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I don't really know. I'd have to see where they live and get the mileage between us.

Really.

You're asking newgrounds about your teenage drama. Have you any common sense, let alone have you even taken the time to see other threads like this?

I apologize, but there are some places you just shouldn't talk about this stuff. I can guarantee AT LEAST 5% of NG's population is pedophiles fapping off to hentai, only to see stuff like this on NG.

Really.

*Shakes head*

Okay, rant over. Sorry guys, I'm just tired of seeing stuff like this on a BBS, when it should be on your blog.

I think I've hatched a plot for my submission. I'll be focusing a type of Pico that revolved around the Victorian era. It will be interesting on how different their communication was (Ex. Thou, Thy, or in formal terms you, etc.) along with how strict their moral codes were in society.

I might have to do a little more resarch on birthdates of major figures and such.

I'm playing FF 13 right now, and I have to say if you're a fan of the freedom FF games in the past originally had, you'll be disappointed.

After the battles, you instantly heal, and the pathways (until the end) are very linear. I'm sorry to say, but this doesn't really feel like the FF game many hardcore fans of the series would truly enjoy.

Also, the game can get very 'chick flick' like in some parts of the game. As of now, I'm running around with Vanille and there's some crazy 'happy song' playing in the background with some high pitched voice telling me to "Step into the rainbow."

*Shudders*

At 4/3/10 10:29 PM, Wolf-Raven wrote: *picks up head out of the mass of papers and schoolwork*

Say what?

What.

There, I said it.

Happy now?

Speaking of impatience, do you know when our battle shall be arranged?

Yeah...I totally forgot about the competition, but I have an entire Spring Break's worth of free time, so I think I might do something.

Hopefully.

In a literary sense, repeating words can be a very influential writing tool. A great use of 'refrain' (in literary terms) is when you are trying to get a point across in poetry.

Many bands use refrain to put more emotion and emphasize an important part of their songs. If you feel that the repeated use of words is hindering the diversity of the vocabulary that you would want in your writings, I'd suggest keepin a thesaurus on hand.

Or, if you're an internet-relying person like me, I'd suggest you go to thesaurus.com. They are great when it comes to verb, adjective, noun, adverb...etc, synonyms and antonyms.

At 4/4/10 12:51 AM, MiroDK wrote: If the kid doesn't want to, then leave him alone. Don't force what you want upon others.

There's gotta be some kind of lawsuit against that stuff by now.

I love it how people take Wikipedia to be a legitimate source.

It just goes to show that they have not gone to college yet.

At 4/3/10 03:48 PM, formulario wrote:

AVG FTW

O yeah april Fools!

Sorry man, you're kinda 2 days late to the party.

At 4/3/10 04:26 PM, AlphaCentauri wrote: Your dick looks like ran-over mushroom/sausage? I don't even know how to picture that.

Anyways, when you see her tits just laugh your ass off at them and tell her they look like deflated balloons.

NO! The woman is always right!

A woman offended= no SECKS!

:3 Just take it like a man.

At 4/3/10 04:04 PM, Sensationalism wrote: Never try to understand math, just do what they tell you.

Really.

When I was in Geometry I was trying to actually understand why this stuff went here and there, and I ended up with a B average. It might have been the teacher's difficulty to teach us until we understood what she was trying to force into our skulls.

I'm in Algebra 2, just doing whatever the crap my teacher says and I'm coasting on the A+ gravy train!

Anywho, .999999 does not equal one when you are taking the 'absolute' number, when you are taking the 'estimate', then you round up to one.

Fractions are the way to go, IMO.

It didn't dawn on me to think the police as "angels"

Yeah, I think I should have used the 'blaring lights' to give the police officer a more luminescent and ominous presence in the poem. Live and learn, live and learn.

Watch. I bet I'll be in this one too.

I'll laugh if it actually happens.

Whoops.

DM: 2
Zac: 3

Just to clear that up for you. :T

DM's was very nicely done and showed a unique, lighter view on saloons. Overall this flowed extremely well and I had little troubles when I read it aloud to myself. This is a good one, even if you don't think it is. Good job!

Zac's take was greatly put, albeit the subject could be a little bit cliched. The imagery really helped me to 'see' the poem, and not just read it, albeit suffering from some hiccups in the rhyme scheme. All in all, the emotion was the shining factor in the poem.

In the end, I'll have to say I liked DM's approach to the sentimental values to a saloon. Zac, your's was greatly laid out, but took a few dents when it came to the structure of some areas.

;)

Great job, both of you.

I did not imply that the police are substituting a family, it's just the message that police are protectors.

The fact that the boy said "Amen" in a sense is that he is seeing the blue men to be his guardian angels. I am not 'anti-family' in any way, I've been raised in a very good family atmosphere.

It's just that stuff like this actually happens in the world.

Yes, it is disturbing, but it does not exempt itself that it should be ignored and met with passiveness.

Blah...that's my punishment for drawing outside the lines I suppose.

At 4/2/10 01:53 PM, TrevorW wrote: Ponz -- I really enjoyed yours. The pacing was fitting and the form was interesting. The tone was ironic and mellow, which I enjoyed. I liked the twist you took.

Reathen -- I am a bloody sucker for epic sounding poetry...and I use religion a lot in my poetry (though I have no God myself).

Choosing between these two poems was HARD. I have to nit pick!

I feel that Ponz could have punctuated better and Reathen could have made better use of tone...and for me the tone kills it.

I vote for Ponz.

Funnyhomeboy: 0
Ponz: 1
Reathen: 1

Well considering my poem hasn't even been reviewed I can tell that it people think it sucks. I need to be more critical of my work.

I'm disappointed and happy.

It's such a hollow victory.

Aww, come on guys, I don't want to win by default on a 3 way match!

:/

At 4/1/10 11:27 PM, funnyhomeboy wrote:

At 4/1/10 11:26 PM, HecticCircleCrap wrote: It's been like this for nearly 24 hours, dumbass, you notices just now?%u2248%u2248%u2248

Look at the calendar, it's April Fools day.

You fool.%u2248%u2248%u2248

Sorry for the double post.

*Ahem* I mean April Fool's day.u2248%u2248%u2248

At 4/1/10 11:26 PM, HecticCircleCrap wrote: It's been like this for nearly 24 hours, dumbass, you notices just now?%u2248%u2248%u2248

Look at the calendar, it's April Fools day.

You fool.

At 4/1/10 11:21 PM, Sh0T-D0wN wrote: THE LAST TIME I ATE A PACK OF GUSHERS MY HEAD TURNED INTO A FUCKING CACTUS%u2248%u2248%u2248

Those commercials messed with my head as a child.

"I don't want to have a fruit head, mommy!"

"Just eat the darn gushers!"

At 4/1/10 11:20 PM, Twilight wrote:

At 4/1/10 11:14 PM, OneWordName wrote: A CHALLENGER APPROACHES

A really faggy challenger...%u2248%u2248%u2248

Who the fuck is that%u2248%u2248%u2248

He's one of them Jonas brothers.

Kevin Bacon would wipe the dancefloor with any Jonas, IMO.

...damn you Kevin Bacon.

Okay, here is my submission.

Daddy yells.
Mommy screams.
Beating is heard,
and the pain teems.

Mommy cries,
clothed in bruises.
Glass is broken,
He screams, "Excuses!"

I lie in bed,
I hear the fray.
I clasp my hands,
and start to pray.

Tears roll down,
my fragile hands.
Not knowing of,
my father's plans.

"I've been told,"
I whimper slowly.
"That you are loving."
I whisper lowly.

"That you made me,
and stitched me with love.
But why am I in hell,
when I was sent from above?"

I pause in silence,
I take in a breath.
Crashes may stop,
but I feel constant death.

"My teacher told me,"
I continued my prayer.
"That the cops are protectors,
that they're always there."

I say "9...1...1..",
and take the phone,
I dial the number,
and hear plates thrown.

"I saw you, bitch!"
"Come quickly, please!"
"I hate you, you cunt!"
"Oak Street, by the trees!"

"Worry not, little boy
it will be alright.
We'll guide you out of
this dreadful fight."

Thwap-Smack-Jab!
This pain can't last for longer,
for the time comes for
the end to the hate-monger.

The sirens blare,
the shouts are exchanged.
Just end this quick, daddy,
don't be so deranged.

"Get on the ground!"
The blue man exclaims.
Mommy is grateful,
but her pain inflames.

Mommy falls to the ground,
broken and weak.
I rush to her side,
Her love is what I seek.

The blue man steps out.
"It will be alright.
the fight is over,
let this darkness come to light."

The blue men lead us out,
away from the sins of men.
I look happily to both of them,
and quietly say, 'Amen".

Sorry it's an hour late, but here it is.

Oh well, just 3 more hours for me and tomorrow all this kevin bacon stuff should be gone.

Is it alright if my submission is a little late? After I had posted my response for my first battle, I took quite a long nap, and now I have less then an hour before the deadline. I have a poem set in mind, but I don't think I would be able to finish such with less than an hour of time.

Here's one. I tried to make this difficult.

Hopefully you can see it. *crosses fingers*