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At 12/2/11 11:04 AM, Ryan wrote:

At 12/2/11 12:37 AM, Gagsy wrote: "I look over at them and usually frown slightly or narrow my eyes. To let them know that I know they are looking and I cannot see reason why they feel the need to."

-Gagsy on dating advice

Sounds just being insecure to me.

Well, it was cute for a while, but I think you just like the attention, are extremely self absorbed, and are headed down a vile path.

I am probably just close minded though.

Was anyone able to get all the DK coins in DKC2 or 3? I found most of them, some were difficult to find, others impossible.

Has anyone used this program before? I have a copy of it, it is quite intimidating.

Mohabot and ThermalLaser were PMed, no response.

Here is a new track with guitar slots, both rhythm and lead.

If you are interested download the track and email me the guitar tracks without signal processing (other than guitar FX) so I can mix it properly.

The tempo is 120 with 4/4 time, if you need a click. PM me for my email.

Whats funny is I am a producer not a rapper and I have trouble believe any of you guys that posted can do better.

At 12/1/11 11:20 PM, Timchik wrote:

At 12/1/11 11:04 PM, escobargames wrote:

At 12/1/11 10:53 PM, Timchik wrote:

I am not derailing it, I am explaining my interpretation of a ghetto superstar.

Your like a fat guy trying to hide behind a stop sign.

You're as intelligent as the average student of 2011.

ohwait

Intelligent people don't attack people for no reason, you seem to be of the bottom barrel, you and your homies.

At 12/1/11 11:18 PM, platypuspwn wrote:

At 12/1/11 11:04 PM, escobargames wrote:

At 12/1/11 10:53 PM, Timchik wrote:

I am not derailing it, I am explaining my interpretation of a ghetto superstar.

Your like a fat guy trying to hide behind a stop sign.

You're like a retard in a calculus class.

Whats wrong with retards? Atleast they have more swag then your pansy ass.

At 12/1/11 10:53 PM, Timchik wrote:

I am not derailing it, I am explaining my interpretation of a ghetto superstar.

Your like a fat guy trying to hide behind a stop sign.

At 12/1/11 10:42 PM, Darthleather wrote: Well, I've said my piece.

Discuss.

You can troll better.

At 11/30/11 01:44 AM, DeftAndEvil wrote:

At 11/28/11 08:42 PM, escobargames wrote: I tried to tell you.
I tried to help you.
Inside, I felt you.
I cry without you.

InternalWarfare is correct, but somewhat vague and unhelpful. Take this first stanza. It is exceedingly simple--which is not the problem. The problem, I think, is that there are emotions here, but the reader can't relate because you are simply telling us how you feel for no reason. Also, poems about heartache are stale by nature.

Well I think its obvious whom I am referring to in this stanza. Although I express heartache there is a bigger picture to the poem.

You helped me see, the one and only King.
I fly without you.
I'm tired of you.
One day, I hope to see you at the gates.

Line 5 has no connection to the next two lines. (I assume) She helped you find (again, I assume from the text) religion. While still holding fast to the religious ideals/dogma, you thanklessly disregard "you."

I am trying to portray a relationship with the 'King', not a religion. The irony is she helped my relationship with him because in Christianity we were 'living in sin'. Line 6 has a connection because I am saying I will go to heaven and she will not in the current state that she is in. Although, I hope she will change one day.

I figured you would not listen.
Yeah, I know, you're not any worse than my friends.
I was just playing a game.
It's called life, most people play it the same.

Well, aside from the egregious change in tone and language, which becomes very informal (and a bit whiny), this stanza doesn't do much to get whatever you want to get across. Is this poem about sharing your feelings, or is it about playing the game of life and being caught in the rat race (a cliche in itself). It's ok to write about both, but your poem just took a sudden detour.

I am trying to blend the two. Why is a detour a bad thing?

I look up to the players who made it to fortune and fame.
The world looks down upon them, but I say to hell with this game.
One day, this flame will cease to exist.
If I only had one wish.

I like the role-reversal that the world looks down on the rich and famous, but that's not really so. Why would you quit the game then, although a better question is why did you look up to them in the first place.

I think it is, they certainly are judged for it. I look up to them because some of them come from nothing then get to the top, and everyone tells them they won't, and they stick to their guns and eventually make it. I don't see anything wrong with money or fame despite my religious beliefs.

Lines 14 and 15 have no connection. You say "this" flame, but you have never mentioned anything about a flame, or something that could be symbolized by a flame/fuel. And then you get to wishes...

I am referring to the 'King' who keeps me going, but eventually I will die.

I would use it on you.

I am trying to take you through the poem to the last line to say, despite all of this, and what I desire, I would give it all up if she would find God.

Careful with your choice of words. "Use" connotes that it's like a tool you are taking for granted. "On" connotes petty harassment.

I don't mean to bust holes in your poem, but this is the Writing Forum. I owe it to you to point out things that could use work.

Thanks for the help, I appreciate it.

At 11/1/11 08:04 PM, Painbringer wrote: Nonexistent is what you are before you are born and after you die.

How would you know?

At 12/1/11 05:19 PM, MiloBased wrote: Why are women so obsessed with money in a relationship? AS a male i can say that if a female was poor that wouldn't have an impact on me at all.

You seem to have an obsession with sexism.

At 12/1/11 03:35 PM, akmeteor wrote:

At 12/1/11 03:33 PM, escobargames wrote: They should call their church Hill Billys R Us

That's almost as ignorant as the church itself.

Almost.

I get the feeling anything I say you will have a problem with because you're a piece of shit.

:Almost

Happy Birthday Mr Roger

They should call their church Hill Billys R Us

At 11/29/11 07:10 PM, tox wrote: To address your thinking that the belt is overpriced...think about it like this, you will buy a new belt every 4-5 years... I wont, this belt is pure cow hide and strong as your arm,


So... is 110 still to much?

understandable, but why didn;t you get a badass one, not a lamo

At 11/29/11 11:06 PM, Back-From-Purgatory wrote:

At 11/29/11 10:59 PM, escobargames wrote: Oh, well I just try keep it open without any pressure, any guitarist is fine with me if they like my style, we probably won't live in the same area, but we could record a cd. :)

Again, you're not being very clear... but from what I can gather, you're looking for a guitarist to work with you in an e-band sort of way?

Details and pressure are two different things, you won't get any responses if no one knows what it is you're after.

Yeah , e-band. Obviously you must have some studio equipment, I have some, this track has programmed drums but I am setting up a real drum kit with mics, and I can play like this. I am going for instrumental but I am open.

Oh, well I just try keep it open without any pressure, any guitarist is fine with me if they like my style, we probably won't live in the same area, but we could record a cd. :)

Hello, I am looking for a guitar player, I have a songhere.

At 11/29/11 06:53 PM, data662 wrote: Time travel isn't possible yet >_>

we need more data

I would drain my bank account, and load the funds in suitcases, Then I would find some homeless guy, and give them to him just for the lola.

So, basically it's the building blocks of code?

Why do you guys have to judge my boy Ronald? What he do to you? You don't have to go their if you do not want too. Besides, its good for the economy anyway.

you should just choke yourself

At 11/29/11 03:42 PM, BrocoliClock wrote: Why the fuck should I show you? My dog Rex will tear you to pieces, that's what!

i hope the clock crew runs out of time soon

I'm not sure I understand what that is, help?

my homie

you guys are fucking stupid

I always wanted a toy train station, never got one as a kid.