the last panel. But with the forced perspective and how small the silhouettes are the ladder would be about 30 feet up with each step being a bodies length apart.

Right.

Second page is up.

Just so you know, both pages were done three days earlier, so, therefore, i'll hope to start page three tomorrow. Keep in touch everyone.

P.S. sorry if one of the speech bubbles look too small.

Okay, everyone, I thought it was time to show my comic to everyone. Keep in mind that THIS is a short comic you're about to see.(See the title on the thread for yourself) Anyhow, enjoy, hopefully.

(P.S all hate comments will be deleted, you've been warned)

Here's the first page:

At 1/2/14 04:24 AM, BrainworkInProgress wrote: im waiting for the second page! >:(

Work on it noa! >:(

I'll post it on a new thread tomorrow!

Also you really need to work on your attitude. You expect people who a have no idea who you are to give a shit about what you're doing, you assume your audience is made up of idiots, and you just act like an asshole when people try to help you out by giving you constructive criticism. If you ever want anyone to respect you or your work, you really need to learn how not to be a cunt to strangers.

I deeply apologize my friend, so there is no need to swear now. What's done is done.

At 1/1/14 11:23 PM, Fifty-50 wrote: Oh okay. Thanks. Good luck on this endeavor of yours.

Yeah, no problem.

At 1/1/14 10:54 PM, Fifty-50 wrote: Well that's your choice friend, not exactly a great choice but it's yours regardless. I have a question. What exactly are you planning about this comic?

I'm hoping to this comic soon. If you read the description, you'll know.

At 1/1/14 10:44 PM, Fifty-50 wrote:

At 1/1/14 10:38 PM, RayLeeWorld wrote: How so?

It will unfold just like this if you continue on this path. Come on friend, you should keep your feet planted on the ground. Even great artists should listen to others' inputs no matter how it is presented.

It doesn't matter, I like what I do, I just ignore people who would critize me most of the time.

At 1/1/14 10:32 PM, Fifty-50 wrote: To you sir RayLeeworld, you should try to be as calm as you can regarding this situation, don't lose your cool mate. I've already seen this kind of story a considerable number of times and it will not end well.

How so?

At 1/1/14 10:23 PM, Ryanflorian wrote: Just finish the comic. You will always get people who don't like it and people who do.
But any ways is this going to be like a love story or something, it's hard too tell.

Well, if you read the description, it's going to be sort of a superhero type comic.

At 1/1/14 10:07 PM, JackDCurleo wrote: The mistake was coming in here all talk and then when you showed actual work, having a terrible attitude and choosing to respond to the criticism I and others gave to you in the way that you did. If you'd like to stick around, feel free to post more of your art, and keep in mind that a lot of us giving criticism know what we're talking about (for the most part) and that our advice is for your benefit.

But I like what i'm doing, and I don't wanna change that. I'm sorry, but I made up my mind.

At 1/1/14 09:51 PM, JackDCurleo wrote:

At 1/1/14 09:40 PM, RayLeeWorld wrote:

At 1/1/14 07:36 PM, JackDCurleo wrote: If you don't want critique then you are in the wrong place, hombre. Also watch your mouth young lady.

Thanks, i'll take it as a compliment. Cunt.

Now that's just rude.

I'm sorry, I guess it was a mistake posting this thread in this forum.

At 1/1/14 09:38 PM, Template88 wrote: best thread this year

Your point is?

At 1/1/14 07:36 PM, JackDCurleo wrote: If you don't want critique then you are in the wrong place, hombre. Also watch your mouth young lady.

Thanks, i'll take it as a compliment. Cunt.

If you don't want critique then you are in the wrong place, hombre. Also watch your mouth young lady.

Thanks, I'll take that as a compliment. Cunt.

At 1/1/14 07:04 PM, Template88 wrote: 0/10

would kiwisundae again

What's a kiwisundae?