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At 10/11/14 07:48 PM, walterwagner wrote:

At 10/11/14 03:54 PM, DarkFrostPoet wrote: A touch of Alpha for the wolf in me

Keep developing your skill!

I agree with walterwagner's comments. I enjoyed the poem, but also think the line he mentioned could be improved. In regard to the title, I think you're the only one who should really decide. I tend to leave my poems untitled because I'm a hipster that doesn't think titles are very important, so the only advice I'd really give is to just be content with it remaining untitled. Or you could be like Stephen Crane and simply number your poems as you add them to your collection.

Just sit on it for a while and maybe you'll think of one.

Also, you should consider checking out the thread I made yesterday. I'm hoping to get a thread going where people can post poems and provide feedback to one another. It's all explained in my post, so check it out if you're interested!

"Dead and Grateful"

Because I'm a loser with shitty taste in music.

Hello.

I'm going to write a poem. The next user to post should review it, and then write their own poem. Then the next user will review that user's poem, and write their own. Then, well, you get the idea...

William Wordsworth once said, "Poetry is the spontaneous overflow of powerful feelings." I agree with this sentiment, and will therefore not be imposing any sort of recommended word limit or minimum. For the reviews, however, I think it's fair to ask that they be relatively thoughtful, and should therefore go beyond a couple of basic sentences. "Reviews" can range from general responses to outright criticism, as long as its constructive. If you're seeking feedback on a certain aspect on your writing, feel free to leave some questions at the end of your poem for the next user to consider while they critique it. Hopefully this thread will gain some momentum, and we can all have a nice little place to share some poetry with one another.

Here we go!

Untitled, Bipolar, and Drunk

Soft clouds hovering above a volcano,
Sometimes dormant, still
Sometimes active, violent.

Always crying upward,
Shooting fire into the sky,
Causing red to mix with blue

It's an envelope of emotions,
Constantly at war, yet always peaceful.
Rambling, yelling, crying.
Rinse and repeat until
An apology arises,
Until the volcano calms itself,
And the clouds float on
Just for a moment, unimpeded
By billowing smoke.

Fiery violence, freeing vitriolic
Lifestyles and messiness --
Picture "Fuck you!"
Written in quotes:
Everything, everyone
Expressively literal
Nonsensically insightful.
That's all it is.

I don't know what you're saying,
Or what I'm saying,
But it's clear we're talking about something.

I say we dismantle both companies, throw out all their trademarks, and redistribute their wealth amongst the working class. But that's just me.

One of my old roommates used to trim his hair every single day. It was pretty annoying because he'd take like an hour in the bathroom each morning. That dude taught me the meaning of narcissism.

At 10/6/14 04:25 PM, Ejit wrote: Not my own, no. That'd be weird.

Would it not be weird if it were somebody else's hair?

At 10/5/14 08:28 PM, FIGMENTUM wrote: So you're a teacher/tutor/similar? You might be more suited to something less involved with the development of others if you believe that statement's a lie.

I'm a teacher. It was just a joke though, so don't worry! I'm actually a pretty big optimist, especially considering the fact that I understand just how terrible America's education system is... all that aside, I do plenty to inspire kids and fill them with knowledge on a daily basis.

I regret most things I do and say. The other day I told a room full of eleventh graders that they could achieve anything in life if they worked hard enough. I'm such a fucking liar.

At 10/5/14 07:59 PM, TehSlapHappy wrote: Either not putting all my effort into my last semester of college or going to college in the first place. I've been going back and forth about which one is the bigger one.

I've been having these thoughts lately. I'll be finishing up grad school soon, and I'm beginning to wonder if it was entirely necessary. I've already got my career lined up because of it, but I'm starting to think I could've just stuck with my bachelors degree and the student loan debt I already had. I dunno.

Just curious, is your degree not helping you out? I've got a B.A., so I know how it feels.

Also I feel like I've made some bad calls in my day that could have been easily avoided and saved a lot of grief and distress. but they're all learning phases I suppose.

Good way to look at it.

Also: Damn, I forgot about those bluehippo sigs. Classic. #respect

At 10/5/14 08:08 PM, WahyaRanger wrote:

At 10/5/14 08:04 PM, Jester wrote: I shouldn'ta done that

Yes you should of.

It's hilarious.

I agree with Wahya.

At 10/4/14 11:18 PM, hoorayjay wrote: Someone make a forum post called "Your experiences with LSD", that'll be solid.

Yes. Do that.

At 10/4/14 11:19 PM, Sensationalism wrote: too high guy

Fucking stoner over here.

At 10/4/14 09:33 PM, Jester wrote: This is good. I like this. Reminds me of Blackbird Raum. We're friends now.

YES! Exactly! Here's a cool fact: I learned about this band through Blackbird Raum's Facebook page.

You're awesome, and I'm glad that we're friends now.

At 10/4/14 08:59 PM, vicho95 wrote: 5- Future Islands - "Seasons (Waiting On You)"

Me? I'm right here.

What do you think? bad year for music? a good one? comment.

I think you should just turn off the radio. There's plenty of good music being made today across all genres and styles, but you won't find it unless you look for it. Give up on the mainstream, and listen to what you like. I personally don't really care for the music you listed, but if it works for you that that's all that matters.

Also, there will be a new Wu Tang album dropping this year so there's that.

At 10/4/14 12:23 PM, NGPulp wrote: Haven't quite gotten into liking bands that are really obscure.

Loser!

At 10/4/14 12:27 PM, Jester wrote: I'm a huge hipster queer when it comes to music, but the Whiskey Folk Ramblers stand out as a band I dig with like 12 fans

This is awesome. Thank you for posting.

I've been listening to a band called Hail Seizures lately. They're pretty dope. Here is a song by them that you most likely won't enjoy very much.

Here you go, sir. No shame in needing to educate yourself on how the moon works.

Just ask this guy.

At 10/3/14 12:25 PM, SubliminalVirus wrote: Do milk, not drugs.

I'm usually freaked out by the clown photos you post. This time was different.

At 10/1/14 10:22 PM, KillerSkull wrote:

At 10/1/14 10:05 PM, Phobotech wrote: Ryan Gosling.

He was good in Drive mostly because he didn't have to speak much.

Holy fuck that's so true.

Also, this guy here makes a better cop than an actor.

At 10/2/14 08:25 PM, Phobotech wrote:

At 10/2/14 08:24 PM, s0und wrote:
Thank you, I'm mostly just looking for sonic and naruto stuff.

Gotta BELIEVE IT fast!

I'm truly disturbed by how quickly you were able to procure that picture.

Also, I'm disturbed by the picture.

At 10/2/14 08:30 PM, TheGamechanger wrote: Do you have any tips and suggestions on how to cope with the sudden death of someone that you hold dear to your heart?

Depends on the person, your relationship with them, the circumstances of their death, etc. One of my best friends committed suicide eight days ago today. I'm still mourning obviously, but I've found that reconnecting with some of our mutual friends has helped a lot. No, we didn't all get together and hold each and cry or some shit -- we simply sat around and talked about how big of a goofball moron our friend was, sharing memories and whatnot. Typical stuff, really. You've seen movies.

I think the bottom line in dealing with death is finding some sort of community to bond with, lest you fall victim to wallowing in sorrow all by your lonesome.

Live your life twice as hard from here on out.

I'm a hippie liberal Marxist that teaches creative writing, and yet my best friend is a hillbilly who loves guns and beer.

If you keep an open mind and live your life with sincerity, you'll learn to quit defining people through generalizations and stereotypes. Every group has its snobs. I used to be one of them but then I learned to chill the fuck out. After I did that, I found myself capable of enjoying almost anybody's company.

I think I might still be a bit of a snob

At 10/2/14 07:34 PM, DM692 wrote: 1. Personal pleasure
2. Positive influence (emotional, environmental, communal, e.t.c.)
3. Advancement of humanity

I know that I'm taking this list out of context a bit, but I agree with you entirely; and I particularly like these three points you've listed. We should all seek pleasure in ways that are not only fulfilling but are beneficial to those around us. We should live our own lives and enjoy ourselves to the fullest extent, but as members of a greater community I believe we should always be keeping others in mind.

For example, somebody who finds pleasure in learning science should consider becoming a member of the scientific community. The point is to develop your interests in ways that better society. Do you love to learn? Become a teacher. Do you love animals? Get into veterinarian care. Etc, etc.

Essentially, I believe in the opposite of this drivel

At 9/30/14 10:10 PM, brandonkneece wrote:

At 9/30/14 09:53 PM, Seasons wrote: Your grandma doesn't have a car you could borrow or use to get to work? Do you have any other family members that could support you? If you can't get a job then you're fucked, because drug dealing is risky as shit.

she doesnt, my only option is my cousin who lives here, but he has three kids and he isnt ever home. so if i were to get a job i doubt i could rely on him, and unreliable people have got me into this mess already

Buy a bike. Pawn some shit or do some chores to save up and buy a bike, or some other cheap type of transportation. Look around on cl for one of those motor scooters or some shit, and buy that. Be resourceful bro you can do it.

At 9/30/14 09:12 PM, WahyaRanger wrote:

At 9/30/14 09:10 PM, Seasons wrote: Wow. You must do a lot of rock climbing or something.

I want to say something derogatory to you for being sarcastic, but you might just be bad at typing so I'll just say;

I camp and backpack when I have the opportunity.

That's good. I wish I could go camping and hiking more often, particularly since I live very close the AT. I miss going on little camping trips as a boy scout.

At 9/30/14 06:01 PM, darkjam wrote: Discuss.

I didn't know that putting jam in cake was a thing. I like jelly donuts so maybe I'd be down with some jam cake.

At 9/30/14 09:44 PM, brandonkneece wrote:

At 9/30/14 09:37 PM, Seasons wrote:
Also, you should consider finding a way to reduce your "high ass phone bill," if it's really that bad. Cancel your plan if you can and buy a burner. Sell some shit you don't need so you can buy things you do, such as food and shelter.

It didnt seem to be high until i went from making 10 bucks a hour to zero, also more to add to the list, I dont have a car or anyone to take me to work should i get a job, thanks to helping my roomate get to work (strip club about an hour away)

Your grandma doesn't have a car you could borrow or use to get to work? Do you have any other family members that could support you? If you can't get a job then you're fucked, because drug dealing is risky as shit.

At 9/30/14 09:26 PM, yurgenburgen wrote:

At 9/30/14 09:23 PM, brandonkneece wrote: Any tips?

All you can really aim for is to get a job, get steady income and find a place of your own that you can afford to live in by yourself.

Good advice right there.

Also, you should consider finding a way to reduce your "high ass phone bill," if it's really that bad. Cancel your plan if you can and buy a burner. Sell some shit you don't need so you can buy things you do, such as food and shelter.

At 9/30/14 09:28 AM, WahyaRanger wrote: Yes. I have a G-Shock MT-G. It's digital, has solar panel recharge, is satellite corrected, and is water resistant.

Wow. You must do a lot of rock climbing or something.

At 9/30/14 10:43 AM, wolfe wrote: I normally lose my watches, so I rarly wear them.

This is my rule for sunglasses.

At 9/30/14 09:00 PM, TecNoir wrote: I don't really understand the point of watches anymore other than fashion

I was about to argue against this, but then I remembered the time my watch battery died and I didn't notice for like two weeks. That made me realize just how often I actually use my watch to check the time.

Here's my classy piece. No idea where I got it.

He's a human being that's really good at swimming. There's no real reason why he should be looked up to in regard to his ethics or in relation to some moral high ground. Yeah, he's a great athlete and definitely deserves recognition, but that isn't really related to whether or not he's allowed to make the mistake of drinking and driving. He fucked up and got caught, so now he should pay the same consequences as everyone else. He shouldn't be obliged to apologize to anybody except for those who were put at risk by his decision to drive intoxicated.

The real question is, "What would Brian Boitano do?"

Article

Did anybody else read this story? What would be your reaction if you were suddenly showered in blood while riding a roller coaster?

Also, are any of our English friends familiar with this theme park? I'm genuinely confused as to how "wild animals do manage to stray onto the park during the night," despite there being a "large perimeter fence." I mean, I could understand a racoon or something making it over, but I'm having trouble picturing a deer getting through a reasonably solid fence.

Related incident: Fabio Getting Hit by a Bird While Riding a Rollercoaster

At 9/27/14 02:25 PM, i-am-ghey wrote: in the end, it is your relative competitiveness (for instance, presentation, analytical and interpersonal skills) and luck that determine whether you can earn more salary than the others and be promoted to a more senior position.

Sometimes these things are enough, but in regard to landing a job in the first place the general rule seems to be how great you look on paper. I know people that are total morons but have completed degrees in competitive fields. They're employed and steadily climbing the ladder.

I still agree with your statement, though. I just think it's an exception, not necessarily the rule.

These lists are shitty. Simply ranking countries by GDP isn't really going to say much. Here is a more comprehensive way to compare international wealth.

Nevertheless, this is a dumb way to start a discussion.

At 9/26/14 10:49 PM, WahyaRanger wrote: Well I'd rather not take meds for anything. If anything I'd just start taking Adderall so that school can stop giving me such a bitch of a time.

And I keep telling myself to exercise but I'm so laaaazy.

I have the same problem with exercising. My new incentive is that I don't have cable, but that the gym in my apartment complex does. The only show I like watching is Jeopardy! though so I'm only there for like twenty five minutes at a time, depending on whether the final jeopardy topic sounds interesting enough to stay on the treadmill.

Also, I don't blame you for being wary of meds. Depending on where you are in your educational career, Adderall may or may not be a decent option, as long as you stay smart in regard to how you take it.

At 9/26/14 10:44 PM, WahyaRanger wrote:

At 9/26/14 10:33 PM, Seasons wrote: Xanax? Exercise? Both? I don't know.

Only you know your best options.

An attempted joke.

Not at all, honestly. You should try taking Xanax for your anger problems, and consider exercising to relieve stress. I'm sorry you misunderstood my intentions.