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At 6/12/09 02:46 PM, big-jonny-13 wrote:

At 6/12/09 04:58 AM, J-qb wrote: Yeah, I thought so, I think I was thrown off by the fact that Trauma seems to rhyme with Coma. Maybe it would be better if you used some complicated medical term instead of coma.

You might think so, but trauma and coma do not rhyme. Trauma rhymes with comma, but not coma. Trauma is phonetically Trah-mah and coma is Co-mah.

Yeah, that is the entire point. At first glance you would say it doesnt rhyme, then you start to wonder wether it was maybe intended to rhyme, but didnt quite....
I found it distracting, that is all I mean to say. As I said, It is your piece so keep it the way you want it, but personally I would have changed it.

At 6/12/09 07:13 AM, jagondudo wrote: j-qb that is super cool the plain eye and the head in profile kinda ruin it for me tho. but the body swooping over the planet is really nice. gives a sense of eerie quiet doom

Thanks, Means a lot to me coming from you. There is some reflection in the eye, but it doesn't really come out at this size, think I should add more? Mind explaining what you mean with the 'head in profile' bit? some suggestion maybe?

here's mine a bit rushed cause the deadline is almost over i think sorreh!

Cool as always, though I have definately seen better from you. I couldn't really make out what is what on it though...

At 6/11/09 06:47 PM, big-jonny-13 wrote: I was contemplating making the last panel rhyme, but I felt that making it completely disregard the rhyming scheme made it stand out much more. I know it's hard to portray when you read it, but it's best to read the first three panels in a light-hearted rhyming scheme, and the last panel to be a serious spoken statement. If you want to compare it to something, I guess you could compared it to something like egorapter's easter eggs, when it's all happy and light at the beginning, but the last statement is all serious and forceful.

Yeah, I thought so, I think I was thrown off by the fact that Trauma seems to rhyme with Coma. Maybe it would be better if you used some complicated medical term instead of coma.

At 5/27/09 11:06 PM, daftcrunk wrote: curious as to why i haven't seen any comments or any helpful tips on making my stuff better......i've been posting what i think is great stuff, but it seems like i'm not getting any responses ....does my art suck?....should i just pack up and go somewhere else?...i depressed...

Since you are asking for it.
As the guy above me said, you are not getting a lot of responses because there is not a whole lot wrong with your art. It doesn't really stand out though. Some things you might want to look into:
-perspective. You are using a lot of top down perspectives, which makes everything a bit dull, Top down perspectives would typically be used for getting a nice overview and stuff, not really dynamic. You could try
-> take a low view point.
-> give characters more perspective by making closer body parts bigger.
-Coloring. On your colored pieces, it is all pretty flat. You have added some shadows, but not enough. Try to add some more shadows and highlights.
- Lines. U have quite a realistic cartoony style (it is cartoony, but relatively realistic) so whether or not you keep the lines is up to you. In cartoony style you would typically keep them, in more realistic drawings you would remove them. It all depends on what you want your drawings to look like.
If you keep them, try to make them darker, i.e. Black. Now they are greyish, wich means that when you have lines on the darker areas (e.g. the green pants on the coloured drawing above this post), the lines are actually lighter.

At 6/11/09 05:41 PM, big-jonny-13 wrote: Okay, here comes a comic. The art isn't great, but I wanted to portray the story of the comic more, and the childish artwork adds to the childish idea behind the comic, which is because it takes a child's poem (five little monkeys jumping on the bed) and takes it to a whole new [darker] level.
Bigger version here.

I don't know about this one.... It looks to me like you are combining two jokes...
First you would have the joke of taking a childrens poem and making it dark. Secondly you have the joke of all the panels anding in -ead/-ed/-aid except the last one which only rhymes with itself.

I am not sure whether you intended the last panel to be seperated from the rest in that it does not rhyme, except with itself. Either way I think you should change it to something like "he suffered brain-damage, and now he is dead". That way you keep the focus on the first 'joke', and even strengthen it.

Not much is known about the Behemoth, on the rare ocasion of one of them venturing as far from the center of the galaxe as our solar system they might be seen as it passes over the sun, blocking its light.
It is though that these giants travel through space orbitting around stars and large planets, transferring the circular motion away from the star to 'jump' to the next planet/star.

At 6/10/09 05:30 PM, MeMB wrote: Damn, these contests anger me. Everybody makes these awesome pieces and I just can't get myself to make something good. I always fuck it up or lose interest halfway.

But anyway, nice pics so far! :D

Be sure to make one though, Sure you might fuck up. But it is a great way to trie something, let it fail, and just try again next week. You will (probably) see yourself improve every week.
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Not much is known about the Behemoth, on the rare ocasion of one of them venturing as far from the center of the galaxe as our solar system they might be seen as it passes over the sun, blocking its light.
It is though that these giants travel through space orbitting around stars and large planets, transferring the circular motion away from the star to 'jump' to the next planet/star.

At 6/11/09 05:02 AM, Phasoo wrote:

At 6/3/09 06:44 PM, Hyrus wrote:

you're targeting an audience who doesn't want your business in the first place. Does that make sense?

I think that whether people want to view those ads is their choice... and why shouldn't it be? Viewing the site is free. If they're not interested, they're not obligated.

You sir, just saved me a 1000 word post. I concur. I understand that you have a business to run, but when loading Metal Gear Solid Collab 1 loads before the all the ads finish, there is a problem.

Poeple!
This banner was needed since the new layout did not work for poeple using ad blocker. The banner was needed to make the layout work.
This problem has been dealt with, which might be why there is no interest from staff members anymore.

At 6/10/09 09:06 PM, LaserKarl wrote: Another robot.

Cool, although his head seems a bit flat... I cant get wether it is supposed to be flat or round.

At 6/11/09 04:03 AM, Bigfulla wrote: this is just an idea for a series i wanna stat called raven and lust: heavy metal warriors
this is just a quick 10 minute sketch of the main characters, just let us know what u rekkn:)
\m/

What kind of series? genre, animation/comic.... maybe give some more information about the characters....
Looks okay so far, not really splashing, but that all depends on what you are going to do with it.

At 6/11/09 04:19 AM, idiot-monarch wrote: Even though that works too, I do actually have a girlfriend and here's her portrait.

Ohh, nice curves on that one...
So, guessing you two are not together, could you maybe give me here phone number.?

At 6/11/09 01:02 AM, AtillaTheLion wrote: Well, if you're going complain about it so much, don't even bother to look here. I'm just posting my work here, I don't need YOUR criticisms. Sure, I could have made it into at least have the pictures together at a time to show them in fewer posts, but any way like I said at round page 1 that it's going to be her in the same pose 10x.
So if you are going to bicker about the redundancy of some of my work, don't bother giving me a smartalic response.
>8(

Actually, My post (I can't speak for johnny) was not ment as a complaint, but more as a tip. Having tens of pictures of the seme character just with different colors might scare poeple of. poeple that otherwise could have offered you usefull advice. If poeple comment to your artwork now, it will probably be about what color scheme they liked best, which is good to know, but it does not really help you become a better artist.
Personally, I think art is about putting your own feelings/emotions/experience/opinions onto paper (or music, or sculpture...). Which basically means I think you should make a piece of art which you like, examine it closely yourself, untill you are quite certain you do not know what to improve on it.
After doing this you can ask poeple for comments or critiques.
This is your thread, so feel free to do it whatever way you want to, but if you do it my way, it will prevent a lot of comments with "that sucks" or "pick a different post", or just with comments which you were already aware off.

Sincerely yours, Jables

At 6/8/09 08:11 AM, J-qb wrote:

At 6/2/09 07:10 AM, J-qb wrote: Yeah, I'm going for a stylistic change in this one too. It'll be more clean lines, some cell shading.
Nice theme

DAMN IT!!!
I'm missing deadlines here...
Okay, just start the 64 and I'll immediately get on it.

Thought I'd show you guys a wip to prove Im really doing something this time.

hope the pic doesnt get screwed up... Im saving it at 400% with jpeg quality 4

At 6/8/09 06:17 PM, Syth wrote: I totally know what u mean but its not really as light as you think, im doing this is a dimly lit room and getting digital versions through a camera which is totally washing the colour and removing like all the detail, when i finish ill get much better lighting and higher quality images, i mean ive drawn every hair in my eyebrow but it looks like a grey blob in these pics =[ O well.

Off course, we will only be able to give you any helpfull criticism if you fix your lighting... maybe put a little desklight on your desk, turn it on when you make your photo's. It will help us help you.

So heres update 2, note my nose isnt really that big, i just need some shading to fix it :P

It seems unbalances, Left side is bigger than right side. nostril looks bit weird

At 6/8/09 06:12 PM, HyperJive wrote: XxDaRkReDxX: I WISH. Seeing people wear my art would be awesome. Although I'm not sure I'm good enough to commercialize just quite yet. Dammit, someday.

Well, there are multiple sites that can help you with that (putting your stuff on shirts and selling them, that is), Although not every piece of art is suitable for that. I think only nrs 2 and 4 could be effectively transfered to a shirt. I would definately buy 4 on a shirt!

At 6/8/09 02:09 PM, J-DELUXE wrote:

At 6/8/09 02:03 PM, JoeTheToucan wrote:

At 6/8/09 01:59 PM, J-DELUXE wrote: chek it out

It's shite

whaT?!?

Don't post your art in other poeples threads

At 6/8/09 02:40 PM, AtillaTheLion wrote: So anyway here is the return of showing the color cycles of Meeka-Flower.
Here is her in a pink scheme.

I think you should stop posting 10 versions of every drawing you do, just with different colors. just pick one or two of your favorites, or even just ask poeple what colors they think it should be in.
This whole twenty similar drawings thing is making me dislike this thread.

I like that this is taking off!
I will be making some in due time, I know I said I would have them two weeks ago, but just be patient, I will make them.
I going to do some traditional media stuff this week, so I might do a few cards to get the feeling back.

At 6/8/09 03:22 PM, SirNightOwl wrote: I always approve of test-object. The last few entries have been really good people! By the way if you wanna follow test-objects example and have your characters interact with the castle feel free. Just put some thought/originality into it. Or I'll beat you with a baby seal carcass.

UPDATE.

My drawing is in there, but my name is not....

I love the whole hanging on the hairy princess thing, I was thinking about doing a dragon kinda like that, but horizontal.... Ah well, I might still do it.

TheChomper.
Zulucs' one is good too, it just seems a bit pale to me.

At 6/8/09 05:25 PM, Syth wrote: Unforutantely I failed my art exam as a whole (what!?) so I'm re-sitting it this year and thought I'd take pictures of what im drawing and give you guys regular updates just like last time. It really helps to pass the time, as ill be up for hours doing this. So here what ive got so far, make sure you comment and tell me what u think so far and how i could maybe do better.

The pic is too bright to see any lines...
I can just barely make out the outlines of the face, some I can't.
As for the actuall comments on the piece itself, the eye looks too light, but this could be part of the problem mentioned above. It might help to put in the lightest and darkest tones as reference. Otherwise you might end up with an entirely too light/dark piece.

At 6/2/09 07:10 AM, J-qb wrote: Yeah, I'm going for a stylistic change in this one too. It'll be more clean lines, some cell shading.
Nice theme

DAMN IT!!!
I'm missing deadlines here...
Okay, just start the 64 and I'll immediately get on it.

At 6/7/09 07:30 AM, AwesomeDave wrote: Your perspective is off on that one.The human head is NOT that massive, I swear it. Keep at it!

anime

sigh, some poeple will never get it. Ah well, might as well just let them draw anatomically challenged characters if they fell like it.

At 6/7/09 11:02 AM, doubleone wrote: Dear 3 people who are actually reading this,
I'm giving up on this thread. Lately, I haven't had the time to draw. I have been struggling to come up with ideas, and some days I am just to uninspired to even draw anything. I have shown little improvement and so far. 90% of the thread has just been me posting my crap, and I really can't get myself to do it anymore. I appreciate the people who gave me criticism, it has helped me stay somewhat positive. I am not giving up on art, but I'm not going to do it here. Any mod that sees this please lock this thread.

Too bad, My advice would be to try and participate in as many collabs/contests here on the art forum as possible. (think COW, CHOW, Notepad drawing (closed), castle newgrounds drawing)
Not only do they give you a starting point for your drawing (you have some general direction, which often makes it easier to come up with something), they generally have quite a nice, constructive ambiance. They are a great way to improve your skills.
Keep it up!

At 6/7/09 04:31 PM, test-object wrote: Second.

COOLIO!
a (no all caps posting here!)

At 6/7/09 05:41 PM, AtillaTheLion wrote:

At 6/7/09 04:10 AM, XxDaRkReDxX wrote:

The "Dance of the virgins"

No. Here's a hint, (if I could put a music track to this) it's a popular internet dance that goes to a Swedish techno song.

it's not swedish, it's moldovan.

At 3/25/09 01:51 PM, TheL1st wrote: the TRUTH about cats... revealed

you messed up...
its: When Cats eat you, you die

At 6/8/09 07:28 AM, FullFistMaria wrote: http://www.newgrounds.com/bbs/topic/1060 612

Nah, I think this is something different. the thread you linked to is all about the trading of drawings/paintings, with the only restriction being the size.
This thread would be more about creating character cards, just to show off.
I think it would go here

At 6/8/09 03:57 AM, Crystalspike wrote: All my latest stuff shall stay here until the year is done.

It is art forum policy to allow one personal showcase thread per user.
This will porbably be locked, So I advise you to repost these drawings in your other thread

At 6/7/09 02:54 AM, JKAmovies wrote: -EASTER EGGS-

Nathanielmilburn (maybe)
AustinBreed.
Sucho-Complete.
Harrah-Incomplete.

J-qb-Incomplete.