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lol. you're not bad. tis all bout progression my friend. you'll get better with every word you write

At 2/21/10 03:24 PM, funnyhomeboy wrote: You know what would be great?

If someone created a gadget that would monitor somewhat of ranking system. I don't know if it would be allowed, but I wonder if someone could be able to call out challenges with this gadget?

Wishful thinking on my part...

this is mothafuckin newgrounds. that being said an application/gadget that could serve as a ranking system/challenge system could easily be made. We'd just have to find a coder to help us out. I could help with the art and setting up the interface if we do

I enjoyed both poems and they way they differently used the metaphor of glass. with that said i'm gonna have to give it to Funnyhomeboy. The metaphor of you being glass made by the creator slides perfectly with life and believing in god. I'm not religious but i appreciated it. as for nothingmater I enjoyed your metaphor of a glass wall holding you back from the life you seek. I'd say smash it. lol. good job to both of you

Funnyhomeboy: 2
Nothingmater: 0

lol nice man. keep it up

feelin like joking around...so i shall try

With this
I shall try to act a fool
i say the word try
cuz since i left school
thing's have gotten serious
the world's became delirious
so it's been either die
or become fearless

i'm see that i fail
yet again
at attempts of tomfoolery
i just need my pen
you can keep the jewelery
my pages are my shine
i stare into them stupidly
they're lunarly
to me...
at least
my sky is trapped in paper
the words of a hermit
an old fool's caper

...yea...i fail. lol

At 2/21/10 02:31 PM, nothingmater wrote: walking thought the mist
leadin the that abyss
with no aim in my mind
with no goals to be left behind
i walk onward into the unknown and to hope
i come out once again
to meat those who wait for me on the other side
thought my sickness in the fog,
and my challenge is the substance of false hope
and with the love on the other side of the fog, i will reach my goal and achieve what i hope and worked dearly for

lol you wrote this like 3 mins before i requested one. i like it. it's funny how you began rhyming. "walking into the unknown..." and then you went back to your old ways. "I come out once again" and went back to your staggered approach. Lol. as i said i like it it was a good mix and your rhyming drew me into your more indepth words at the end. make sure your words are correct though. i'm pretty sure you used a wrong one in your second line

At 2/21/10 02:20 PM, nothingmater wrote: iunno i liked your last one, but then again the one before was also good.............. i think i'll pass when i go up ageist you in poem battles >.<

lol nah i'm losing my battle right now. i read your poems too. i like them but i just wished you rhymed more. i did see you said you hate rhyming poems. but i read a lot where you could have flowed nicely but went for the more staggered approach. it's all in perception and opinion so i can respect your decision. but i would love to see you do a rhyming scheme. can i request? =]

lol alright here's another one. extra points if you know where the last two lines are from

i see the paranoid smoke
as it clouds your thoughts
keeping what you were taught
in this we world walk
so how can i tell you
that i only wanna cuddle;
in the night
when i know your pain and struggle;
is telling you otherwise
but i'm not other guys
i just hope you know i see you
through a brothers eyes;
yet in a lovers guise
cuz by any other name
a rose is still a rose
and your pain is still your pain
so don't think it's a game
i don't want you feeling iffy
let's just get some bbq;
and get busy

At 2/21/10 12:16 PM, vow2thou wrote: I thought it was just that. Shame though, since that line doesn't match up with the standard of the rest of the poem.

nahh. the poems short n simple. i'll give you an explaination of what i meant after voting's done. i want the reader to imagine for now though

First i wanna thanks u both for the critique. I love reading the feedback

At 2/21/10 11:37 AM, vow2thou wrote:

I also didn't understand the use of propane as a metaphor, as much as I tried, and it kinda alienated me, I'm afraid.

I apologize for the alienation lol. the use of propane was simply cuz a failed whistle sounds slightly like propane escaping it's tank...or to get deep. our body is our vessel for our soul. such as the tank is a vessel for the propane. trying to whistle indicates trying to free the soul. but he can't. which relates to gas fighting to leak out of its propane tank. i totally just made that up though. lol

i was gonna wait til tomorrow to write this but i can't sleep yet n started up. i saw that guy vote for b. but it came in after i started writing. sorry. lol and i can't lie. somewhere deep down i wanted c to be chosen. lol alright here we go

The man kept his breath steady as he scanned among the treetops in the nights sky. Splinters fell from his hand and brushed against his leg as they dropped to the forest below. He could feel them as they fell....and for some reason started back up his leg in a lightening fast motion that felt heavier then when they started their descent.
"What the!", the man said shocked as he turned his head to see a squirrel that was now resting on his shoulder. He took a breath looking at his furry companion and calmly said"Drag, you can't sneak up on me like that."
The squirrel squeaked in delight and jumped off the mans shoulder, moving towards the base of the tree.
"We have company" The man calmly said
With a puff of smoke and an energy that the man was all to familiar with he felt the tree sink a little from new found weight.
"I know. That's why i'm here." A kid that looked around the age of 15 was now sitting on the branch where the squirrel had been. He was tan and had a medium tuft of brown hair and a green headband wrapped around his forehead. Wearing worn, but solid clothing, a tan canvas shirt and black shorts. He looked out to the trees and faint crooked smile hinted at his lips.
"Let's go."

lol ok i'm sorry. i'm tired....blah. cliff hanger!
lol i'll leave some options though to be fair

A. The shadowed man follows Drag to fight
B. The shadowed man stays back
C. The shadowed man stops Drag from going

i'll be back sometime tomorrow probably round the nightish time =]

i'm too tired tonight. i'll have the next..."chapter?"...lol idk. i'll have it up tomorrow

just need 1 more to break the tie

At 2/21/10 01:39 AM, MonkeyV wrote: I like your poetry. Post some more, eh?

thanks man. yea. i'm kinda tired though so idk how it'll come out

the night sits heavy on my eyes
though, they never quite close
out of forty winks
i've gotten about zero

time moves slow
they say
when you don't know where to go
so a lost soul at having fun
how fast does that time flow

but my questions are never answered
just resting in my bed
my thoughts are just dancers
waiting for my dreams instead

all that being said. i'd like another battle. lol

i would definitely love if these battles took place more. and i can understand the worry of flooding the forum. but what if we made a rule that on each battle thread. among all the voting and critique. the first two people to respond with "i'd like to battle" or something like that automatically get set up against each other. then you see those two n send them pm's linkin to their thread. it might take away some of the time needed to set up the battles. n u should get someone else to be a ..."battle master?" to help u out. of course you guys would have to keep in steady communication to keep things organized. i'm not sure if it'll work but it was just an idea i had

i wish the poem battles happened more quickly cuz i wanna write more. that being said i'm just gonna start my own thread. suggest a topic if you'd like n lemme know what you think

I'm just making these up as i go along...though now that i said that i kinda figure that's obvious...but whatever

lol ok here's my first

I've been down on my luck
lucky, drowned in this muck
thirsty, laces untied
hurry, stay by my side
cuz my hearts got this divide
and the tears from my eyes
dried so long ago
but i still
have so long to go
through the rain and the snow
days i've wished i was religious
just so i'd have something to count on
other than these ten digits

this was a cool idea
here's mine

i'm walkin on a tilted plane
thinking with a crooked brain
the change, that jingle jangles
as i move
always sounds the same
the beat of my weathered cane
beats against the wooden grain
i try to whistle
but i can't
so it sounds like propane
escaping from its tank through leeks
i swear my travels more then seek
the truth from this tilted mess
i've been down
i'm going west

Lol iight i'll leave it a lil while to see if i get anymore votes. i'll be back later tonight

i'll bump it once

Hey everybody, I don't know if these are against the rules or not. but i remember reading interactive stories on here awhile ago..so i'd like to start one. until the man tries to shut me down. hopefully that won't happen though. and hopefully you'll like it. also as a sidenote. my punctuations won't be perfect. live with it.
so the story begins....

It was a cool autumns night and the chill in the air hovered above the grass in a light fog. The sky was barely visible, through the cracks in the forests canopy, letting in silver rays of moonlight that illuminated the unkempt blades and dirt path that ran it's course through the trees.
"Shit." A shadowed figure said to itself as it easily jumped over a tree that had fallen to the forest floor never breaking his stride. He looked down to his right hand where a brazen light escaped from between his fingers. "I must get the E'rvo stone back to the village before sunrise."
With that he closed his eyes and drew in a deep breath, feeling the power of the stone surge through his veins as orange sparks ran up his arm to his body. He let out his breath. His eyes opened wide and focused. Determination sat like a burning fire in his pupil and he skidded to a stop, leaving a trail of dust behind him. He stood at the balls of his feet and bent at the knees contracting all of his muscles. He smiled,"I haven't felt this good in awhile."
He released, like a rubberband stretched and then let go. Leaving an indent in the ground below, he soared through the cover of the trees, the wind whipping at his face. He came down and quickly touched the top branch of one of the forest oaks, launching himself back into the nights sky. He loved the view, the Great River to his right, sparkling under the moon's light, The Brother Mountains up north where the Air Tribes lived, The Valley of Dust, where strange animals rested, and most importantly, his home that was....The shadowed man's thought process was interrupted by a glint of gray-silver he saw out of his left eye. In midair he twisted his body with inhuman speed and caught the glint, a stone tipped arrow, with his right hand, his feet above his head. He came down, landing gracefully on the edge of a branch and snapped the arrow in two spanning the night for his attacker.

Ok this is the fun part. I'll give you 3 or 4 choices every story and you choose which you would like me to pick. I'll wait til i think there's enough votes and then continue with the story. so the choices are:

A. He flees....he has to get the stone back to the village before sunrise
B. He confronts his attacker
C. A squirrel climbs up the tree onto his shoulder

k.

I'd like to give this a try. entering the colosseum or what have you

still looking for a coder. lemme know if you're interested

bump

bump

At 12/28/09 05:19 PM, Toast wrote: I was just joking around obviously, but if you want honest criticism then it's more the animations that I have a problem with than the graphics. The menus are clean and nice (despite the annoying line in the middle of buttons), the graphics are pretty good. But the tweens kinda ruin everything. I'd rather see a smoothly animated fbf character than one that can wear different clothes (woo-peedoo) but is crippled by the obligation to use tweens. Unless, of course, the tweens are necessary because there are items you can get in the game that are visually displayed on the character. But of course I can't know that because you refused to post further details.

i was joking as well. i called you a wiseguy for cryin out loud.
anyways. i know what you mean about the animations. and there are different weapons that you can receive. i just don't want to put the gameplay out there for everyone to see.

At 12/28/09 05:02 PM, Toast wrote:

At 12/28/09 04:52 PM, Ponz wrote:

Based on that fact, what conclusion can you logically reach about the quality of your graphics?

you a wise guy huh...i know how to deal with wise guys....p.s...f u.

tough guy behind your computer? say that to my face fucker not online and see what happens

-_-..lol
i wasn't being tough. that was an honest and genuine fuck you for talking about my art. Anyways. Even though i doubt i'll get anybody interested given the turn this thread has taken.

I'm still lookin for a coder. lemme know if your interested.

At 12/28/09 04:35 PM, Toast wrote:

At 12/28/09 04:31 PM, Ponz wrote: I was making a game recently. all the graphics are done. but my coder vanished. =/

Based on that fact, what conclusion can you logically reach about the quality of your graphics?

you a wise guy huh...i know how to deal with wise guys....p.s...f u.

=P

hah..

Also, we don't want to PM you for more details. If you got stuff to show then show it. It's not like someone's gonna steal your animations.

there's a link showing what was made. PM is to acquire the finer details of the game.

What's up everybody

I was making a game recently. all the graphics are done. but my coder vanished. =/

I'm looking for an experienced coder to join up with me too finish the game.

Here's a link to what the other coder had done so far. I'll give you a more in depth description of the gameplay and what i'm looking for if you think you can handle it and pm me.

http://spamtheweb.com/ul/upload/2609/721 42_game.php

PM for more detailss

I can't help you with AS. but with animation all it takes is practice and some practice and some more practice. Repetition is the father of learning. so yeaa...PRACTICE.

Look up some animation tutorials. Here's one that MindChamber did that gave me some good ideas.
http://pulp.mindchamber.net/article.php?
article=89&page=3

orrrr.....you could just post up some recent stuff..