Posts by legionbear

30 Forum Posts by "legionbear"

Response to: Lycanthropy(looki ng for feedback) Posted August 26th, 2011 in Writing

will do thanks for the advice I appreciate it

Response to: Lycanthropy(looki ng for feedback) Posted August 24th, 2011 in Writing

Sorry about the lack of indentation I copied it from another file that I wrote it on

Lycanthropy(looki ng for feedback) Posted August 24th, 2011 in Writing

It all started with a bite to the neck, a bag dog bite one might call it, but I know better. I know that this scar is a constant reminder of the demon that dwells in my soul, my curse. When I was bit I knew immediately what was going to happen. In fear for my family, I left my mother and brother behind so that my blood lust wouldn't choose them as my first victims. Scared of what was to come I kept running until I lost too much blood from my life changing wound. Praying for a fast death I laid on the ground too weak to move, and that's when the sun set and everything changed.
The moon looked really pretty I thought, that is until the change happened. My skin burned and my blood became boiling hot. I just couldn't take the pain, but it got a lot worse. The burning on my skin kept getting worse and it became very itchy. That's when I started feeling hair grow from all over. Then that's when the true pain began. It felt as if all the joints in my body were snapping and I couldn't breathe because of the overwhelming pain. I realized that my bones and muscles were changing and I couldn't even cry because it hurt so much. After that my finger nails grew into sharp claws, and my cries suddenly emerged as a loud blood curdling howl. I just wanted to be home with my family is the last thing I remember thinking before my vision went blank and the demon took over.
I awoke hoping that last night was just a dream, but I quickly realized that I was on a mountain in the middle of nowhere. I looked at my shoulder and saw the wound had already become a scar and immediately my head began to hurt as the memories of the previous nights terror rushed into my brain. I was completely terrified by my actions that I could do nothing but cry. I just remember thinking," I killed all those people and destroyed all those lives." Curse the animal I have become!
Several months have passed since that night and I wish I could say that I have gotten used to the pain of the transformation but it still hurts the same every time. However it is only second to the pain I feel in my soul when I wake up and start remembering my actions from when the demon takes control. There have been hunters following me day and night in order to put an end to my reign of terror. Survival is difficult because I am unsure if I deserve to even live after all the pain I caused. Everywhere I go I leave a trail of bloody corpses and I can physically feel that my soul is long gone from it. Still confused by many things in my life I know for a fact that my childhood, no my life as Todd Cunningham is over. I am now the beast and I curse the night every waking minute I am in control for stealing my life away from me.

Response to: Porphyria Posted February 3rd, 2011 in Writing

Thanks for the honesty. The dialogue I messed up in terms of grammar to capture real life speaking in terms of the character Abel. About some of the other stuff you guys are right and I will do better. Finally to the one who said I have nothing here this was my response to Twatlight... erm I mean Twilight lol, but it was just a test run to see if I could bring back the feeling of what vampires are supposed to be. Again thank you for your thoughts

Response to: Porphyria Posted February 2nd, 2011 in Writing

At 1/30/11 07:58 AM, AROSOFTHEDESERT wrote:
At 1/29/11 08:51 AM, legionbear wrote: I'd like some feedback and other ideas would be greatly appreciated thank you ^_^
Besides some minor capitilaztion errors you're pretty spot on. Im not sure if you did this on purpose but Abel's lack of diverse vocabulary makes him seem alot more wrathful, and arrogant. Another thing, after each qoutation, start a new line. This will make it easier to read.

"That monster Abel is going to come and kill me." Amellia said.
"New line here."

I had written this a long time ago and decided to copy and paste it via NG to get feedback and I did do the arrogance thing on purpose thank you for the feedback :D

Response to: Porphyria Posted January 29th, 2011 in Writing

I'd like some feedback and other ideas would be greatly appreciated thank you ^_^

Response to: An Examination of Conscience Posted January 29th, 2011 in Writing

I'd like some feedback and other ideas would be greatly appreciated thank you ^_^

Porphyria Posted January 29th, 2011 in Writing

"Porphyria is what people call the vampire's disease. In our world people feel that this disease is a myth or that its just straight up fake. However there are many who have this disease, many call it a curse but I call it a blessing, People don't take kindly to what I do. Fuck what they think!!! They don't understand that a mans gotta eat, and besides I been hunting people since before I became a vampire. It did get harder to do since I got a record. Damn I fucking hate cops, they're just like other humans except they think they're badge protects them from my wrath. The names Abel, and as of now though I have a new target, another vampire named Amelia. If I consume her I'll become more powerful. I'll get two of my favorite things, Power and murder. I hear she has a kid sister, whose human, hehe. This means I can have some fun with this after all, I cant wait to see the look on Amelia's face as she is drained of her very life".

( Meanwhile at Amelia's hideout)

" I hear that monster Abel is coming to kill me" said Amelia. " That's right what do you plan on doing about this sis" said Amelia's little sister Maria. " I plan on killing him first, in fact ill draw him out and challenge him to a fight to the death" said Amelia. Maria then says, " are you sure that's wise he has killed so many, he is bound to know how to fight". Amelia then laughs and says," I wanna see him outfight hot steel". Amelia then pulls out a Revolver with the word justice engraved on it". Maria then says," don't underestimate him, they don't call him the Blood Moon for nothing". Amelia then says," its a name, it doesn't mean anything, his knives don't stand a chance against my bullets. Maria send him this letter".

(back at Abel's hideout)

" So the bitch wants to fight me. Hehehe the bitch got a death wish, it could be a trap, but a trap to me means free food hehe, I gotta meet her at mid night in Central Park. Hmmm sounds like fun. I'll kill her and her cunt sister".

(at Central Park)

"How did I know you were gonna show", says Amelia. Abel then smiles and says," I love a party, and by the way your sisters kinda cute maybe me and her can have a good time when this is all over hehe". Maria then looks at him in fear and runs behind Amelia. Amelia then says," who says your gonna be alive when this is all over, I don't plan on sparing you". Abel disregarding what Amelia just said gazes at Maria and Maria's fear then turns into trust, and love. Abel then says, I'm ready when you are beautiful hehe". Amelia then smirks, pulls out her gun and shoots Abel until her clip empties. Abel falls dead, then Amelia reloads her gun and says," Maria are you ready to go". Maria then takes another look at the corpse and says," is they're a reason why I feel sad". Amelia then says," that will wear off soon"."Damn you drew blood you bitch hehe". Amelia then turns around and notices Abel's knife up to her throat, Amelia then says," how is it possible, your a monster!!! I may not have been able to stop you, but someone will". Abel then laughs and says," yeah your probably right but when that day comes you wont be alive to see it so what does it matter to you hehe". he then slits her throat and drains her dry. Abel then looks at Maria with Amelia's gun in her hand and says," I was gonna kill you, but then I saw your face and I realized how beautiful you are, and I think you feel the same about me, now if you want I can show you the life you never lived". He then puts his knife away and looks at her again. Maria then looks at Abel and puts the gun down and cries a little bit and says," I did not think murder can bring about love but it has, and now that I know you feel the same way I understand that even you have a heart, now please turn me, I trust you and I think I love you." Maria then runs to Abel and starts hugging him. Abel then hugs her back and says," I knew this was gonna be fun". Then he looks down at her and breaks her neck. He the drains her lifeless body and returns to his hideout.

" Some people are just too naive I swear. Some people just ask to be killed hehe. I wonder if they're are any other vampires for me to drain, I feel more powerful already, I hope if there are more then I hope that they are more of a challenge because tonight was easy, what a waste of a life hehe." Abel then cracks his knuckles and says," time to go hunting", he then gets up and searches for his next prey.

An Examination of Conscience Posted January 29th, 2011 in Writing

A man sits on his chair with nothing but his thoughts, a shot of Vodka, and a pistol. He sits and examines everything in his mind. From his great times with friends and people, to his encounters with death and failure. The man takes another shot of Vodka and then sees two men approach him. One wearing an all black suit, and one wearing an all white suit. The man then asks,"who are you two?". The man in black walks up to him and says," ahhh Johnny boy you know who I am, you just don't recognize me". The man in black then pulls up a chair, sits next to the man and pours himself a glass of Vodka. Then the man in white says," Johnny I understand your pain, and I know your situation". The man in white then pulls up a chair, sits next to the man and lights a cigarette. The man then asks," why are you two here?". The man in black then says," well were just here to keep you company while you think". The man in white then says," yeah and were here to help you examine your conscience in case you need it". The man then trembles and says," where do I start im so confused". The man in white tells him," well why don't you start with your friends". The man then says," yeah! my friends they've always been great to me". Then the man in black says," yeah they were but what about Paul, remember when he died, how upset you were. Also remember the other friends you had that betrayed your trust and left you on your own". The man then tears up and says," that's right some of my friends left me in very bad shape". The man in white then says," yeah some did but what about Jake who helped you out when the others betrayed you, and he helped you get through Paul's passing". The man in comfort then says," that's right he was there for me". The man in black then smiles and says," what about your love life". The man then starts choking up and says," that's right my love life was horrible". The man in white then interrupts and says," what about Jessica, she was great to you". The man in black then says," yeah but remember that cunt cheated on you for some other asshole". The man then breaks down and says," yeah she did! and I never gotten over that". The man in white then says," well how about your own personal achievements". The man then says," yeah that's right I have a good job and I finished school with flying colors". The man in black then laughs and says," ohhh yeah well think about your failures and how they stack up to your achievements hehe". Then man then says," that's right I have few friends, no love, and I have to cry myself to sleep in order to make it from day to day". The man also continues on to say," I don't know what to do help me please". The man then looks to his left and right to see that the two men are no longer there. The man then takes another shot of Vodka and stares at the pistol.

Response to: Review Request Club Posted June 29th, 2010 in Clubs & Crews

Can you please rate my music so I can better myself please

Power Girl

Ayo Technologic

Robotic Storm

Response to: Review Request Club Posted June 28th, 2010 in Clubs & Crews

I am not sure how to join this club but if someone can tell me it would be greatly appreciated. Also can I please have some pointers and opinions on some of my work this being one of them. http://www.newgrounds.com/audio/listen/3 43159

Can You Guys Help Me Posted June 25th, 2010 in Audio

I have two songs and I would like an honest opinion on them and also I would like some pointers if it is at all possible. Thank you all very much

is anyone a good sprite animator Posted December 7th, 2008 in Game Development

if so can you pm me, because im tying to make my own sprite flashes and they keep coming out dumb. So please if anyone is interested in showing me the right way, PM me thanx

Response to: super smash brawl fight collab Posted June 11th, 2008 in Game Development

good luck fellas it sounds good

Response to: i need help setting up buttons Posted June 10th, 2008 in Game Development

thanx guy ill do that if i have more problems ill ask ok

Response to: i need help setting up buttons Posted June 9th, 2008 in Game Development

At 6/9/08 04:40 PM, legionbear wrote: yeah i need help with setting up buttons and preloaders i mean kuz i can make buttons but when i set em up they dont work on my flash so can you guys please help me

not bad at all anyway did the tuts and i wanna kno like do u have 2 put the button in its own frame or what oh and also no tut told me how to use a preloader its like mega frusterating

i need help setting up buttons Posted June 9th, 2008 in Game Development

yeah i need help with setting up buttons and preloaders i mean kuz i can make buttons but when i set em up they dont work on my flash so can you guys please help me

Response to: i need help with flash designing Posted June 3rd, 2008 in Game Development

thanks thats the best advice i ever gotten also can u plz explain to me how use and set up a preloader its frusterating me thank you

Response to: i need help with flash designing Posted June 3rd, 2008 in Game Development

At 6/2/08 10:50 PM, TheHeliumDominator wrote: Anyone can draw. So if your drawings are crappy don't give up there are other crappier drawings out there. My advice is to practice drawing on paper and don't rush take your time unless the if your near a deadline.

how many fps frames per second is key to u guys

Response to: how do you make a vid compatable Posted June 2nd, 2008 in Game Development

i got it now so im good